I have something VERY important to say this morning!
Tomorrow is March!
Doesn’t that just give you a little pick-me-up?
March means the clocks change (a totally stupid system, but let’s not get sidetracked 🙂 ) so in a couple more days we’ll have light into the evening for those lovely after dinner strolls.
And March is the official beginning of Spring ❤
I realize that “official” doesn’t mean Spring actually comes. Around here, Spring takes its own sweet time and generally wanders in around the 4th week of April 🙂
But just knowing that in a couple of weeks it will officially be Spring is uplifting!
So in the spirit of uplifting, let’s have some cookies, shall we? 🙂
You’ve heard of Chocolate Lava Cake… today, for our Something Chocolate, let’s try Chocolate Lava Cookies!!!
Chocolate Lava Cookies
(like the nice springy green letters I chose?)
I recommend some coffee, hot chocolate, or milk for dunking! Delish! And like the commercials say, they’re part of a complete breakfast with eggs, toast, juice, fruit, pancakes, oatmeal, bacon, maple syrup, bran cereal, Belgian waffles, biscuits, muffins, and a couple of pastries!
Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Ann who recently wowed us in the Valentiny Contest with her wonderful story, The Hope Of Spring, and who says, “I’m a freelance children’s author living in Cygnet, a small town in rural Tasmania. My jazz musician husband and I love being a part of this vibrant, creative community. I write as Carol Ann Martin and am published mainly by Scholastic Australia. Visitors are always welcome at my blog, Carol Ann Martin Spinning Stories for Children, and my Facebook page, Henhugs and Ticklefeathers.”
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: The Love Song of Jubal Jacques
Age/Genre: Chapter Book (folk-style fantasy ages 8 to adult)
The Pitch: The ten-year-old narrator has been sent to stay with her grandmother on a small, green island, to convalesce after a long illness.
Her Uncle Jubal is in love with the honey-haired lady who lives on the hill. He writes her a beautiful lovesong and sings it to her, but the lady just sits on her verandah and weaves and weaves, never as much as turning her head. How can she be so cruel?
It is the child who finally guesses the secret that will enable Uncle Jubal’s lovesong to reach the honey-haired lady’s heart.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Ann improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in March, so you could get your pitch up pretty soon for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Ann is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! And I (could you tell by the beginning of this blog post?) am looking forward to SPRING! 🙂
“The time has come!” the walrus said, “to announce the winners of the 3rd Annual Pretty Much World Famous Valentiny Writing Contest!!!”
Okay.
Maybe that’s not exactly what the walrus said.
I believe he rambled on for a bit about shoes and ships and sealing wax, cabbages and kings, why the sea is boiling hot, and whether pigs have wings…
But I’m pretty sure he was getting around to the Valentiny Contest 🙂
Anyway…
I know none of you slept for the entire weekend, on tenterhooks (whatever those are… probably something the walrus was also getting around to discussing! 🙂 ) over who the winners would be!
And I’m sure you all rushed to your computers at the earliest possible moment this morning, disregarding bed head and whether or not you had packed the little darlings’ lunches yet, in order to see the results!
So I won’t make you wait another moment!
Well, maybe just one. . .
. . .since as usual I have a couple things to say first… 🙂
As always, I was thrilled to see so many wonderful stories! (Did I mention there were 160?!) Really! It is amazing and inspiring, not to mention VERY entertaining! There is just so much talent out there amongst you all! The other judges and I are blown away anew each time!
But with large entry numbers, all of high quality, come hard choices. My assistant judges and I worked hard to winnow the total down to a manageable number of finalists that we felt were truly all-around deserving of that distinction, and those were the ones we presented to you last week for your vote.
There were, however, many other entries that were outstanding in certain areas even though they might not have qualified all-around for one reason or another, or that the judges couldn’t reach a consensus on.
So my assistant judges and I would like to award recognition and a small prize to the following authors for the following merits:
1. For Honorable Mention In The Competition As A Whole: (entries we truly wrestled with not including in the finalists!)
Teresa M.I. Shaefer for A Valentine For Maia
Colleen Murphy for He Thought He Could
Laurie Batzel for The Blue Valentine
Jean James for The Princess Frog
David McMullin for Steve
Carolyn Leiloglou for Won’t You Be My ValenSPINE?
2. For Great Kid Appeal: (not already mentioned in the finals or other categories)
Greg Bray for A Squirrelly Valentine (also funny 🙂 )
Jilanne Hoffman for The Best Valentine’s Day Party Ever
Nina Nolan for Bunny Hugs
3. For Excellence In Evoking Powerful Emotion:
Jenna Waldman for Grandpa’s Roses
Amy Frost Davidson for Not Alone
4. For Original/Unique/Entertaining POV:
Liz Tipping for The Happy Little Paper (piece of paper – also nice kid appeal)
Matthew Lasley for Puppy Love (excellent job making Jed seem like a dog! 🙂 )
Laura Sealey for A Card With A Heart (card and envelope love story)
Franziska Macur for The Heart Of The Heart
M.S. Nass for Rose And Tulip
Sara Gentry for This Will Be The Year (Gerald turned out to be a gerbil! 🙂 )
5. For Humor:
Christine Rodenbour for Sweet Love
6. For Favorite Character:
Rebekah Hoeft for Grumpily Yours (we loved both Vern AND Miss Springtide! 🙂 )
Leah Kolidas for Max’s First Valentine (we loved Max and especially Lulu!)
Katrina Swenson for Grumble’s Best Valentine’s Day Ever (gotta love a troll valentine story 🙂 )
7. For Conveying A Great Message:
Mishka Jaeger for Happy Thursday
Ariane Peveto for Special Delivery
8. For Beautiful Use of Language:
Alayne Christian for Ladybug Love
9. For More Appealing For Grown-ups But Well-Written And Enjoyable! (These entries were terrific but either focused on content we felt was more appropriate for over age 12 or that had humor that we considered funnier for adults than kids)
Susan Schade for Valenswine (funny 🙂 )
Susie Sawyer for Valentine For Mom (also funny! 🙂 )
Ryan Roberts for Upside Down Valentine’s Day
Congratulations to all of you for fantastic elements of your stories! You may all email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com to collect your prize, which is your choice of one of the following: (the titles are all links so you can go see what they’re about) (and if you request a paperback, please include your snail mail address!)
The announcement of the WINNERS OF THE 2018 VALENTINY CONTEST as voted on by you!!!
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DDDRRRUUUMMM RRROOOLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!
In First Place…
Winner of the whole shebang…
who gets first choice of all the prizes…
Mary Warth for Red!!!
Congratulations, Mary, on a fabulously written poem that made us feel your character’s hope and embarrassment superbly, was very realistically kid, and was clearly very popular!!! 🙂
In Second Place
Meg Mahoney for Valentine Handyman
Congratulations, Meg, on an entry we loved for your MC’s amusingly earnest innocence and sweet desire to help his mom. Beautifully done! You get to pick your prize after Mary.
In Third Place
Rachel Dutton for Heart-Shaped Butt
Congratulations, Rachel! You had us rolling on the floor 🙂 You get to pick your prize after Mary and Meg.
In Fourth Place…
Stephanie Williams for A Valentine For Leaf
Congratulations, Stephanie, on a lovely entry with a unique POV! You get to pick your prize after Mary, Meg, and Rachel!
In Fifth Place…
Lynne Marie for A Valentine’s Day For Milton Monster
Congratulations, Lynne, on an all-around well-written and fun entry with great kid appeal! You get to pick after Mary, Meg, Rachel, and Stephanie!
In Sixth Place…
Gabi Snyder for The Valentine’s Rooster
Congratulations, Gabi! You tugged on our heartstrings with your unique spin on a Valentine’s Day pet adoption! I’m sure you get the idea of how the prize picking goes by now 🙂
In Seventh Place…
Nancy Riley
for Antsy Valentines
Congratulations, Nancy! You wrote a fun story with a perfect last line 🙂 You get to pick next 🙂
In Eighth Place…
Becky Shillington
for Hoping For Snow
Congratulations, Becky! You captured hoping for a snow day perfectly 🙂 You get to pick after Nancy 🙂
In Ninth Place
Leigh Anne Carter
for Timberdoodle Valentine
Congratulations, Leigh Anne, on a beautifully written, evocative (and educational!) entry! You get to pick after Becky 🙂
In Tenth Place
Judy Sobanski
for Mums The Worm
Congratulations, Judy! We just loved Wendell and Juanita and the clever way they managed to express their love 🙂 You get to pick after Leigh Anne!
All the winners should email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com with the subject heading Prize Winner so we can work out details for you to receive your prizes! (The sooner the better!) And for your convenience, the whole prize list is included at the bottom of this post. Carol Ann and Beth, if you’d like to choose a prize from the Honorable Mention selection of prizes you are most welcome to!
Congratulations again to all our winners – it was a stiff competition!! – and congratulations to EVERYONE who wrote and entered a story in the contest. You all deserve a huge round of applause and a gigantic chocolate heart… or lots of little chocolate hearts… or both… really, you can never have too much chocolate 🙂
Thank you to everyone who helped make this contest SO MUCH FUN, whether by writing an entry, reading people’s stories, leaving comments for the authors, and/or voting in the finals. It’s because of all of you that this contest was such a success, so many, many thanks from the bottom of my heart!
Have a marvelous Monday, everyone! 🙂
The Prizes:
– a PB manuscript read and critique from Nikki Garcia, assistant editor at Little, Brown!
– a PB manuscript critique from the superb multi-published award-winning author/illustrator Iza Trapani
Iza Trapani was born in Poland and moved to the US at age seven. Her relatives gave her a large Mother Goose Treasury, and she began learning English through those rhymes. Little did she know that someday her dream would come true and she would become a children’s book author and illustrator.
Iza’s best selling nursery rhyme extensions, including The Itsy Bitsy Spider, Shoo Fly and Row, Row Row Your Boat are widely used in schools and libraries across the U.S. and abroad. Old MacDonald Had a…Zoo? is Iza’s latest release. She is currently at work on her 27th picture book, as well as a childhood memoir.
– a PB manuscript critique (ms not to exceed 800 words please) along with a follow-up phone call if the author is interested from the lovely and talented Katey Howes, author of Grandmother Thorn (Ripple Grove Press 2017) and Magnolia Mudd and the Super Jumptastic Launcher Deluxe (Sterling Children’s Books 2018)
– a PB manuscript critique from the fantastic Lynne Marie, author of Hedgehog Goes to Kindergarten – illustrated by Anne Kennedy (Scholastic, 2011), Hedgehog’s 100th Day of School – illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Scholastic, January 2017), The Star of the Christmas Play — illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Sparkhouse Family, 2018) and Moldilocks and the 3 Scares (Sterling, pending) . Her stories, poems, folk tales and crafts have appeared in many magazine markets, including Family Fun, Highlights, High Five, Spider, Baby Bug and more. She was a first-round panelis for 2016 Cybils Awards and again, in 2017. In addition, she’s an on-staff writer for Jon and Laura Bard’s Children’s Book Insider and a book reviewer. She lives on a lake in South Florida with her daughter and Anakin, their little Schipperke, as well as several resident water birds. She has offers both critiques and mentorships for writers. You can learn more about her at www.LiterallyLynneMarie.com
– a PB manuscript critique (non-rhyming please) from the wonderful and amazing Melissa Stoller, author of The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection: Return To Coney Island (Spork 2017)
– a signed copy of Charlie Takes His Shot: How Charlie Sifford Broke The Color Barrier In Golf (Albert Whitman 2018) from fabulous author Nancy Churnin accompanied by a terrific Teacher’s Guide (created by Marcie Colleen)
– a signed copy of Twinderella from Corey Rosen Schwartz AND a signed copy of The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection: Return To Coney Island from Melissa Stoller
I can’t thank these authors and other industry professionals enough for their incredible generosity! Please visit their sites, buy and recommend their books and services to your writer friends and/or friends with kids, write them nice reviews on Amazon, GoodReads etc if you’ve read and liked their books, and show your appreciation to them in any way you can!
A group of esteemed judges gathered around our computers, armed to the teeth with cafe au lait and heart-shaped double chocolate brownies, chatting away about entries, extremely hopeful that we would reach a unanimous decision on the Valentiny finalists in a timely fashion…
…except Judge #1 ended up with a whole lot of extra family stuff – some expected, some not…
…Judge #2 had sudden unexpected actual job-related work that had to be attended to (since getting fired would adversely affect their ability to pay the rent)…
…and Judge #3 has a new puppy and is therefore suffering from extreme sleep deprivation! 🙂
Judge #4 was the only one showing up to get the job done!
As a group, we were less available, organized (and awake 🙂 ) then we’d intended!
Add to that the fact that you guys wrote such overall great entries that you threw us into a total tailspin over narrowing the field and it’s no wonder it took us so long to come up with a list of finalists! It is possible that some of us (who shall not be mentioned!) are still arguing over the finalist decision, feeling that there were other deserving entries that could have been included!
But at a certain point (preferably before the 4th of July) decisions have to be made and finalists have to be posted.
So here we are on Wednesday evening instead of Monday morning.
But we’re here! That’s the main thing, right?
And it is my pleasure to present to you . . .
The3rdAnnualValentinyWritingContest
FINALISTS!!!
And may I just say, once again, that the quality of entries in these contests is improving every time. This means there are fewer obvious standouts, almost none that are easy to cut, and there a LOT of very good ones that we have to get very nit-picky over! It is agony, I tell you! Agony!
Before we get to the actual list of finalists, I have a couple things to say. (I know you’re shocked as I’m normally so spare with my words :))
First of all, I want to thank EVERYONE who took the time and care to write an entry for this contest. You all did a fabulous job and provided great enjoyment for so many!
Second, I’d also like to thank EVERYONE – writer, reader, or both – who took the time to go around and read as many entries as you could and leave supportive comments. This means so much to the writers who worked hard on their stories. It helps them see what they did well, as well as giving them the joy of knowing that their stories were read and enjoyed. I hope you all got as much delight and entertainment out of the reading as I did! Plus, we got to meet quite a few new people which was a wonderful added bonus! 🙂
Third, before I list the finalists, I want to say again how difficult it was too choose! There were so many amazing entries. Really. I could find at least something terrific about every single one. The sheer volume of entries meant that many good ones had to be cut. So if yours didn’t make the final cut please don’t feel bad. There was a huge amount of competition. Judging, no matter how hard we try to be objective, is always subjective at a certain point – we all have our own preferences for what makes a great story. And the fact that you didn’t make the final cut DOES NOT mean you didn’t write a great story. Everyone who plonked their butt in a chair and worked hard to write a story for this contest is a winner! You showed up. You did your best work. You practiced your craft. You wrote to specifications and a deadline. You bravely shared your writing with the world. And you have a brand new story that is now yours to expand beyond 214 words if you like and maybe submit at some point to a magazine or as a PB manuscript. So bravo to everyone who entered!
Now. Onto the judging criteria which were as follows:
Kid-appeal/Kid-friendliness – remember, this is a story for kids!
Creativity in using hopefulness and success in making us feel the hope! (Not enough just to use the word hope!)
Valentine’s Day appropriateness – this is a VALENTINE story and as such must feel like it is connected to Valentine’s Day/has something to do with it being Valentine’s!
Quality of story – we will look for basic story elements and a true story arc
Quality of writing – use and flow of language, correctness of mechanics
Originality – surprise us with something new and different! 🙂
We really tried to choose stories that did the best job of fulfilling ALL the judging criteria. There were some truly wonderful stories that didn’t have much to do with Valentines Day even if Valentine’s Days was mentioned in passing – they just didn’t seem connected to Valentines – or that didn’t seem to really showcase hope although they may have used the word “hope”, or that didn’t seem particularly kid-oriented even though they were very creative and well-written, or that really had us…until the last line or two when things sadly fell apart. We tried our best to select finalists that checked all the boxes.
So without further ado, I present to you the finalists in the 2018 Third Annual Pretty Much World Famous Valentiny Writing Contest! Please read through them carefully, take your time, think it over, and vote for your favorite in the poll below by Sunday February 25 at 12 PM (noon) Eastern time.
To help with objectivity, finalists are listed by title only, not by author.
And I’d like to be very clear about the voting process. You are MOST welcome to share a link to this post on FB, twitter, or wherever you like to hang out, and encourage people to come read ALL the finalists and vote for the one they think is best. Please do that. The more people who read and enjoy these stories the better, and the more objective votes we get the better. HOWEVER (and I want to be very clear on this) please do not ask people to vote for a specific number or title, or for the story about the littlest velociraptor with the biggest hopeful heart or whatever. Trolling for votes or trying to influence the outcome is counter to the spirit of this competition which is supposed to be based on merit. I thank you in advance for respecting this.
#1 A Valentine for Leaf
Leaf had been dangling alone from a branch all winter. He watched his friends get called down to the earth one by one. He trembled in the wind, hoping for his chance. Would the earth ever call him down?
“I can’t believe I’m still up here. I hope Earth wants me at all,” he thought with a frown.
Leaf spotted children on their way to school. They held paper hearts and cards. “Happy Valentine’s Day!” they shouted to the mailman across the street.
“Valentine’s Day? We’re half way through February!” Leaf imagined all the leaves snuggling with the earth, whispering sweet nothings to one another. He was losing hope.
He pitied himself for the next few hours. Suddenly, he felt a breeze. And then a snap! Leaf was floating down. He was being called!
Leaf smiled as he picked a spot to land. “What’s that? A heart? A Valentine just for me!”
Sure enough, there was a gray heart moving across the earth below Leaf. The heart got smaller and smaller until he landed right on top of it.
“Oh, Earth! What a special Valentine you gave me! You do want me after all!” Leaf closed his eyes and nuzzled the Earth in a big hug. “I never gave up hope! Happy Valentine’s Day.”
#2 The Valentine’s Rooster
At the animal shelter, Rooster trembled.
His Valentine’s wish was for someone to take him home and love him.
On the inside, Rooster was as soft and cuddly as a chick.
But when people stopped at Rooster’s cage, they only saw his outside.
“He was a fighting rooster.”
“Looks mean.”
“Ugly.”
Rooster’s heart sank. Maybe he was unlovable.
The day before Valentine’s Day, a girl stopped at Rooster’s cage. “He’s trembling. Why is he all alone?”
“He’d peck another animal,” answered a man.
Rooster slumped. He would always be alone.
“Could a person hold him?” she asked.
Maybe I can be loveable. I’ll show her!
Rooster cocked his head and cooed.
Only his coo came out as “BAWK!”
“See?” said the man. “Ornery.”
“I’m not sure…” said the girl.
Then the girl went away, and night came.
Long. Dark. Lonely.
But a peck of hope had lodged in Rooster’s heart.
In the morning, the girl returned. “Happy Valentine’s Day, Rooster!”
The girl stroked his neck, and Rooster almost stopped trembling.
“Ahh,” she said. “You’re a lover, not a fighter.”
Rooster snuggled into the girl’s arms.
She rocked him and sang, “Rock-a-bye Rooster…”
He trilled softly and closed his eyes.
“You’re going home with me,” she whispered.
And Rooster lived happily, and cuddly, ever after.
#3 Valentine Handyman
Mom’s been quiet since Grampa died. Sometimes I see tears on her cheeks.
Dad says she’ll be ok, but that her heart is broken.
I know that it must be serious because I know hearts are important. I wonder if it hurts.
At school we decorated paper Valentine’s hearts. Mine ripped when I was cutting it out and I was mad that it was ruined. Miss Kelly taped it together but it’s not the same.
I bring Mom some tape.
She smiles, but she’s just not the same either.
I bring her a Band-Aid. Band-Aids make my cuts feel better.
Maybe it’s broken enough to need super glue.
Maybe a hammer and nails. Or a screwdriver. Or a drill.
I don’t know how to fix a heart.
As I’m falling asleep I see my Valentine heart poking out of my backpack. When I tiptoe into Mom and Dad’s room to leave it for Mom, I find her sitting on the edge of the bed. I crawl up beside her and I hand her my heart. I climb into her lap and listen to stories about Grampa. When we snuggle I know her heart is less broken because I can hear it working: tha-thump, tha-thump. Maybe it was the tape?
#4 The Hope Of Spring
Little Miss Bright-eyes Chickaree
hopped out of her nest in the cottonwood tree.
She was kind of hoping it would soon be spring
And all the birds would start to sing.
The sky would be blue, the sun would shine
And she would dance with her Valentine.
But Jack Frost nipped her nose and her toes
She snuffled and sneezed and her whiskers froze.
“I’m sure spring will soon be here,” she said
as she popped back into her cosy bed.
A day or two later she looked out again.
This time she was soaked by the icy rain.
“Forget about spring,” cried the squirrel next door.
“Winter will stay for evermore!”
Poor little Bright-eyes Chickaree,
hid in her nest in the cottonwood tree.
The world was wintry, cold and grey,
But surely spring would arrive one day!
On Valentine’s morning she opened her eyes
And goodness gracious, what a surprise!
Squirrel Bushtail was there at her door,
With a posy of flowers clasped in his paw.
“Oh, Miss Bright-eyes, look what I found.
“Snowdrops poking their heads through the ground.
“When these brave little flowers start to appear
“We can be sure that spring is almost here!”
“The sky will be blue, the sun will shine,
“And I’ll dance with you, sweet Valentine!
#5 A VALENTINE’S DAY FOR MILTON MONSTER
“Go on ahead, Matilda,” Milton prodded.
“What are you up to?” asked his sister.
“Searching for worms,” said Milton.
Alone, he emptied his backpack. Hopefully, I’ll get others to celebrate Valentine’s Day. Even if I need to sway them one monster at a time.
He counted supplies.
Chocolate candy
Fuzzy lovey
Red roses
Mushy card
Check!
He placed the gifts, then peeked from behind a tombstone.
Myrtle Magog stopped, read and ran. AHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Milton wilted.
He sifted through the toppled trinkets.
Too sweet?
Too fluffy?
Too rosy?
Too mushy?
With a heavy heart, he headed to school.
“I saw what you’re up to,” said Matilda. “Holidays are for humans. No monster eats chocolate hearts. YUK!”
“Thanks for the idea!” Milton exclaimed.
“Oh, no!” said Matilda.
Hope soaring, Milton raced off.
He dug and dipped.
He snipped and sewed.
He ruined and rhymed.
After school, Matilda found several items by her cubby:
Chocolate-covered worms,
a zombie doll,
a thorn bouquet and
a card:
Candy is rotten,
Presents are worse.
To my great horror,
I’m writing in verse.
Be my Malentine!
Slugs and Hisses,
Milton
“So maybe Malentine’s Day isn’t the worst idea ever.” Matilda took a bite of her chocolate-covered worms. “Yum, not bad.”
Milton smiled from his hiding spot. One monster at a time…
#6 HOPING FOR SNOW
When Dad says, “There’s a chance of snow!”
I dance around and whoop and cheer.
But just as I begin to hope,
I think, “We never get snow here.”
My Valentines are neatly stacked.
I’ve made each friend a special treat.
So if it doesn’t snow tonight,
at least school will be fun and sweet!
When Mom and Dad tuck me in bed,
I toss and turn and sigh all night.
As minutes tick-tock off my clock,
I peek outside and look for white.
Then suddenly, tomorrow’s here.
Mom sings, “It’s time to rise and shine!”
I look outside again. No snow.
But here’s a lovely Valentine!
At school, my friends have sleepy eyes;
it looks like no one slept last night.
“No snow—no FAIR,” they all complain.
“There goes our epic snowball fight!”
“Cheer up!” I say. “It STILL might snow—
the news guy said so on TV.”
I hand each friend an envelope.
“Now here’s a special treat from me!”
They open up their Valentines
and smile when they see what’s inside:
a cookie heart for everyone
and heart-shaped snowflakes made with pride.
“Let’s find some string and hang these up.
We’ll make it snow ourselves,” I say.
But as we work, I look outside.
“It’s snowing now for real! HOORAY!”
#7 Heart-Shaped Butt
“Help!” hollered Hen, “I must make a valentine for Cow, so she’ll love me and let me ride around on her magnificent horns. But look at this place! There’s not a speck of glitter or a scrap of ribbon! No red paper, no glue!”
“How about a feed sack and string?” Suggested Cat.
“UGH,” moped Hen. “Those horns deserve fabulous, not feed sack.”
“Scratch a heart in the dirt!”
“Dirt?! She’ll walk right through it and break my heart.”
“Heart-shaped haystack?”
No, no, no, Hen moaned hopelessly.
“Well,” Cat said, “even if you can’t make a valentine, you still have the biggest butt in the whole barn. It’s fantabulous! It’s glorious! It’s the fluffiest butt ever!”
Hen sighed, comforted. She did have the fluffiest butt.
A red feather fell from the rafters, one of Hen’s own.
She shoved her butt in Cat’s face. “My butt! Is it heart-shaped?”
“Um…kinda?”
Hen primped and preened and braided all night.
She waited on the fence for the sun to rise. As Cow came over the hill, Hen presented the prettiest, poofiest, floofiest valentine the farm had ever seen.
“Will you be my valentine?”
Cow swooned. She’d been feeling so unappreciated.
Hen perched her glorious behind on Cows magnificent horns, and off they went, best friends forever.
#8 Red
She read my face,
with just one look.
My bright red face-
an open book!
Red cheeks
Red chin
Red neck
Red nose.
She read my face
And now she knows.
I sent the card,
without my name.
but now my face
takes all the blame.
Red hearts
Red paint
Red “X”
Red “O”s
She read them all
And now she knows.
I hope that what my good friend read,
will please, please stay inside her head!
She gave a nod, a smile, a wink.
My bright red face cooled down to pink.
#9 MUMS THE WORM
Wendell Worm squiggled up to the Valentine’s Day cards.
A sign said, SOLD OUT!
“Oh NO!” thought Wendell. “How will I let Juanita Worm know I want her to be my Valentine?
Worms don’t talk. We can only think.
I have no feet so I can’t dance to show my feelings.
I have no hands to write down a love poem.
I hope I can think of some way to let Juanita know I want her for my Valentine!”
Wendell thought and thought. Before long he was all twisted up into a knot. That’s when he came up with his plan.
Soon, Juanita came inching up the sidewalk.
“Here goes,” thought Wendell.
He turned and squirmed until from one end to his other end he formed a heart.
When Juanita saw what Wendell did she thought, “That’s the sweetest thing any worm has ever done!”
She stretched herself straight across the heart to show Wendell that Cupid’s arrow had struck her, too. She loved Wendell!
Together, Wendell and Juanita wriggled off to spend the rest of their lives together digging in the earth.
Sometimes, on rainy days, whenever they get washed up onto the sidewalk, Wendell twists himself into a heart and Juanita stretches herself into an arrow…just to show their squirmy, wormy love.
#10 Timberdoodle Valentine
“I hope the Timberdoodle finds his Valentine,” I say.
We are going to watch the birds in the field that gets smaller every year. It’s Valentine’s Day.
“We have to be there before sunrise,” Mom says. “That’s when the Timberdoodles show off their sky dance.”
Quietly, we walk along the path. No one else is awake.
The tall grass tickles my hands. I see lights beside the field.
“It used to be very dark here in the mornings. Those houses are new,” Mom whispers, worried. “The birds need lots of land to survive.”
Will the Timberdoodle be able to find his Valentine?
“Let’s listen,” she whispers. “He will dance, and she will watch.”
We wait in the cold dark. And wait. And wait.
My ears hope to hear. My eyes hope to see.
“Peent!…Peent!…Peent!” a bird calls from the dark grass.
“It’s them! They’re here!” I whisper. Will he dance?
SWISH. I see him lift from the ground, and my heart soars with him. He flies high over our heads.
I hear his wings twittering like music. His sky dance makes a big circle, and he lands.
“Did he find his Valentine?” I ask.
“Peent!” the Timberdoodle calls again. Two dark shapes waddle away.
“I think he did!” Mom answers.
The sun wakes up.
#11 Antsy Valentines
“Oh no!” Mason stared at the calendar on the anthill wall. “Valentine’s Day and I didn’t get a gift for Abeegail. She’ll be stinging mad if I show up empty-legged,” he moaned. “I hope I find something on the way to school!”
He searched the meadow for clover, Abeegail’s favorite flower. Nothing, only dead grass and crunchy leaves. He checked the flower shop, but they didn’t sell clover. Losing hope, Mason walked on in the cold February wind. “My feelers are going to freeze and fall off.” He scurried across the playground, staring up at the giant humans on their way to school.
Plop! Clickity plop! Candies tumbled from a girl’s backpack. One crashed in front of him and he smacked into it. His six legs tangled together. He stared at the purple candy. “This is perfect!” he exclaimed. Mason grabbed the treat and dashed to his classroom.
“There you are,” said Abeegail, buzzing over to him. “I was getting antsy waiting for you,” she giggled. “Get it? Ant-sy?” She handed him a tiny jar, “Honey from my beehive.”
“Thanks,” said Mason, blushing. “Happy Valentine’s Day,” he said, handing her his gift. “Hope you like it.”
“I love it,” cried Abeegail, as she read the words on the purple candy heart. “Bee Mine.”
#12A Fur-Ever Valentine
Cleo licked her paw and smoothed her fur for the tenth time. She wasn’t a kitten anymore, but it could still happen.
A family with three loud little boys passed by the banner reading “Adopt a Valentine”. Cleo shrunk back against the wall. Not them.
She returned the stare of a round lady with thick glasses. The lady smelled like so many other cats it made Cleo’s fur stand up a little. No way.
Cleo batted at the shiny red hearts taped to her fence and waited.
“Awww, look. She’s playing with the decorations!” The little girl was barely big enough to bend over the fence, but she smelled good. Maybe?
The girl held out her hand and waited for her. Cleo liked that.
“The sign says that her name is Cleo,” said the girl’s mother.
The little girl smiled. “Hi, Cleo! I’m Molly. You’re a pretty kitty,”
That was a good start. Cleo walked over to the edge of the pen and gave Molly’s hand a little bump. “She’s friendly,” Molly said, petting Cleo’s back.
“Can we take her home, Mommy?”
Cleo wrapped herself tightly around Molly’s arm and rubbed her nose against her hand.
Molly’s mother laughed. “I think that’s a yes, sweetie.”
Cleo purred. She was going to her fur-ever home.
Wow! Those were impressive, weren’t they? Good luck picking! 🙂
Please vote for your favorite in the poll below by Sunday February 25 at 12 PM (noon) Eastern time.
Tune in Monday February 26 to see THE WINNERS!!!
Thank you all so much for taking the time to write (if you did), read, and vote! These contests simply wouldn’t be what they are without all of you!
I can’t wait to see who the winners will be!
Now, if you’ll excuse me, I am going to lie on the couch and eat bonbons to recover from all that reading and agonizing and negotiating.
Okay.
Not really.
I will actually be frantically trying to catch up on things I shoved to the back burner whilst reading Valentiny stories… but I could probably manage a few bonbons at least 🙂
Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! . . . now that it’s basically Thursday 🙂
Update February 19 – Sorry folks! We need more time to make our decisions between all these amazing entries! I will get the finalists up just as soon as I can!!!
Roses are red
Violets are blue
Valentinies rock
And so do YOU!
Hang onto your chocolate everyone! It’s time for . . .
Valen-tiny because the stories are not very long and are written for little people 🙂
The Contest: since writing for children is all about “big emotion for little people” (I forget who said that, but someone did so I put it in quotes!) and Valentines Day is all about emotion, write a Valentines story appropriate for children (children here defined as ages 12 and under) maximum 214 words in which someone is hopeful! Your someone can hope for something good or something bad. Your story can be poetry or prose, sweet, funny, surprising or anything in between, but it will only count for the contest if it includes someone hopeful (can be the main character but doesn’t have to be) and is 214 words (get it? 2/14 for Valentines Day 🙂 You can go under the word count but not over! (Title is not included in the word count.) If you are so inclined, you are welcome to enter more than one entry – just remember you’ll be competing against yourself 🙂 No illustration notes please!
Post your story on your blog between right now this very second and Wednesday February 14th by 11:59 PM EDT and add your post-specific link on the form below. There will be no Would You Read It or PPBF this week, so the post and the list of links will stay up for everyone to enjoy. If you don’t have a blog and would like to enter, you can simply copy and paste your entry in the comments section below. (Or, if you have difficulty with the comments, which unfortunately sometimes happens, you may email your entry to me and I’ll post it for you! susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com ) Please copy and paste your entry into the body of the email – no attachments! Please only post your entry ONCE! Either on your blog and the associated link list, or in the comment section of my post! Otherwise it gets confusing 🙂
The Judging: My lovely assistants and I will narrow down the entrants to 6-10 top choices depending on number and quality of entries (hee hee hee – you know how much trouble I have with the narrowing, so we’ll see) which will be posted here and voted on for a winner on Monday February 19th (or possibly Tuesday February 20th if the judges need extra time.) The winner will be announced by Friday February 23rd. (And there will be no WYRI or PPBF that week either so that everyone will have time to read and vote and so that we don’t confuse PPBF with announcing winners.) The dates of the judging/voting/winner announcements are subject to finagling depending on how much time the judges actually end up needing!
Judging criteria will include:
Kid-appeal/Kid-friendliness – remember, this is a story for kids!
Creativity in using hopefulness and success in making us feel the hopefulness!
Valentine’s Day appropriateness – this is a VALENTINE story!
Quality of story – we will look for basic story elements and a true story arc
Quality of writing – use and flow of language, correctness of mechanics, excellence of rhyme and meter if you use it.
Originality – surprise us with something new and different! 🙂
The Prizes: Oh, boy, do we have some GREAT prizes! I feel certain you are all highly motivated to compete for these!!!
– a PB manuscript read and critique from Nikki Garcia, assistant editor at Little, Brown!
– a PB manuscript critique from the superb multi-published award-winning author/illustrator Iza Trapani
Iza Trapani was born in Poland and moved to the US at age seven. Her relatives gave her a large Mother Goose Treasury, and she began learning English through those rhymes. Little did she know that someday her dream would come true and she would become a children’s book author and illustrator.
Iza’s best selling nursery rhyme extensions, including The Itsy Bitsy Spider, Shoo Fly and Row, Row Row Your Boat are widely used in schools and libraries across the U.S. and abroad. Old MacDonald Had a…Zoo? is Iza’s latest release. She is currently at work on her 27th picture book, as well as a childhood memoir.
– a PB manuscript critique (ms not to exceed 800 words please) along with a follow-up phone call if the author is interested from the lovely and talented Katey Howes, author of Grandmother Thorn (Ripple Grove Press 2017) and Magnolia Mudd and the Super Jumptastic Launcher Deluxe (Sterling Children’s Books 2018)
– a PB manuscript critique from the fantastic Lynne Marie, author of Hedgehog Goes to Kindergarten – illustrated by Anne Kennedy (Scholastic, 2011), Hedgehog’s 100th Day of School – illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Scholastic, January 2017), The Star of the Christmas Play — illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Sparkhouse Family, 2018) and Moldilocks and the 3 Scares (Sterling, pending) . Her stories, poems, folk tales and crafts have appeared in many magazine markets, including Family Fun, Highlights, High Five, Spider, Baby Bug and more. She was a first-round panelis for 2016 Cybils Awards and again, in 2017. In addition, she’s an on-staff writer for Jon and Laura Bard’s Children’s Book Insider and a book reviewer. She lives on a lake in South Florida with her daughter and Anakin, their little Schipperke, as well as several resident water birds. She has offers both critiques and mentorships for writers. You can learn more about her at www.LiterallyLynneMarie.com
– a PB manuscript critique (non-rhyming please) from the wonderful and amazing Melissa Stoller, author of The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection: Return To Coney Island (Spork 2017)
– a signed copy of Charlie Takes His Shot: How Charlie Sifford Broke The Color Barrier In Golf (Albert Whitman 2018) from fabulous author Nancy Churnin accompanied by a terrific Teacher’s Guide (created by Marcie Colleen)
– a signed copy of Twinderella from Corey Rosen Schwartz AND a signed copy of The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection: Return To Coney Island from Melissa Stoller
I can’t thank these authors and other industry professionals enough for their incredible generosity! Please visit their sites, buy and recommend their books and services to your writer friends and/or friends with kids, write them nice reviews on Amazon, GoodReads etc if you’ve read and liked their books, and show your appreciation to them in any way you can!
Now.
I’m afraid the time has come for my sample (because I would never ask you to do anything I wouldn’t do myself 🙂 )
Brace yourselves for mediocrity 🙂 (I recommend a large quantity of chocolate to get you through – perhaps a dump truck load or so?) and prepare for the return of Boris and Irma (who appeared in the inaugural Valentiny 🙂 )
A Hopeful Kind Of Valentine (214 words on the nose!)
Three days before Valentine’s, Irma made her list.
“I will make 32 valentines!” she announced. “How many are you making, Boris?”
“Zero,” said Boris.
“Spoilsport,” said Irma. “I hope Norman’s not a spoilsport.”
Irma cut construction paper.
“Are you making pink hearts or red hearts,” she asked.
“Neither,” said Boris.
“Party pooper,” said Irma. “I hope Norman’s not a party pooper.”
The day before Valentine’s, Irma decorated. Confetti hearts and glitter flew everywhere.
Boris ignored her.
But then she said, “I hope Norman will be my Valentine.” She sounded so wishful that Boris looked at her thoughtfully. He had doubts about Norman.
Boris made a list.
On Valentine’s Day, Irma clutched her valentines. “I hope Norman will give me a valentine,” she told Boris on the school bus.
Boris worried.
Tears rolled silently down Irma’s cheeks all the way home. She went right to her room.
Boris went right to work.
At dinner, Irma sat with her eyes downcast and said nothing.
Although Valentine’s was stupid, Boris didn’t want Irma to be sad. If only his plan would work.
He set the pink-frosted, heart-shaped chocolate cake he had made in front of Irma.
“It’s not Norman, but Happy Valentine’s Day,” he said.
“It’s perfect,” said Irma, hugging him.
“Yuck,” said Boris, but he smiled.
❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤
Everyone feeling better about their stories now? I should certainly HOPE so! 🙂 After that horror show you can post yours with certainty that yours is better! 🙂
I can’t wait to read all of yours! I’m SO looking forward to them! I hope there will be LOTS – the more the merrier! And there are still nearly 5 days to write, so you have time if you haven’t written yet. Feel free to spread the word to your writing friends as well. And your reading friends – parents, teachers, etc. The more people who read and enjoy your stories, the better!!! Also, have I mentioned the number of people who have gotten agents or sold manuscripts to editors based on the writing contest entries over the years? There are quite a few! One of these days I’ll figure out how many and do a blog post 🙂
So!
Contest Entrants, remember to add your post-specific link to the list below so we can all come read your awesome stories! (Post-specific means not your main blog url, but the actual url of the post that has your story in it – otherwise if you post again before the contest ends, your link will take readers… and judges!… to the wrong place!) Please allow a few minutes and possibly refresh your browser before deciding that your link hasn’t posted and adding it a second time or emailing it to me.
Eager Readers – click on the links in the list to visit the blogs and read the stories. And be sure to read the 76 fabulous entries posted in the comment section below!!!
Happy Valentines Week, Everyone! ❤
Scroll through the comments to find these wonderful stories!
Victoria’s Valentine – Susan
Victor’s Valentine’s Day Surprise – Sharmaine
You – Jennifer B
the most amazing fantastic special Valentine ever – Erin
I know we all have tons to do (er… it’s possible some of us may not have even given a moment’s thought to their sample entry yet! 🙂 ), so let’s get right to today’s pick! I’m sure it’s been done before, but I love it so I’m doing it too 🙂
Title: Here Comes Valentine Cat
Written By: Deborah Underwood
Illustrated By: Claudia Rueda
Dial Books for Young Readers, December 2015, fiction
Brief Synopsis: Cat does NOT like Valentine’s Day. It’s much too mushy, and no way is he making anyone a valentine—especially not his new neighbor, Dog who clearly has no understanding of how to behave! But maybe it’s Cat who is misunderstanding Dog’s intent!
Links To Resources: make Valentines! 🙂 Use colored construction paper, stickers, glitter and glue, markers and paint, fancy doilies too! Anything goes! Write a Valentine poem! Try starting with “Roses are red, violets are blue” if you need a nudge 🙂
Why I Like This Book: I love all of Deborah Underwood’s Cat books – they are so funny! I love Cat’s grumpy personality and sly humor. And I love Claudia Rueda’s art – especially her skill with facial expression. This is a story kids will relate to well. Many kids feel as Cat does that Valentine’s Day is way too mushy 🙂 And haven’t we all been in situations where we misunderstood the actions of others, or had our own behaviors misunderstood? Cat resolves the problem in this story… but he doesn’t go mushy! He gets the last word as always 🙂
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out 🙂 ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
So a couple days ago we had Super Bowl LII, and in a couple days the XXIII Olympic Winter Games will start! What is with that whole Roman Numeral thing in sports? Are they trying to be intellectual? Or is it nod to gladiators and arenas and such to make it more exciting? Who knows. It’s probably mostly so our elementary school teachers can say that yes, of course we will use this knowledge in real life! 🙂
(Your chance to make your elementary school teachers do the dance of joy – identify what LII and XXIII represent in the comments 🙂 )
You will note that our own winter writing Olympics (in the form of the III Valentiny Writing Contest 🙂 ) will start the same day as the actual Olympics (well, the sports part anyway… I think opening ceremonies are Friday.) I hope you’re all training hard so you’ll be ready to participate in top form! 🙂
Part of our training regimen should absolutely be Something Chocolate! I’m thinking Chocolate Covered Strawberry Brownies! How can we go wrong? Health food AND a Valentine twist! Sounds like the breakfast of champions to me! 🙂
Help yourself to seconds – serious training requires fuel! – then wipe the chocolate off your fingers (and keyboard 🙂 ) and let’s get cracking on our Wednesday mission!
Onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Jennifer. Jennifer Prevost is a part time nurse, full time mom of three (four if you count the dog), wife, avid reader, blogger and picture book writer of the pre-published variety. She’s dreamed of seeing her words in print for as long as she can remember (and feels blessed to have made it this far.) You can find her at her blog, Magnolias & Manuscripts (http://magnoliasandmanuscripts.wordpress.com/blog) where she’s capturing her writing journey and asking questions to authors far more successful than she. If she’s not there, she’s probably somewhere jotting down ideas, playing with her kids or chasing the big goofy dog, always with a cup of coffee in hand. (Check out @jennifergprevost on Instagram and Facebook…maybe one of these days, she’ll figure out Twitter)
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Wendy’s First Taste Of Summer
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-7)
The Pitch: Try as they might, Wendy’s parents can’t get her to break her picky-eater ways. But then she makes a bet with the owner of Millie’s Famous Melons and the results are as delicious as the first days of summer!
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Jennifer improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in March, so you could get your pitch up pretty soon for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Jennifer is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to the Valentiny Contest! I hope you guys are too! We have some seriously great prizes up for grabs! One of them could be yours! And I can’t wait to read your fabulous stories in celebration of the chocolate lovers holiday 🙂
Punxsutawney Phyllis herself will be up and at ’em as soon as it’s light to make her prediction about whether we’ll have 6 more weeks of winter or an early spring! (Fingers, toes, eyes, paws, etc. crossed for the latter! 🙂 )
As it happens, however, Phyllis and I are off to an all-day school visit the second she’s made her prediction, so you’ll have to wait to find out what she says! And we are not here to participate actively in PPBF…
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out 🙂 ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
Happy Groundhog Day, enjoy the cupcakes, and have a wonderful weekend, everyone!!! 🙂
Boy, do we have an action-packed day today, folks!
I’m not going to waste one single second telling you what the dogs found in the woods or what creative concoction I baked or what the scuttlebutt down at the post office was. Nosireebob! We’re going to get right down to it today!
First (your favorite and mine!) we have a thrilling triple episode of Straight From The Editor!
For September: You will recall Katie’s pitch: Katie – Pirate For Hire (PB ages 4-8)
Patch loves being a pirate. The beards! The singing! The treasure! There’s only one problem…he gets seasick. When his shipmates begin poking fun at him, Patch looks for a new gig and a new crew who understand him, but where to work? Patch fumbles as a barber, flounders and a singer, and fails as a jeweler before finding a place perfect for a pirate.
And here are Erin’s comments: This is cute. Though it might garner more interest if you went slightly more active and specific—even the end. Something more along the lines of: Patch loves being a pirate. “Yohoho! The shiny gold coins! The beards! There’s only one problem…he gets seasick. When his shipmates poke fun of him, Patch looks for a new gig. But where to work? What to do? He fumbles as a barber, flounders as a singer, and can’t tell a diamond from a pearl—before finding the perfect place for a pirate –((and I would say what it is)).
For October: Laura’s pitch: Laura – Gustavo’s Big Idea (PB ages 4-9)
Aliana’s little brother Gustavo wants to be in charge for the day. Knowing she’s really the boss, Aliana agrees to play along. Now Gustavo needs to come up with a BIG idea to impress his sister! As they head out to explore the woods near their Rocky Mountain home, Gustavo searches for inspiration, finding his idea in the clouds. The power of observation combined with imagination show both siblings new ways to take pride in their discoveries. Easy-to-follow hands on science project for home or school included.
And here are Erin’s thoughts: I love the concept of this pitch, but I wish you gave an example because I have no idea what the big idea is and how that correlates to being in charge. You need to make that connection for the reader, especially when you mention a science project included. An editor will be confused—is this a picture book about little brother finally being in charge or a book of scientific observation?
Essentially, you just need to provide some more information.
And last but not least, for November: Candace’s pitch: Candace – Cock-A-Doodle WHAT? (PB ages 2-4)
Clarence Rooster is pacing around the barnyard. He is the smallest rooster at the farm and tomorrow morning will be his first turn at waking up Farmer Judy. What if he’s not loud enough and she sleeps right through his crowing? He decides to hold a practice session behind the barn. Clarence invites his friends to come listen. Each one has a bit of advice for him. Now, he must figure out whose idea is the best.
And Erin’s advice: This is very cute. Everybody likes an underdog 🙂 However, it would liven it up a tad if you added more specifics. Draws the reader in. So, if you say something like, Cow says stand still to maximize loudness.. Goat says kick your feet when you crow. OR if different Roosters are giving him the advice, then include their different opinions—two maybe—just to add some color.
As always, I find Erin’s thoughts very insightful, interesting, and helpful, and I hope her words help all of you to strengthen your pitches!
Gosh! All that awesome pitching advice has left me a mite peckish! How about you? I think we should refuel with Something Chocolate before we go on to today’s pitch. As you can see, I’m on a Valentine-themed roll the last couple weeks – very fitting for this time of year 🙂 This looks easy and delicious!
I personally am not a fan of sprinkles on anything – they interfere with texture to my way of thinking. So I’ll probably make my toffee with colored sugar instead. But you guys feel free to sprinkle to your heart’s content 🙂 (Or use “jimmies” if that’s what you call them in your neck of the woods!)
Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Tim who writes under a pseudonym (Francis S. Poesy) and says, “Francis S. Poesy was born on Slipshod Island off the northwest coast of Ireland in 1961. He attended the St. Blathmac Monastary School which was well known for producing many great Slipshod writers, until the island was reclaimed by the sea in 1969.
Francis is also entirely a figment of Tim Canny’s imagination, which many have characterized as “over-active”. Tim currently writes under the pseudonym Francis S. Poesy as he always thought an author should have a much more interesting back story than growing up in the Mid-west and writing technical manuals for a living. Tim is an unpublished writer and is currently working on a presentable version of his second children’s book manuscript. His website is http://www.mulberryandbliss.com.”
Working Title: The Troublesome And Unpleasant Adventures Of Murphy The Reluctant Potato
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: Murphy isn’t like all those other potatoes. He doesn’t dream of becoming delicious French fries; of making beautiful art that gets displayed on the fridge; or of winning ribbons as a science fair project. No, Murphy is very happy kicking back in Farmer McCubbin’s cozy little garden. He has no plans for going on any “potato adventures” thank you very much. But that all changes the day a shovel turns his world upside down and getting back to the garden turns into the biggest potato adventure of all.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Tim improve his pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in March, so you could get your pitch up pretty soon for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Tim is looking forward to your thoughts on his pitch! I am looking forward to Friday, which as you may know is Groundhog Day – a big favorite around here! 🙂 Phyllis is all set to get her furry brown self outside at the crack of dawn to let us know if spring will come early! Fingers crossed…!!! 🙂
You’re lazing in bed with the comics before getting up to make pancakes with the littles!
What on earth am I doing infringing on your weekend time?!
Well, I’ll tell you 🙂
Two years ago, a bunch of folks asked for a contest to cheer them out of the winter doldrums!
The result?
The First Annual Pretty Much World Famous Valentiny Writing Contest!
(Valentiny because, like the Halloweensie Contest, it’s not very long and it’s for little people 🙂 )
We had so much fun that we went ahead with the 2nd Annual Pretty Much World Famous Valentiny Writing Contest! And that was so much fun that it seems like a good idea to continue the tradition! I mean, winter doldrums are winter doldrums and must be conquered 🙂
So here we are! The reason I’m interrupting your Saturday!
Announcing . . .
The3rdAnnualValentinyWritingContest!!!
The Contest: since writing for children is all about “big emotion for little people” (I forget who said that, but someone did so I put it in quotes!) and Valentines Day is all about emotion, write a Valentines story appropriate for children (children here defined as ages 12 and under) maximum 214 words in which someone is hopeful! Your someone can hope for something good or something bad. Your story can be poetry or prose, sweet, funny, surprising or anything in between, but it will only count for the contest if it includes someone hopeful (can be the main character but doesn’t have to be) and is 214 words (get it? 2/14 for Valentines Day 🙂 You can go under the word count but not over! (Title is not included in the word count.) If you are so inclined, you are welcome to enter more than one entry – just remember you’ll be competing against yourself 🙂 No illustration notes please!
Post your story on your blog between 12:00 AM EDT Saturday February 10th and Wednesday February 14th by 11:59 PM EDT and add your post-specific link to the list that will accompany my February 10th post. There will be no Would You Read It that week, and no PPBF, so the post and the list of links will stay up all week for everyone to enjoy. If you don’t have a blog and would like to enter, you can simply copy and paste your entry in the comments section of that post once it’s up. (Or, if you have difficulty with the comments, which unfortunately sometimes happens, you may email your entry to me and I’ll post it for you! Please copy and paste your entry into the body of the email – no attachments! And please do not submit emailed entries until the contest begins on Feb. 10!) Please only post your entry ONCE! Either on your blog and the associated link list, or in the comment section of my post! Otherwise it gets confusing 🙂
The Judging: over the next several days, my lovely assistants and I will narrow down the entrants to 6-10 top choices depending on number and quality of entries (hee hee hee – you know how much trouble I have with the narrowing, so we’ll see) which will be posted here and voted on for a winner on Monday February 19th (or possibly Tuesday February 20th if the judges need extra time.) The winner will be announced by Friday February 23rd. (And there will be no WYRI or PPBF that week either so that everyone will have time to read and vote and so that we don’t confuse PPBF with announcing winners.) The dates of the judging/voting/winner announcements are subject to finagling depending on how much time the judges actually end up needing!
Judging criteria will include:
Kid-appeal/Kid-friendliness – remember, this is a story for kids!
Creativity in using hopefulness and success in making us feel the hopefulness!
Valentine’s Day appropriateness – this is a VALENTINE story!
Quality of story – we will look for basic story elements and a true story arc
Quality of writing – use and flow of language, correctness of mechanics, excellence of rhyme and meter if you use it.
Originality – surprise us with something new and different! 🙂
The Prizes: Oh, boy, do we have some GREAT prizes! Get ready!
So far prizes will include:
– a PB manuscript read and critique from Nikki Garcia, assistant editor at Little, Brown!
– a PB manuscript critique from the superb multi-published award-winning author/illustrator Iza Trapani
Iza Trapani was born in Poland and moved to the US at age seven. Her relatives gave her a large Mother Goose Treasury, and she began learning English through those rhymes. Little did she know that someday her dream would come true and she would become a children’s book author and illustrator.
Iza’s best selling nursery rhyme extensions, including The Itsy Bitsy Spider, Shoo Fly and Row, Row Row Your Boat are widely used in schools and libraries across the U.S. and abroad. Old MacDonald Had a…Zoo? is Iza’s latest release. She is currently at work on her 27th picture book, as well as a childhood memoir.
– a PB manuscript critique (ms not to exceed 800 words please) along with a follow-up phone call if the author is interested from the lovely and talented Katey Howes, author of Grandmother Thorn (Ripple Grove Press 2017) and Magnolia Mudd and the Super Jumptastic Launcher Deluxe (Sterling Children’s Books 2018)
– a PB manuscript critique from the fantastic Lynne Marie, author of Hedgehog Goes to Kindergarten – illustrated by Anne Kennedy (Scholastic, 2011), Hedgehog’s 100th Day of School – illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Scholastic, January 2017), The Star of the Christmas Play — illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Sparkhouse Family, 2018) and Moldilocks and the 3 Scares (Sterling, pending) . Her stories, poems, folk tales and crafts have appeared in many magazine markets, including Family Fun, Highlights, High Five, Spider, Baby Bug and more. She was a first-round panelis for 2016 Cybils Awards and again, in 2017. In addition, she’s an on-staff writer for Jon and Laura Bard’s Children’s Book Insider and a book reviewer. She lives on a lake in South Florida with her daughter and Anakin, their little Schipperke, as well as several resident water birds. She has offers both critiques and mentorships for writers. You can learn more about her at www.LiterallyLynneMarie.com
– a PB manuscript critique (non-rhyming please) from the wonderful and amazing Melissa Stoller, author of The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection: Return To Coney Island (Spork 2017)
– a signed copy of Charlie Takes His Shot: How Charlie Sifford Broke The Color Barrier In Golf (Albert Whitman 2018) from fabulous author Nancy Churnin accompanied by a terrific Teacher’s Guide (created by Marcie Colleen)
– a signed copy of Twinderella from Corey Rosen Schwartz AND a signed copy of The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection: Return To Coney Island from Melissa Stoller
… and as usual I’m still working on the prizes 🙂 so feel free to chime in in the comments if there’s something you’d particularly like to win! 🙂 Or if you have clout with anyone who could offer a good prize please contact me at once! 🙂
I can’t thank these authors and other industry professionals enough for their incredible generosity! Please visit their sites, buy and recommend their books and services to your writer friends and/or friends with kids, write them nice reviews on Amazon, GoodReads etc if you’ve read and liked their books, and show your appreciation to them in any way you can!
Now then! Aren’t you feeling inspired to write the best Valentiny Story you can so you can win one of these awesome prizes? And aren’t you glad now that I interrupted you on Saturday when you can send the kids to Grandma’s for a couple hours and write write write?! 🙂
Set the scene:
Nice hot cup of coffee, tea or hot chocolate? Check!
Plate of delicious Valentiny sugar cookies? Check!
Computer or paper and writing implement? Check!
Butt in chair? I certainly hope so!
Ready, set, WRITE!
I so look forward to reading your stories in a couple weeks!!! 🙂
Woohoo! It’s PPBF! Come join the fun and share your books!
Speaking of sharing books, have you ever heard of Bookroo?
I hadn’t, but it’s a really cool kids book club subscription where the books arrive wrapped up like presents to make them even more fun. They were kind enough to feature WHEN YOUR ELEPHANT HAS THE SNIFFLES in their January Board Book Boxes, and to interview me on their blog, and I know they’d appreciate some visitors. They use recycled and recyclable packaging and help kids who don’t have access to enough books through Reach Out And Read – very cool. So if you have a sec, hop over and check them out – especially if you have a little person in your life who might enjoy belonging to the book club!
My PPBF pick for the week is tons of fun 🙂 I love bagels. Also donuts and cupcakes. This book has them all! And they dance! What’s not to love? 🙂
Title: Bagel In Love
Written By: Natasha Wing
Illustrated By: Helen Dardik
Sterling Children’s Books, January 2018, fiction
Suitable For Ages: 4-8
Themes/Topics: language fun (puns and word play), perseverance, dancing
Opening: “Bagel loved to dance. It made him happier than a birthday cake! He never felt plain when he was spinning and swirling, tapping and twirling. But he didn’t have a partner, so he couldn’t enter the dance contest.”
Brief Synopsis: (From the jacket): “Bagel loved to dance. It made him happier than a birthday cake! And more than anything, he wants a partner who will spin and swirl, tap and twirl with him in the Cherry Jubilee dance contest. But Pretzel sniffs that he doesn’t cut the mustard, Croissant thinks his moves are stale, and Doughnut’s eyes just glaze over. Can a cute cupcake save the day for our would-be Fred Éclair? Witty and pun-filled, this picture book really takes the cake.”
Why I Like This Book: How can you not love a dancing bagel? 🙂 Bagel is so sincere in his desire to dance in the contest, and he tries so hard to find a partner. Even though one after another leaves him disappointed, he keeps trying. You’ve got to admire his perseverance and dedication to his mission! In the end, his determination pays off in even better ways than he could have imagined. Although some of the word play may be lost on younger readers, there’s lots of it and it’s fun and can provide a platform for discussion of puns. The art is bright and engaging. An enjoyable read!
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out 🙂 ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
Have a wonderful weekend, everyone!!! 🙂 Go trip the light fantastic! And then have some bagels for Sunday breakfast 🙂 AND (this is important!) tune in tomorrow (Saturday!) for a special post you writers will NOT want to miss!!! I’m serious! 🙂
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