Would You Read It Wednesday #110 – Broccolilocks (PB)

Do you ever get ideas but have no idea how to make them a reality?

I am full of ideas… but when it comes to execution I lack many skills 🙂  Drawing, for example.  Doing anything at all with photoshop, for another.  Also, there are those who would say that dancing is not my forte (although I do it with a great deal of enthusiasm :))

So imagine my delight at having children who are just SO much more competent than I am!

As a result, I am finally going to have something I’ve been desperate for for about 7 years.

Bookplates!

My own beautiful bookplates!  (They are so pretty!  Wait until you see!)

They are designed, and I ordered one sheet so I can see how they look.  (Just in case there are any problems with the printing, I don’t want ten million not-quite-right ones :))

Due to the fact that the one sheet cost $3.99 and the cheapest possible shipping I could get was $5.04, I chose the cheapest possible shipping and now have to wait 14 days.

But what’s 14 days after the approximately 7 years I’ve already waited?

As soon as I have them, I’ll show you!

And then the really fun thing is that if you want a signed copy of one of my books but you live in Kamchatka or somewhere that is not right around the corner from me, you can simply purchase the book from your favorite bookseller, email me with who/how you want the book signed, and I can mail you a book plate just how you want it and you can stick it right in!

Voila!  An idea has become reality!

That is just so exciting that I think we need a snack!  I have a total craving for apple cider donuts, so

… help yourselves!  (I realize these are not technically Something Chocolate, but it’s only cider donut time for a short portion of each year and they really are best fresh :))

Now then.  Are you ready for today’s pitch?

It comes to us from Julie who has visited us twice before (WYRI #68 Eddie Brick Visits The Aunts and WYRI #75 Just Call Me The Kid.)  A scribbler of children’s stories in between chores, Julie Rowan-Zoch has visited three continents, attempted to learn 4 languages, and has a 2-3-3-3-3 phalangeal formula in both of her hands and feet. (Though not yet able to get a good grip with her toes, she has been drawing with her hands since she exchanged a banana for a crayon.)  Please come visit her on her blog and view her beautiful artwork!  (Really, it’s amazing!  You’re in for a treat so go see it!)

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: Broccolilocks
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 3-6)
The Pitch: CRUNCH! Broccolilocks has a GIANT appetite for her prized vegetable. MUNCH! But a mysterious stink leads her nose down the garden rows to find that something has been munching on her broccoli! 

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Julie improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in January so you’ve got a little time to polish up your pitches and send yours for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Julie is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to when my bookplates arrive!  Did I mention that I have 5 different ones?  So awesome! 🙂  I can’t wait to show them to you!

Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!

106 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #110 – Broccolilocks (PB)”

  7. Lauri Meyers says:
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    Yes I would read it! Julie, I'd love a little more drama and tension in this pitch. Is the skunk eating ALL of it? Is it a matter of survival for Broccolilocks? Is she entered in the big broccoli contest and now is not the time for a pest?

  8. Stacy Couch says:
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    Bookplates! Congrats! Still dragging my feet on new business cards. (No author photo. NO AUTHOR PHOTO!)
    Your pitch definitely has me curious, Julie. It's very funny and catchy, like a logline should be. But I too would like some clarity, esp. now you've told us veggie hair plays a role.
    Veggie hair. Yes!

  9. Beverly Snedecor says:
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    I actually love this pitch and might take the book home without looking through it first. It sounds like it's going to be hilarious and cute!

    I have never had a cider doughnut… 😦

  10. Genevieve says:
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    Is Broccolilocks a bunny? It sounds like she's eating right out of the garden, like a bunny. This seems like a cute, age appropriate mystery, so yes, I would read it. I would love to know more, though, so I think the pitch needs to be fleshed out some.

  12. nrhatch says:
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    Yay! Glad you're book plates are on the way to becoming a reality.

    And, yes, please . . . I'll have an Apple Cider Donut. My fave!

  13. Cally Jackson says:
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    Yes I would read it. Sounds like great fun!

    Looking forward to seeing your book plates, Susanna. I've never had an apple cider donut but you have me curious now!

  16. This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Erik says:
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    Sounds good to me! I think this is great! I like the CRUNCH! and the MUNCH! sounds! 🙂 And, YAY on the bookplates!

  23. Susanna Leonard Hill says:
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    Thanks so much for your enthusiasm for Julie, Beverly! And what??? You've never had a cider donut either? You're like the third person! So sad 😦 You must not live in the northeast – you can't go two feet without hitting a cider donut this time of year 🙂

  24. Susanna Leonard Hill says:
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    Thanks so much for your comments for Julie, Stacy. And OMG business cards!!! You just reminded me that I've about run out! How could I let my daughter return to college without addressing that issue? Guess what we're doing at Thanksgiving… 🙂

  26. Vivian Kirkfield says:
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    Oh my gosh…just LOVE the title…and the story concept…and the pitch…and the sound words…and…everything! Julie, I would definitely read this story…NOW! 🙂
    Susanna, I appreciate the cider doughnuts…one of my favorite times of year…love apples and anything made with them.:) The bookplates sound terrific…can't wait to see them. And I have to get busy writing…there is a contest looming in the not too distant future, right? 🙂

  27. Stacy S. Jensen says:
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    I'm a yes by the title alone. I wasn't able to read through all your comments and clues you sprinkled in the comments about the story. I think it may need another line or phrase to make it clear. I was confused about the main character – giant, animal? Good luck. Susanna, congrats on the book plates. … you get them just when you go digital! 🙂

  33. julie says:
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    Thanks for the encouragement, I'll be sending your email to my husband so he can sell you a car, Steve. Porsche, Audi or VW?

  37. julie says:
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    Thanks, Stacy. Love that there is an overall concensus about that extra sentence, but everyone's confusion makes it clear to me what I need to add.

  39. Lyla Anne says:
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    I would read it based on the title too. If do think that the pitch is ambiguous and would really like some clarity or some more of a plot clue. Is the broccoli muncher she finds a friend or an enemy? It's unclear is Broccolilocks is human or not, I agree that it sounds like she has broccoli hair! I really love anything that promotes healthy eating habits with children, and this really makes broccoli so much fun! Can't wait to read it, great work!

  43. Julie Rowan-Zoch says:
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    I don't know who might come back to look in the comments – but I REALLY appreciate all the help with the missing elements in the pitch! So grateful for the opportunity, Susanna, and the amazing participation from your readers!

  50. Susanna Leonard Hill says:
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    Thanks for your comments for Julie, Stacy! And yes, good point about the digital – I hadn't even thought of that 🙂 – but hopefully I'll still have a few actual books around for a while that I can use the plates on 🙂

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