Would You Read It Wednesday – The 34th Pitch – And Pitch Pick #7

Batten down the hatches!  I’m about to blow you away with short-windedness!

(As you know, I’m up-to-my-ears busy this week – apparently that’s what it takes to get brevity out of me :))

So.  Right down to business!

It’s time for our March Pitch Pick.  Here is a little refresher, followed by the poll.  Please vote by Saturday and I’ll announce the winner Monday.

#1  Renee

Working Title: Doris And The Scaredy Cats
Age/Genre: Fiction PB ages 4+
The Pitch:  Intrigued by the herd of petrified cats that show up at her door with their little suitcases, Doris is determined to un-petrify her furry new housemates — despite her family’s pleas to send them away before she ends up a scaredy cat, too. Doris will either calm the cats’ jitters or make her family’s fear come true — or neither. 

#2  Miranda

Working Title:  Reef Stew
Age/Genre:  Rhyming Picture Book ages 4-8
The Pitch:  When a shipwreck destroys their reef, the shellfish grow selfish and every creature’s a crab.  Can Whale stir up happiness with a single piece of stony coral?  Filled with slurps, burps, and spicy sargassum, this quirky version of a classic tale will send ripples of laughter through any school of young guppies.

#3  Rebecca

Working Title:  Everett
Age/Genre:  YA Paranormal
The Pitch:  Ever since Bria Stone was a little girl, she has had nightmares about shadow-like monsters who claim they’re coming to get her. At age six, Bria had another dream, in which a man with glowing skin told her the monsters are real.  When Bria encounters this man – who claims his last name is Everett and that he has no first name – in real life after her nineteenth birthday party, she starts to wonder: if good dreams can come true, does that mean the bad ones can too?

#4  Terri

Working Title:  First Aide For First Grade
Age/Genre: PB
The Pitch:  Mrs Fox is teaching first aide to the class. Charlie doesn’t want to listen but his best friend is listening with both ears and it is a good thing. After the lesson, the boys run to the playground to play. Zip, Zap, Zing….and Ouch. Who will help Charlie when he is hurt at recess?

Which of these awesome pitches should go to Erin Molta for her critique?

<a href=”http://polldaddy.com/poll/6106547/”>Pitch Pick #7</a>
Now that you’ve voted for last month’s pick, let’s check out the first offering from this month!

Today’s pitch comes from Delores, who lives in Guelph, Ontario,  She is retired from the  insurance industry and working on her lifelong dream of writing for children and writing poetry.  Her first step in that direction was the creation of her blogs:  The Feathered Nest and Youngish.  Her next step is submitting her pitch 🙂

Working Title:  Dustin The Dragon
Age/Genre:  Early PB (3-6)
The Pitch:  April’s room is VERY dusty but what can you expect when a dust breathing dragon lives in your closet?  Too bad April’s mom doesn’t believe in dragons, that is, not until Dustin catches a cold.

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Delores improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  Go ahead and send your pitch for a chance for it to be read by editor Erin Molta!
Delores is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!

For those of you on tenterhooks, Phyllis is currently in Italy, Australia, Vermont, and South Dakota, and possibly somewhere near Prince Edward Island as well.  I am looking forward to sharing more updates with you as they come in.

Ooh!  This just in – last minute addition!  Phyllis has had an awesome visit to Nicky in Australia!!!

Is Nicky an incredible artist or what?!

And that’s it!  Pretty short-winded considering everything we just covered!  Now, I’m off to day 2 of school visiting and looking forward to catching up with all of you, hopefully by July 🙂

65 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday – The 34th Pitch – And Pitch Pick #7

  1. Sharron says:

    YES! Indubitably! I would read and buy.

    I wondered about the question/sentence, but usually you see them at the end of a pitch. I think it would succeed here, being as it's at the beginning.

    I happen to be writing a YA about a dragon right now and my heart goes out to them. The premise is unusual, in my humble opinion. The pitch really grabbed me. Congrats!

  2. Tracy Bermeo says:

    Oh! I LOVE the illustration of Phyllis! I never tried Vegemite in my travels through Australia, Phyllis will have to let us know how it tastes!
    As for the pitch- definitely a yes! That sounds like an adorable story and the pitch was well written. Great idea for a story.

  3. Vivian Kirkfield says:

    Great pitch, Delores…I would definitely want to read more!
    I guess it's time for me to hit the pitch tab and submit one soon.;)
    Love the continuing saga of Phyllis…my daughter did a student ambassador stint down under…I remember her mentioning Vegemite. 🙂

  4. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thanks for your comment for Delores, Vivian. And yes! Definitely submit 🙂 The next available opening isn't that far away now – early June 🙂 I'm glad you're enjoying Phyllis's tour, and you're a teacher, right? You could make Phyllis dolls from my website and send them places… or think up another fun game 🙂

  5. Rebecca Colby says:

    Loved the pitch, Delores! It sounds like it will be a funny book, and humor always hooks me. I like the word play with the name and I'd love to know what April's mother's reaction turns out to be. Great job!

  6. thefeatherednest says:

    Many thanks, Susanna, for hosting my pitch this week and thanks to all of you for your kind and helpful comments today.

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