Writing With The Stars is running their mentorship contest again and I thought you’d all like to participate because there are so many amazing opportunities! And someone who heard about it on my blog last year was one of the winners! This year it could be YOU! 🙂
Writing with the Stars is a picture book contest where writers and illustrators apply to win a mentorship from published authors and illustrators. The mentors will evaluate the applications and pick a winner to work with for three months. The contest is open to unpublished and un-agented picture book writers and illustrators. All the details can be found at http://beckytarabooks.com/wwts-contest/
Doesn’t that sound amazing?! And you could win a mentorship with Andrea Loni, Alistair Heim, Stacy McAnulty, Lindsay Ward, Josh Funk, Laura Gehl, Adam Lehrhaupt, Corey Rosen Schwartz, Annie Silvestro, Lori Degman, and many more!
Such an incredible opportunity!
Please share with anyone you know who might be interested!
Now, normally I’d go through some kind of song and dance about why you’re here, since Tuesday isn’t a regular posting day in these parts, and I’d pretend I had no idea what was up.
But it’s Holiday time, and all of us are busy, and I am seriously SUPER-busy, so I won’t waste any of your valuable time with silly runarounds.
Nosirree bob!
Not today!
Today, it’s right to the point!
And the point is. . .
. . .is. . .
. . .what was the point?
Oh, no!
I’ve forgotten the point!
But knowing me, it probably had something to do with chocolate. . .
That’s chocolate and it has points. . . looks like about 14 points 🙂
Yep. That was probably it.
So, enjoy some solid dark chocolate moose wherever you are (or, if solid dark chocolate isn’t your thing, a decadent chocolate mousse will do just as well) and have a lovely day!
Thanks for stopping by!
Enjoy your Tuesday!
Only 5 more shopping days til Christmas, so go on! Skedaddle!
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Uh. . .
. . .why are you still here?
There’s shopping and baking and wrapping and freaking out because your mother-in-law showed up two days early and you’re out of eggnog to be getting on with!
What’s that?
You wanted to know about what?
Windows?
Swindlers?
Twizzlers?
Gosh! I can tell you a thing or two about Twizzlers!
Oh, winners?
You want WINNERS???
Okay.
You twisted my arm 🙂
Without further ado, the WINNERS of the
7thAnnualHolidayContest
2017
are . . .
Okay.
A little ado.
Just a teensy bit because I have just a couple quick things to say first 🙂 But the winners are coming very soon, I promise!
As always, I was thrilled to see so many wonderful stories! Really! It is amazing and inspiring, not to mention VERY entertaining! There is just so much talent out there amongst you all!
But with large entry numbers, all of high quality, come hard choices. My assistant judges and I worked hard to winnow the total down to a manageable number of finalists that we felt were truly all-around deserving of that distinction, and those were the ones we presented to you on Friday for your vote.
There were, however, many other entries that were outstanding in certain areas even though they might not have qualified all-around for one reason or another, or that the judges couldn’t reach a consensus on.
So my assistant judges and I would like to award recognition and a small prize to the following authors for the following merits:
1. For Honorable Mention In The Competition As A Whole: (entries we truly wrestled with not including in the finalists!)
Matthew Lasley for Midnight Delivery (an entry we loved for the writing and kid-friendliness)
Jonathan Merkel for mom and i on Christmas (a lump-in-your-throat bittersweet story)
Carolyn Leiloglou for Old MacDonald Had A Farm. Ho! Ho! Ho! Ho! Ho! (well-written and fun!)
Delfina “Sugarplum” Salimbene 🙂 for Sparkle McSprinkle’s Surprise (lively and fun, great rhyme and meter!)
Ryan Roberts for Not Even A Mouse (a fun twist on the original with a great last line!)
Jennifer Prevost for Ginger’s Gift (a sweet story with an original POV – a Christmas tree ornament!)
Susan Schade for Favorite Day (an original story personifying the days of the week!)
2. For Great Kid Appeal: (not already mentioned in the finals or other categories)
Eleanor Peterson for A Surprise For Ava
Michelle de Freitas for Penelope Violet’s Christmas Surprise
Rose Cappelli for Christmas Chaos
Deborah Boerema for Christmas Eve DRAMA
3. For Excellence In Evoking Mood And Holiday Spirit And Tradition:
Elaine D’Alessandro for Here Comes… (we felt like we were there in that kitchen 🙂 )
4. For Beautiful Rendition Of The Christmas Story:
Janie Reinart for Channah’s Star
5. For Lovely Depiction Of Treasured Family Tradition:
Kathy Halsey for Roger The Christmas Squirrel
6. For Favorite Character: (enjoying the continuing adventures 🙂 )
Lucretia Schafroth for Marvin The Chipmunk (The Animated Elf – Marvin Strikes Again!)
Christine Evans for Lulu and Betty (Lulu And Betty’s Christmas Surprise)
Candice Conner for Bean and Jilly (Bean And Jilly And The Holiday Surprise Visitor)
7. For More Appealing For Grown-ups But Well-Written And Enjoyable! (These entries were terrific but either focused on the relationship between Santa and Mrs. C or had humor that we considered funnier for adults than kids)
Judy Sobanski for The Very Last Gift
Laura Bower for A New Day For Mrs. Claus
Congratulations to all of you for fantastic elements of your stories! You may all email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com to collect your prize, which is your choice of one of the following: (the titles are all links so you can go see what they’re about) (and if you request a paperback, please include your snail mail address!) Lauri and Kaye, who were finalists with terrific stories but placed out of the top 10, please feel free to choose a prize from the list below if there’s something there you’d like!
The announcement of the WINNERS OF THE 2015 HOLIDAY CONTEST as voted on by you!!!
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In First Place…
Winner of the whole shebang…
who gets first choice of all the prizes…
Elizabeth Curry for Waiting For The Winter Gift!!!
Congratulations, Elizabeth, on a beautifully written entry that had a nice element of suspense and a sweet ending and was clearly very popular!!! 🙂
In Second Place
Jennifer Broedel for The Just Desserts
Congratulations, Jennifer, on an entry we loved for your MC’s sneaky plan… and how it backfired 🙂 You get to pick your prize after Elizabeth.
In Third Place
Lucretia Schafroth for Santa’s Delivery Dilemma
Congratulations, Lucretia, on a delightfully fun, kid-friendly entry! How can you not love pink unicorns? 🙂 Apparently you’re on a roll! 3rd in the Halloweensie Contest and now 3rd in the Holiday Contest!!! You get to pick your prize after Elizabeth and Jennifer.
In Fourth Place…
Mishka Jaeger for Binah’s Journey
Congratulations, Mishka, on a poignant entry with a nice feeling of history and family! You get to pick your prize after Elizabeth, Jennifer, and Lucretia!
In Fifth Place…
Megan Walvoord for Vegan Cut-Out Cookies
Congratulations, Megan, on an entry that had something for both our allergy-conscious young readers and our dinosaur-lovers! Who knew Santa was a stegosaurus? 🙂 You get to pick after Elizabeth, Jennifer, Lucretia, and Mishka!
In Sixth Place…
K. Callard for Lizard In A Blizzard
Congratulations, K! We loved your clever and creative take on Christmas ornaments! I’m sure you get the idea of how the prize picking goes by now 🙂
In Seventh Place…
Jen Bagan for Racing The Sun
Congratulations, Jen! You managed an ending that was a REAL surprise! 🙂 You get to pick next 🙂
In Eighth Place…
Heather Kinser for Rigby and Tuttle: The Pinecone
Congratulations, Heather! Adored your funny ending 🙂 You get to pick after Jen 🙂
In Ninth Place
Mona Pease for Family Is Home And Home Is Wherever It May Land
Congratulations, Mona, on your sweet, fun entry! You get to pick after Heather 🙂
In Tenth Place
Rebekah Hoeft for Travelin’ Blues
Congratulations, Rebekah! We so enjoyed your taste of Christmas in other countries! You get to pick after Mona!
All the winners should email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com with the subject heading Prize Winner so we can work out details for you to receive your prizes! (The sooner the better!) And for your convenience, the whole prize list is included at the bottom of this post.
Congratulations again to all our winners – it was a stiff competition!! – and congratulations to EVERYONE who wrote and entered a story in the contest. You all deserve a huge round of applause and a Holiday Treat (gingerbread chocolate truffle anyone?… not that I’m trying to get rid of them or anything… 🙂 )
Thank you to everyone who helped make this contest SO MUCH FUN, whether by writing an entry, reading people’s stories, leaving comments for the authors, and/or voting in the finals. It’s because of all of you that this contest was such a success, so many, many thanks from the bottom of my heart!
As I… hmm… maybe didn’t mention…?, I’m taking a little blogging break so I can spend time with my family – I’ve got children to fetch, cookies to bake, Christmas presents to shop for and wrap, and my sister and her family are arriving from Georgia today! 🙂 And, I’ve been so busy I haven’t put up my holiday decorations or gotten a tree yet, can you believe it?! So I will see you all in a couple weeks – most probably the first week of January 🙂
So now, I want to wish you all a happy and healthy holiday filled with love, laughter, joy, and family, and a happy, healthy and successful new year! It is a pleasure and a privilege to get to spend time with you all, and I’m happy and grateful to know each and every one of you!
Looking forward to all the things we’ll do in 2018!
Happy Holidays, and all best wishes for a wonderful New Year!!!
– a Picture Book Manuscript Critique from the FABULOUS Vivian Kirkfield, author of the forth coming Sweet Dreams, Sarah and experienced and much-loved critiquer!
– a Picture Book Manuscript Critique from the amazing Lori Degman (NORBERT’S BIG DREAM – Sleeping Bear Press 2016, COCK-A-DOODLE OOPS! – Creston Books 2014, 1 ZANY ZOO – Simon & Schuster Books For Young Readers 2010) – a terrific choice for any rhymers out there!
– a Picture Book Manuscript Critique from the wonderful Amy Dixon (MAURICE THE UNBEASTLY – Sterling Children’s Books 2017, SOPHIE’S ANIMAL PARADE – Sky Pony Press 2015, MARATHON MOUSE – Sky Pony Press 2012)
– Enrollment in Making Picture Book Magic (my online picture book writing class – in January or a later month to be mutually agreed upon by the winner and me)
– a bundle of (mostly) winter picture books! We Wish For A Monster Christmas by Sue Fliess Before Morning by Joyce Sidman Ten On The Sled by Kim Norman Someone Like Me by Patricia MacLachlan The Gingerbread Man Loose At Christmas by Laura Murray
– a pack of Susanna Leonard Hill’s amazing What’s The Story Cards (scroll about 1/2 way down the page…
I can’t thank these authors and other industry professionals enough for their incredible generosity! Please visit their sites, buy and recommend their books and services to your writer friends and/or friends with kids, write them nice reviews on Amazon, GoodReads etc if you’ve read and liked their books, and show your appreciation to them in any way you can!
So it’s not my usual posting time Friday. I’m a little behind schedule.
But it IS still Friday! So there’s that 🙂
Given the complete and total over-scheduling of late – not just mine, but my fellow judges and probably most of you guys because, let’s face it, Hanukkah is already underway and it’s only 10 days until Christmas! – it’s pretty much of a miracle that there’s a post going up at all! I have an imminent appointment with a hairy scary tangle of Christmas lights on the agenda, and a recipe to try that involves actual yeast and letting things rise, and who knows how that kind of thing might end!
But here we are, and THAT means it’s time to discuss something of great importance! Something we cannot go even one minute further without settling!
You know it and I know it!
And I know it’s really been weighing on your minds!
No, not the meaning of life (although clearly that is important too…)
I’m talking about something much less philosophical and much more immediately crucial!
Namely, which reindeer are you?
I tried three different quizzes. Two of them said Cupid because for me the holidays are all about love and family. (The other one said Prancer and that I would always be the best dressed person in the room for photographs… I don’t know what went wrong with THAT one because, well, have you SEEN me? 🙂 )
Since I know none of us can go another second without knowing where we are on Santa’s team, feel free to check out the quizzes and let me know how you line up! 🙂 Also, if you got consistent results! Also, if anyone gets Rudolph, who in my book is technically not one of the hard core team since he was a recent addition to the original 8 who did the job unaided for time immemorial! You’ll notice there is no mention of him in Clement C. Moore’s classic poem! But I digress… Take a quiz or two or three and let me know how it goes 🙂
Alrighty, now that THAT’S settled, what do you want to talk about?
Chocolate?
(Always a good topic!)
Or maybe what’s on your Hope-I-Get-It gift list?
(I’m guessing either an agent or a book contract or both are at the top of most of our lists 🙂 )
Or maybe the insanity of ruining perfectly good chocolate by trying to make it taste like gingerbread?
(I am not making this up! Lindor truffles has a gingerbread flavor! I saw it in Kohls! And of course I had to try one because I love chocolate (as you may have heard 🙂 ) and I also love gingerbread… but I’m sorry to say that in my opinion it was an extremely misguided idea! Feel free to debate, but I’m going to take a lot of convincing. However technically, I guess this isn’t really a separate topic but falls under the category of “chocolate” above…)
Or maybe…
…just maybe…
you’d like to know who the Holiday Contest Finalists are???????!!!!!!!
Far be it from me to disappoint you! Ready or not, here they come! 🙂
The7thAnnualHolidayContest
FINALISTS!!!
Except first a few words from our sponsor.
Which is, er, me.
First, I want to thank EVERYONE who found time in their busy holiday season schedule to write an entry for this contest – all 78 of you! The overall quality of the entries was amazing! There were no easy cuts. My assistant judges and I found something to like in every story and hated having to cut anyone! You guys did an amazing job and really rose to the occasion. So much creativity and great writing! You should all pat yourselves on the back and have a celebratory bonbon! (I recommend something besides gingerbread-flavored chocolate 🙂 )
Second, I want to thank EVERYONE who took the time to go around to as many of the 44 different blogs as you could, as well as the 34 entries posted in the comments here, and read and leave supportive comments for the writers who worked so hard on these stories, and especially those who took the time to share many of those entries on social media to draw in other readers. In this business where rejection is a common and unavoidable part of the process, it means a great deal to writers to know that their work was read and enjoyed, and to receive a few kind words about their writing. It is one of the best things about this community – that people are so generous and kind to each other.
Third, before I list the finalists, I want to say again how really difficult it was to choose. There were so many fabulous entries. The sheer volume meant that many great stories had to be cut. So if yours didn’t make the final cut please don’t feel bad. There was a huge amount of competition. Judging, no matter how hard we try to be objective, is always subjective at a certain point – we all have our own preferences for what makes a great story. And the fact that you didn’t make the final cut DOES NOT mean you didn’t write a great story. (And remember – we had VERY specific criteria, so if you wrote a great story that just didn’t happen to fit the combined parameters it might not have made the finalists, but it’s still good!) Everyone who plonked their butt in a chair and worked hard to write a story for this contest is a winner! You showed up. You did your best work. You practiced your craft. You wrote to specifications. You bravely shared your writing with the world. And you have a brand new story that is now yours to hone and tweak if you like and maybe submit at some point to a magazine or as a PB manuscript. So bravo to everyone who entered! I’d also like to point out that someone who entered the 6th Annual Holiday Contest in 2016 embellished on her story a bit and ended up selling it to an editor! It is going to be a published picture book! So that could be you, too! 🙂
Finally, I’d like to be very clear about the voting process. Due to the large number of entries, there are 12 finalists listed below. I have deliberately listed them by title only, so as to help with objectivity. Please read through them and choose the one you feel is best and vote. You are MOST welcome to share a link to this post on FB, twitter, or wherever you like to hang out and encourage people to come read ALL the finalists and vote for the one they think is best. Please do that. The more people who read and enjoy these stories the better, and the more objective votes we get the better. HOWEVER (and I want to be very clear on this) please do not ask people to vote for a specific number or title, or for the story about Dasher and Dancer’s dreams of Broadway stardom or whatever. Trolling for votes or trying to influence the outcome is counter to the spirit of this competition which is supposed to be based on merit. I thank you in advance for respecting this.
Remember that the judging criteria were:
1. Kid-appeal! – These stories are intended for a young audience (ages 12 and under), so we’re looking for stories that children will enjoy and relate to. Entries that were well-written but lacked child-friendliness or whose humor or content felt more appropriate for an older or adult audience did not make the cut. Sadly there were several GREAT entries where the judges felt the emphasis was too much on the relationship between Santa and Mrs. Claus (too adult to be appreciated by kids) or where the humor was directed at things adults would find funny but were less applicable to kids, etc. At least one of our favorites fell into this category 😦
2. Holiday Surprise! – the rules state a Holiday Surprise story, so it must be crystal clear that the story is about Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa, or whatever you celebrate, and it must contain a surprise! 🙂 Most people did a good job with this, but there were unfortunately some that felt predictable and some that just didn’t feel that surprising.
3. Quality of story – entries must tell a story, including a main character of some kind and a true story arc even if it’s tiny 🙂 Entries must not be merely descriptions or mood pieces. I’m happy to say you guys did a great job with that in this contest!
4. Quality of Writing: check your spelling, grammar, punctuation etc. If you’re going to rhyme, give us your best 🙂 Overall writing quality and use of language are also important. Rhyme is so tricky! Some of you do it amazingly well – really! But there are always a few stories that are clever and fun and might have made the finals if written in prose, but problems with the rhyme (usually the meter) keep them from getting there.
5. Originality and creativity – because that is often what sets one story above another.
We cut 66 entries to leave you with these 12. It was very hard! We did the best we could. You’ll find some poetry (surprisingly little in this list of finalists – weird how that works out!) some prose; some for younger readers, some for older; some funny, some quieter; and a mix of holidays. I hope you’ll all find at least one of your favorites on the list below.
#1 Waiting For The Winter Gift
“Mama, what will we do when winter comes?” Little asked.
“What deer always do,” Mama said, “slow down and eat what we find.”
“Can’t we hibernate like Bear?” asked Little.
“We’ll be cozy beneath the pines,” Mama said.
“We could dig snow tunnels like vole,” said Little.
“Our winter coat will block the chill,” said Mama.
“Let’s vacation like goose!” said Little.
“And miss the winter gift?” said Mama.
“What’s that?” said Little.
“A surprise to wait for,” Mama said.
Soon snowflakes fell.
“Is it time?” Little asked.
“Not yet,” Mama said.
“Are you certain the gift will come?” Little asked.
“It always comes,” Mama said.
Little tired of twigs, bark and pokey pine needles.
She dreamed of acorns, buds and spring flowers.
Finally, on the coldest of evenings, Mama’s whisper woke her.
They crept to the edge of the woods.
“I can’t see!” said Little.
“Shhh,” said Mama. “Wait.”
Little peered into the darkness at a lone pine.
Suddenly, it gleamed with light.
“The tree!” Little said.
“Shhh,” said Mama. “Wait. And listen.”
Little squinted.
Dim shapes gathered around the pine.
Soft voices filled the air.
“The first Noel, the angels did say
Was to certain poor shepherds in fields as they lay…”
As the carolers sang, a boy dragged a sled full of cracked corn toward them.
“Merry Christmas,” he whispered, leaving the sled behind.
Little’s tummy tingled hopefully.
“Is that for us?” Little asked.
“Yes,” said Mama.
And soon Little and Mama’s bellies matched their full hearts.
#2 Just Desserts
Every year at Christmas, it’s my job to pick a game,
so this year I suggested that we each should draw a name.
Last night we went shopping, then came home and wrapped the loot,
piled up mounds of gifts, and settled in to have a hoot.
No one knows the trick I played, to make me get the most
(and I’m not gonna tell them now- I’m not the one to boast).
What a plan! I bet I’ll get all kinds of awesome stuff.
Robots, nun chucks, tablets…I just hope I get enough.
Morning’s here, we all rush down, I feel like I could burst!
“Settle down,” Mom says. “Let’s all take turns. Now, who goes first?”
Looking at the shining paper, fluffing all the bows,
picturing the things we’ll get, I hope it’s good. Who knows?
Gracie picks her gift up first and shakes it in surprise,
tears off all the wrapping, “Oh, I can’t believe my eyes!
It’s everything I wanted! Thank you Mommy, thank you Dad.”
A doll? Who needs a doll? I guess for her, it’s not so bad…
Maybe Ollie’s present will be something more my speed.
Building blocks?! That’s baby stuff. It’s not quite what I need.
My turn! This one’s heavy! I just can’t believe my luck!
I yank the paper off and find… “A GIANT FRUITCAKE! YUCK!”
No big deal, there’s fifteen more, all labeled with my name.
But ripping each gift open, one by one… THEY’RE ALL THE SAME!
#3 Essie The Hen And Her Christmas Surprise
It was almost Christmas and Essie loved nothing more than chatting
and scratching and fussing over excited chicks.
Then one day, a horse trampled her foot.
The kind farmer made a bed for Essie in the kitchen.
Essie tried to tell Nettle the dog all about it, but Nettle hardly noticed her at all.
Each day, Essie waited for Nettle.
Then in the evenings, she did her friendliest best.
She chatted about her grand chicks.
Yawn.
She chatted about her great grand chicks.
Bigger yawn.
She even chatted about her great great great grand chicks.
Snarl!
Time went by, Essie began to hobble about while Nettle did nothing but sleep.
What a lonely Christmas this will be, thought Essie. So she decided perhaps she could help.
Essie tidied the woodchips by the fire.
She picked up Nettle’s spilt food.
She even watched for dangerous intruders.
Bagawk!
Nothing seemed to work.
That night, as the fire’s last embers glowed, Essie dreamed of a merry Christmas.
Then she noticed something strange.
Nettle was a big squirming monster!
Essie hid but then …
“One, two three, four, five … six glorious pups!” she squawked.
When Nettle went outside, the pups shivered and whimpered
and cried.
Essie hobbled straight to the basket …
and hopped on top of the pups.
“Cloork, cloork!” sang Essie.
Nettle stared at Essie sitting on her pups, sniffed her then sat beside the basket.
What a merry Christmas this would be after all! Brock!
#4 Travelin’ Blues
We’re travelers.
Mom writes books about different cultures. We’re home for a bit while we catch up with friends and school work. Then — off again!
The only time this is a problem is Christmas. Every year, a new place. I just want to be home.
This is how it goes before Christmas:
“Mama, can we go home for Christmas?”
“Not this year, Kels. This year we’re going to [insert name of faraway country].”
And then we’re off.
I’ve gotta admit we’ve been part of amazing Christmas celebrations.
When I was seven, fireworks and ice cream in Brazil: spectacular!
Thirteen desserts in France. YESSS!
A sauna on Christmas Eve in Estonia: interesting?!
Last year, two Christmases.
Iceland in December: books and pretty fried bread. Perfection.
Ethiopia in January: 4:00 a.m. candlelight procession. Intense.
This year, I’ve had it. I wanna go home.
We’re in Australia. I say, with grump:
“Mom. Let’s go home for Christmas.”
She just gave a tired smile and kept typing.
Grrr.
Today we’re off to wherever we’re going. Don’t care where.
We’re late, rushing to get settled with our flight standbys: earbuds, neck pillows, books. Mom pulls out a gift bag.
“Open it.”
I know it must be her buttering me up for another traveling Christmas.
As the flight attendant says “…and then straight to the States,” I read the words “DTW” at the end of the printed itinerary that was in the bag. Detroit. Michigan. Home. Heaven on earth.
“Surprise,” Mom says quietly.
Best. Christmas. Ever.
#5 Santa’s Delivery Dilemma
On Christmas Eve, Santa awoke early, ready for his annual journey.
Nice list? Check—toys loaded for delivery. Naughty list? Done—coal on board. All the reindeer had their check-ups and international travel vaccinations last month. The sleigh had its annual tuneup last week. Just a pre-departure test flight remained.
But as the reindeer whisked him into the sky, Santa noticed Rudolph’s nose flickering. Then Rudolph sniffled and sneezed. The sleigh jolted, suddenly losing altitude. Clearly, Rudolph was too sick to fly!
“What are we going to do?,” worried the other eight reindeer. Laden with gifts, the sleigh needed another strong flyer to complete its deliveries before Christmas morning.
“I will summon some Arctic alternates!,” said Santa. “We must believe—in ourselves and in Christmas miracles.” Soon, a menagerie of candidates arrived at Santa’s snow-covered driveway.
A moose plodded up but had no flying experience. “Next!,” called an elf. An athletic polar bear volunteered but was dismissed for exceeding the weight limit. “Next!” A snowy owl eagerly fluttered up but wasn’t strong enough for the position.
As Santa considered his predicament, he sensed something behind him. “I’m well-suited for this task,” a voice whispered. Looking back, Santa stared…
a pink unicorn stood behind him!
“You’re…actually…REAL?,” Santa gasped. “I stopped believing…in unicorns…years ago,” he admitted.
Satisfied after one last test flight, Santa began his important journey—led by Trudy, the unicorn, who proudly flew with an LED light duct-taped to her horn.
#6 Racing The Sun
Mrs. Claus adjusted Santa’s hat.
“This night always makes me nervous,” she said.
“I’ll be fine,” Santa said. “Quick as a wink and back before the sun is up.”
They kissed goodbye just as the head elf opened the door.
“Lift off in 5 minutes!”
The reindeer were waiting.
Santa said, “Fly like the wind. We stay ahead of the sun tonight.”
They understood and soon galloped at full speed into the dark night.
The journey was smooth as Santa whooshed around the South Pacific. Packages flew from his nimble hands through Asia, Africa and Europe.
But then the sleigh was slammed by a meteor shower.
“We have to find shelter!” cried Santa.
The reindeer flew toward earth and landed in the Canadian Rockies.
Santa checked his watch and looked at the sky. We’re running out of time, he thought.
Finally, they could take off.
Santa worked at a frantic pace through Mexico and South America. An amber glow emerged from the darkness as he delivered the last present.
“Home! On the double!” shouted Santa
Dawn was breaking as the sleigh touched down at the North Pole.
“Ouch!” cried Santa as he touched a sizzling blister forming on his cheek.
The elves whisked him inside to Mrs. Claus.
“Tonight was too close,” Santa said as he quickly brushed his fangs.
Mrs. Claus pulled the drapes tight and opened his coffin.
“In you go,” she said. “I’ll see you tonight.”
She closed the lid and chuckled.
If the kids only knew.
#7 Rigby And Tuttle: The Pinecone
It was Christmas, and Rigby Bear still didn’t have a gift for his friend.
“What to get the otter who has everything?” Rigby wondered.
Something special,
incredible…
surprising!
He lumbered through the neighborhood, thinking….
and slathering peanut butter onto bread. (Rigby always brought a snack.)
Soon he passed a persimmon tree.
“Persimmon popovers!” said Rigby. “Tuttle loves them! Luckily, I’m the best baker in town.”
But Rigby had given popovers before–
on Valentine’s Day,
April Fool’s Day,
and even Teacher Appreciation Day.
“On second thought,” said Rigby. “Popovers aren’t surprising.”
He bit into peanut-buttery bread. (To help him think, of course.)
Rigby padded into the countryside…
and past a pumpkin farm.
“Pumpkin pie! Good thing I’m an excellent baker.”
But he had given pie, many times before–
on Tuttle’s birthday,
Halloween,
and even National Paperclip Day.
“Come to think of it,” said Rigby. “Pie isn’t surprising.”
He shuffled into the forest…
but couldn’t dream up a Christmas surprise.
Huckleberry tarts? No.
Granola bars? No.
Frosted eclairs? Nope.
Rigby plopped down and sighed. “I only know how to bake. I can’t make anything else.”
He reached for a slice of bread…
picked up a pinecone instead…
and slathered it with peanut butter.
“Oops.”
Just then, Tuttle appeared, wearing bird-watching gear.
Rigby waved.
The icky-sticky pinecone clung to his fur…
and thirteen little birds perched on his paw, happily pecking peanut butter.
Chirp!
“A pinecone birdfeeder, for me? Thanks, pal!” said Tuttle. “What a surprise.”
“It sure is,” Rigby agreed…
“Merry Christmas!”
#8 Binah’s Journey
It was the first night of Hanukkah and everyone had gone across to the Mazur’s for latkes, leaving Binah alone to think for the first time since she arrived.
She could still hear them through the walls. It was always noisy in the crowded tenement.
Binah missed the village where she’d lived with Zayde, Bubbe, and Papa. She could run through the nearby fields and breathe fresh air!
Last spring, the pogroms began. Every week bought destruction and fear. One day Papa disappeared.
In August, Binah was sent aboard a ship to join family in New York.
Kneeling near the stove on the cold kitchen floor, Binah dragged her overcoat from under the narrow bed she shared with her cousin Sally. She fumbled in the pockets until she found the large wooden dreidel Zayde tucked inside that day she had to say goodbye. It was large and lopsided, just like Zayde. Binah wondered if she’d ever see him again?She stood the dreidel on end and tried a spin but it toppled right over showing the lucky letter, gimmel. Looking closer, Binah noticed a tiny crack. She put her thumbs on the gimmel and pushed. The side slid open.
Tickling her fingers into wool batting, Binah pulled out a coin, then six more, a gold watch, pearl earrings, and a little paper scroll.
Unrolling it, she read: “Binah—Use these treasures to help build your shining future in America. Always remember I love you, zeisele. I know you will succeed.”
#9 Family Is Home And Home Is Wherever It May Land
Hazel found a safe spot, deep in the arm of a needly fir. She wove a fluffy nest and welcomed her new litter.
Winter winds blew. Swoosh! Whoosh!
Frost sparkled. Crickle! Crackle!
The field mouse and her growing family snuggled until…
Clomp!
Clomp!
Clomp!
Chop!
Chop!
Chop!
Hazel and her children held tight as they went topsy-turvy. Their home was dropped, dragged, then propped upright again.
The mice peered at their woodsy neighborhood from the inside out. Gasp!
Mesmerized, they peeked at the people dancing, decorating, stretching high to place a star.
Snap! Lights twinkled
Choo-choo! A train chugged.
Children hung stockings.
Parents pointed at the clock.
Everyone went upstairs.
After awhile, Hazel and her curious little ones jumped down to explore their new surroundings.
They hopped on the train and rode ‘round and ‘round the holiday town. Whee! Then…Bump! Thump! Thump!
Black boots tromped toward the tree.
Squeakkkkkk! Eeeeeeeek! Hazel and her family raced back to their nest, hoping the big guy with rosy cheeks, twinkly eyes, and white hair, hadn’t seen them.
He piled people presents high; books, blocks, dolls.
Then, he looked straight at the mice. Yikes!
He stretched his black-gloved hand toward them. They froze!
The big guy’s hand opened. Surprise!
Presents: coverlets of silky curls, bits of carrots and cookies, and mouse-sized cups of warm cocoa.
He winked, and waved and left.
Even though temporary, Hazel and her family celebrated the wondrous night at home, together.
#10 Vegan Cut-Out Cookies
Sammy was allergic to a lot of things. He couldn’t have milk or gluten. Peanuts made his face puff up and corn made him throw up.
His mother found a recipe for cut-out cookies called Zucchini Coconut Oil Vegan Sugar Cookies. It was a big deal to create something sweet.
He poured and mixed just the right amount. He rolled the dough out. He cut out a Santa, star, and stocking.
He baked them, cooled them and decorated them. He covered them with homemade frosting and fruit.
As he finished he started to worry. Would Santa like his treat? Would he be delighted with his sugary sweet?
He put out the Soy milk and Vegan cookies out on Christmas Eve. Hoping and praying that Santa would like them.
As He stayed awake in his bed. Thoughts of dread danced in his head. What if he was allergic to coconut?
As he was almost asleep he heard a BUMP! THUMP! Followed by STOMP! STOMP! STOMP! STOMP!
Wow! Santa was heavy. I wonder if I could sneak into see him trying my treat.
Sammy snuck quietly down the hall. He peeked around the corner. He had to muffle a yell.
Santa wasn’t human at all. The Santa Stegosaurus tromped around his living room gulping down the cookies and milk.
Santa Stegosaur turned to Sammy and said, “Thank you! Finally, a kid that knows I’m an herbivore.”
“Yyyou’re welcome,” said Sammy a smile crossing his face. Who knew that Santa was a dinosaur.
#11 Lizard In A Blizzard
Down south in December
It’s usually warm,
Except for the year of
The wicked snowstorm!
One lizard, Negrita,
(Which translates as “bold”)
Chose to take action,
To get out of the cold.
She peered in a window
And what did she see?
A cozy, warm house
With a huge indoor tree!
So she hid on the porch
And trembled and shivered
Then darted inside
When a box was delivered.
Straight for the tree,
She skittered so fast,
Ignoring the squeals
Of the people she passed.
She clambered up branches
And hid on a bough,
As somebody shouted,
“Get it out, now!”
Huge faces came near,
Peering in through the greenery,
But Negrita stayed still
To blend in with the scenery.
Big hands came in next,
Fingers grasping and groping,
“Don’t let them find me,”
Negrita sat, hoping.
The fingers came closer.
She thought she was doomed.
‘Til: “The thing’s disappeared!”
A jumbo voice boomed.
For hours she stayed there,
Continuing to hide,
Thinking, Maybe I would have
Been safer outside.
A branch below rustled,
A human was back!
But instead of chasing Negrita,
They brought her…a snack?
A tiny young human
Carried fruit on a tray.
“It’s not milk and cookies,
But I hope it’s okay.”
“You’re feeding the pest?”
Anger. Irritation.
“It’s not a pest,
It’s our new decoration!”
So, tucked amidst tinsel,
And safe from the blizzard,
Negrita became
The first Christmas Tree Lizard.
#12 Christmas Wildfire
Black bear pawed at the ground by a big douglas fir and snorted, “This one.”
Elk wrapped the tree with honeysuckle vines, carefully tucking in the ends with his antlers.
Bluebird dotted the needles with red Christmas berries.
Jackrabbit dangled wild carrots, joyously jumping to the highest branches.
Coyote paced around the tree and howled with delight.
Black bear grunted, “Quiet.”
Jackrabbit’s nose twitched, “Smoke.”
Elk raised his antlers, “Danger.”
Bluebird chittered, “Run, run, run!”
Coyote snapped at their feet to hurry.
After their long flight, the animals huddled under a strange tree on Christmas Eve.
Jackrabbit rubbed his long ear and squeaked, “Our Christmas tree?”
Black Bear let out a low growl and tucked jackrabbit under his arm.
In the morning Great Horned Owl swooped low and hooted, “Safe.”
The animals meandered through black trunks.
Puffs of ash followed Jackrabbit’s jumps.
Black bear shook soot from his fur.
Bluebird landed on Elk’s antlers and rapidly tweeted, “No. No. But Santa. Oh dear. No.”
Then they froze.
Their Christmas tree stood alone. The green needles were covered in Christmas berries, wrapped in honeysuckle, and dangled with carrots. Only one thing had changed. The tree glistened with a coating of Christmas snow.
Jackrabbit cried, “Saved!”
Black Bear nodded, “Unexpected.”
Elk bellowed, “Miracle.”
Bluebird trilled, “Santa! Santa! Santa!”
Coyote howled with delight.
Having read (and probably re-read and re-read!) through these 12 fabulous finalists, please VOTE FOR YOUR FAVORITE in the poll below by Monday December 18 at NOON EST. I’m hoping the full weekend will give you enough time but I’m including Monday morning too just in case! Winners will be posted on Tuesday December 19 and we can celebrate and then all get on with our busy holiday schedules!
Congratulations to the finalists! And thank you all so much for taking the time to write (if you did), read, and vote! These contests simply wouldn’t be what they are without all of you!
I can’t wait to see who the winners will be!
Tune in Tuesday… same bat time, same bat station 🙂
The Contest: Write a children’s holiday story (children here defined as approximately age 12 and under) about A Holiday Surprise! Any kind of surprise – anything at all! – the more unexpected the better! 🙂 Squirrel in the Christmas Tree? Snowstorm in Jamaica? Santa delivering toys from an excavator pulled by a herd of worms? Your story may be poetry or prose, silly or serious or sweet, religious or not, based on Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa or whatever you celebrate, but is not to exceed 250 words (I know! So much freedom after the Halloweensie Contest 🙂 ) (It can be as short as you like (the judges will be grateful 🙂 , you are welcome and encouraged to write shorter, but no more than 250! Title not included in word count.) The field is wide open! Have fun! The more creative the better! No illustration notes please. (And yes, if you feel compelled to submit more than one entry you may, just remember you’re competing against yourself!)
Post: Your entry should be posted on your blog between right now this very second and Sunday December 10 at 11:59 PM EST, and your post-specific link should be added to the link list below. This post will remain up through Friday December 15 for your reading pleasure. There will be no Perfect Picture Book or Would You Read It posts for the duration of the contest so the links will stay up for everyone to visit and enjoy. If you would like to enter but don’t have a blog you are welcome to paste your entry in the comment section below (please be sure to include your byline so that if your posting handle is staysuplate2write or something I’ll be able to tell who you are!) If anyone has trouble commenting, which unfortunately happens, please email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com and I’ll post your entry for you! But please don’t send attachments! Just copy and paste your story into the email. Also, please only post your entry once – either in the comment section of my blog or on the link list or by emailing me and asking me to post it. Multiple postings of the same entry get confusing.
The Judging: My lovely assistants and I will narrow down the entrants to 10-12 finalists (depending on the number of entries) which will be posted here on Friday December 15 (or, if we’re desperate for a little extra time, Saturday December 16) for you to vote on for a winner. The vote will be closed on Sunday December 17 at 5 PM EST (or Monday December 18th if we need that extra time.) Whoever gets the most votes will be first and so on down to tenth place, and the winners will be announced on Monday December 18 (or Tuesday December 19).
Judging criteria will be as follows:
1. Kid-appeal! – These stories are intended for a young audience (ages 12 and under), so we’re looking for stories that children will enjoy and relate to.
2. Holiday Surprise! – the rules state a Holiday Surprise story, so it must be crystal clear that the story is about Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa, or whatever you celebrate, and it must contain a surprise! 🙂
3. Quality of story – entries must tell a story, including a main character of some kind and a true story arc even if it’s tiny 🙂 Entries must not be merely descriptions or mood pieces.
4. Quality of Writing: check your spelling, grammar, punctuation etc. If you’re going to rhyme, give us your best 🙂 Overall writing quality and use of language are also important.
5. Originality and creativity – because that is often what sets one story above another.
The Prizes!: Ok. This is the moment where I officially admit to probably having bitten off more than I can chew! 🙂 I’ve been in Brazil for the past week, and upon my return was met with some deadlines I have to add into the time equation, in addition to a couple of school visits and getting ready for the holidays and family coming etc. I wrote my sample entry at the literal 11th hour just before midnight last night. (That will be extremely obvious when you read it below 🙂 ) So. I will add to the prizes today and probably have to update them. My sincere apologies for having over-scheduled my time – it was not intentional! – but I figured you guys would rather have the contest even on a slightly loosey-goosey schedule than not! 🙂
– a Picture Book Manuscript Critique from the FABULOUS Vivian Kirkfield, author of the forth coming Sweet Dreams, Sarah and experienced and much-loved critiquer!
– a Picture Book Manuscript Critique from the amazing Lori Degman (NORBERT’S BIG DREAM – Sleeping Bear Press 2016, COCK-A-DOODLE OOPS! – Creston Books 2014, 1 ZANY ZOO – Simon & Schuster Books For Young Readers 2010) – a terrific choice for any rhymers out there!
– a Picture Book Manuscript Critique from the wonderful Amy Dixon (MAURICE THE UNBEASTLY – Sterling Children’s Books 2017, SOPHIE’S ANIMAL PARADE – Sky Pony Press 2015, MARATHON MOUSE – Sky Pony Press 2012)
– Enrollment in Making Picture Book Magic (my online picture book writing class – in January or a later month to be mutually agreed upon by the winner and me)
– a bundle of books! (itemized list forthcoming, good lord willin’ and the creek don’t rise)
– a pack of Susanna Leonard Hill’s amazing What’s The Story Cards (scroll about 1/2 way down the page… (2 available)
I can’t thank these authors and other industry professionals enough for their incredible generosity! Please visit their sites, buy and recommend their books and services to your writer friends and/or friends with kids, write them nice reviews on Amazon, GoodReads etc if you’ve read and liked their books, and show your appreciation to them in any way you can!
Now.
The time has come for my sample. And I think I can say that I have really outdone myself this time in the Worst Ever Sample department! 🙂 Are you ready? Have some chocolate to get you in a good mood! 🙂 But this should be very comforting to all of you because you can know beyond a shadow of a doubt that ANYthing you wrote is better than this! 🙂
(And as I told you, I wrote it in a jet-lagged stupor at nearly midnight last night and I openly admit that it is 39 words over the word limit because I didn’t have time to make it shorter!)
So really. Are you ready? 🙂
The Christmas Plan
(289 words because I ran out of time and also am not actually in the contest! 🙂 )
Christmas Eve in Santa’s barnyard,
Secret meeting underway.
Said the cow, “We’d better hurry –
Any time they’ll hitch the sleigh!”
Duck looked ‘round. “Are you all ready?
Everyone know what to do?”
All the others nodded gravely.
“Okay, then, let’s move out, crew!”
Each went in their own direction
Silently through dark and snow.
Pulled their parts off to perfection,
Met up in the workshop’s glow.
Quietly, they filed inside
Where elves were loading up the sleigh.
Santa called, “Let’s hitch the reindeer!
Time we headed on our way!”
Eight elves hurried to the stable
With intent to fetch the deer.
Soon came running back in panic.
“Sir! The team has disappeared!”
Santa bellowed, “Were they stolen?
Kidnapped? Hidden? Just set loose?”
“If you need a quick replacement, I’ll step in,” said Christmas Goose.
Santa muttered, disbelieving,
“Why’d my team go on the lam?”
“Never mind, Sir, we can help you,”
Kindly offered Christmas Ham.
Moments later, in the harness,
Ham and Goose were joined by Hare,
Christmas Roast Beef, Duck, and Turkey.
Plan still working – almost there!
Santa, looking quite bemused, said,
“I can’t drive this motley crew!”
“Sorry, Sir, we’re out of options.
There is nothing else to do!”
So it was that not much later,
Waiting hidden in the night,
Josie, hoping to see Santa,
Saw a most surprising sight!
Santa’s sleigh with bells a-jingling
Flying high above her head,
Being pulled by. . . Christmas Dinner?!
“This must be a dream!” she said.
But all around the world next day
When fam-i-lies sat down to eat,
Christmas fowl and roasts were absent.
Served instead? Tofurkey feast!
Back inside the North Pole barnyard
Secret meeting once again,
Cow and Duck high-fived the others.
“Here’s to vegetarians!”
So now! Is everyone filled with confidence about their entries? I certainly hope so after that display! Never let it be said that I’m not willing to make a fool of myself for you guys 🙂 It just proves how much I love you 🙂
I can’t wait to read all of your (much better!) stories! I hope there will be a lot – the more the merrier! And there are still over 3 days to write, so you have time if you haven’t written yet and want to join the fun. Feel free to spread the word to your writing friends as well. If you just want to enjoy reading, that’s great too! We need all the readers we can get, so feel free to spread the word to parents and teachers! And what better way to entertain yourself and your kids while waiting for the holiday goodies to bake? Or get someone to read aloud while everyone else wraps presents 🙂
Rejoice! and let the festivities begin!!! 🙂
Happy Holidays to All! 🙂
And don’t miss the additional34fabulous entries in the comment section below!
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Santa’s Switches – Nina
Sneak A Peek At Santa – Jennifer B
Just Desserts – Jennifer B
The Christmas Pageant – Carol
A Magpie Holiday – Karen
Foxy, Mr. Fox – Dianne
A Timely Arrival – Beverly
Not Even A Mouse – Ryan
Waiting For The Winter Gift – Elizabeth
Santa’s Christmas SSS-Surprise – Jenny
Santa Patrol – Megan
Vegan Cut-Out Cookies – Megan
Essie The Hen And Her Christmas Surprise – Kaye
La Navidad I’ll Never Forget – Carmen
Santa’s Bad Day – Anne
Tootsie The Wonder Dog’s Best Day Ever – Kathy B
Holiday Mix-Up – Barbara
The Very Last Gift – Judy S
Family Is Home And Home Is Wherever It May Land – Mona
Christmas With Aliens – Brian
Here Comes… – Elaine
The Ballad Of Bella La Frost – Nancy
The Animated Elf – Marvin Strikes Again – Lucretia
Opening: “We wish for a furry monster, a big, hairy, scary monster, our own stomping, chomping monster, for Christmas this year.”
Brief Synopsis: A brother and sister don’t want the usual toys for Christmas…they want a monster! Their parents refuse, so they take their request to Santa who, of course, delivers. But having a monster doesn’t turn out quite as they expected!
Why I Like This Book: I like this book because it’s not your usual Christmas book. It’s about monsters 🙂 It’s fun, it’s different, and if you know We Wish You A Merry Christmas you can sing the story 🙂 There’s plenty of humor, havoc and mayhem. A little problem solving is required and then…? Time to think about what to ask for next Christmas 🙂 The endpapers are covered with monster pictures and descriptions, with the one the kids choose (Furzilla) circled and labeled “THIS ONE!” The art is bright, engaging, humorous, and a perfect fit for the story.
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out 🙂 ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
I’m just going to come right out and confess that I am not even here right now!
Whilst you are reading this post (which I scheduled ahead), I am in BRAZIL! I know! Nuts, right? 🙂 But I am!
And I’ll tell you right now, I didn’t even pack my computer! I am taking a whole week off to visit my son and not doing any work at all! So you may rightly accuse me of dropping the ball 🙂 Hopefully I’ll figure out how to pick it up when I return, since the Holiday Contest opens approximately the next day! Have you noticed how there just never seems to be enough time for everything?
Anyhow, even though I am in Brazil where I’m not sure if they even have chocolate (I’ll let you know when I get back) I would not want to deprive YOU! So how about a little Something Chocolate to get you revved up for helping today’s intrepid pitcher. (Please help yourself to seconds if you need extra fuel to motivate your Holiday Contest entry writing! 🙂 )
Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Candace. Candace follows her heart and writes poetry and short stories. Her poetry blog is http://rhymeswithbug.com
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Cock-A-Doodle WHAT?
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 2-4)
The Pitch: Clarence the Rooster was nervous. Tomorrow morning was his big opportunity to wake up Farmer Judy. But what if she sleeps right through his crowing? Clarence decides to ask his friends on the farm for advice. He asks the cat, the sheep, the ducks, the cow, and even the hairy dog, for ideas. Should he follow his friend’s suggestions, or should he follow his heart?
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Candace improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in January, so you have time to polish your pitch before putting it up for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Candace is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to the upcoming Holiday Contest! Have you written your entry yet (hint-hint, nudge-nudge! 🙂 )?!
I know it’s Black Friday Weekend, and also the Official Kick Off of Holiday Decorating, so you are all no doubt charging through the aisles of Target and Home Depot at this very moment draped in tinsel and brandishing menorahs with multicolored bulbs at anything that threatens your forward progress, your wallet significantly lighter and your thoughts single-mindedly focused on the left-over pumpkin pie that’s going to sustain you through seven hours of blowing up inflatable Santas and hanging from the roof edge by your fingernails whilst you string lights when you get home, and heaven knows I do not want to interfere with any of THAT!
But it occurred to me that you might want something helpfully distracting to think about whilst you were trying desperately not to think about what airspeed velocity you might attain should your fingernails lose their grip on that roof edge and send you hurtling toward the ground, and whether all that pie you ate would be enough to cushion your landing or simply act as ballast to speed your descent . . .
And you know how much I like to be helpful to you. . . 🙂
So. . .
. . . how about we get the old noggin on the job of thinking up your story entry for the
7THANNUALHOLIDAYCONTEST!!!
Isn’t that a great idea???!!! 🙂
Here are the Official Contest Rules! 🙂
The Contest: Write a children’s holiday story (children here defined as approximately age 12 and under) about A Holiday Surprise! Any kind of surprise – anything at all! – the more unexpected the better! 🙂 Squirrel in the Christmas Tree? Snowstorm in Jamaica? Santa delivering toys from an excavator pulled by a herd of worms? Your story may be poetry or prose, silly or serious or sweet, religious or not, based on Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa or whatever you celebrate, but is not to exceed 250 words (I know! So much freedom after the Halloweensie Contest 🙂 ) (It can be as short as you like (the judges will be grateful 🙂 , you are welcome and encouraged to write shorter, but no more than 250! Title not included in word count.) The field is wide open! Have fun! The more creative the better! No illustration notes please. (And yes, if you feel compelled to submit more than one entry you may, just remember you’re competing against yourself!)
Post: Your entry should be posted on your blog between 12:01 AM EST Thursday December 7 and Sunday December 10 at 11:59 PM EST, and your post-specific link should be added to the link list on the official holiday contest post which will go up on my blog on Thursday December 7 and remain up through Friday December 15 for your reading pleasure. There will be no Perfect Picture Book or Would You Read It posts for the duration of the contest so the links will stay up for everyone to visit and enjoy. If you would like to enter but don’t have a blog you are welcome to paste your entry in the comment section of my December 7th post when it goes up. If you have trouble commenting, you can email me. (We’ll go over this part in more detail on the December 7th post! 🙂 )
The Judging: My lovely assistants and I will narrow down the entrants to 10-12 finalists (depending on the number of entries) which will be posted here on Friday December 15 (or, if we’re desperate for a little extra time, Saturday December 16) for you to vote on for a winner. The vote will be closed on Sunday December 17 at 5 PM EST (or Monday December 18th if we need that extra time.) Whoever gets the most votes will be first and so on down to tenth place, and the winners will be announced on Monday December 18 (or Tuesday December 19).
Judging criteria will be as follows:
1. Kid-appeal! – These stories are intended for a young audience (ages 12 and under), so we’re looking for stories that children will enjoy and relate to.
2. Holiday Surprise! – the rules state a Holiday Surprise story, so it must be crystal clear that the story is about Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa, or whatever you celebrate, and it must contain a surprise! 🙂
3. Quality of story – entries must tell a story, including a main character of some kind and a true story arc even if it’s tiny 🙂 Entries must not be merely descriptions or mood pieces.
4. Quality of Writing: check your spelling, grammar, punctuation etc. If you’re going to rhyme, give us your best 🙂 Overall writing quality and use of language are also important.
5. Originality and creativity – because that is often what sets one story above another.
The Prizes!: Ok, I’m leaving the country Monday (seriously! – the day after tomorrow! – I am not making that up! 🙂 ) and have yet to finish getting the prizes organized, so I apologize for not including them in today’s post. But I wanted to get the guidelines up so you guys would have as much time as possible to work on your stories! Stay tuned for the prizes. I promise they will be as good as I can make them! 🙂
So there you have it! Fire up those brain cells! After you hopefully don’t fall off the roof stringing lights or sprain your ankle barreling through Target with your shopping cart, grab a cup of hot chocolate, plonk your tiny hiney into a comfy chair, and get to writing your potentially prize-winning Holiday Surprise story!!!
On your mark…
…get set…
…GO!
I am SO looking forward to getting to read all your stories!!!
Have a great rest of the weekend and really try not to fall off the roof! 🙂
If you’re like me, it’s not really over yet. Thanksgiving is always a multiple day affair here on Blueberry Hill, so I’m afraid I’m not really going to be hanging around the blog today.
But I knew some of you dedicated picture book lovers would have perfect picture books to post, and some of you parents dedicated picture book readers need the weekly list of fabulosity to keep the kiddos entertained on the long drive home from Grandma’s to enrich your weekend literary experience 🙂
And I have such a lovely one to share! Have a look!
Title: Mice Skating
Written By: Annie Silvestro
Illustrated By: Teagan White
Sterling Children’s Books, October 2, 2017, fiction
Suitable For Ages: 3-8
Themes/Topics: being yourself, seasons (winter), friendship
Opening: “During the cold winter months, most field mice take cover. . . . . . tunneling deep underground, burrowing into farmhouse walls, nesting in hollow logs. But not Lucy.”
Brief Synopsis: Lucy is different from the other mice. She loves winter! But it would be much more fun if her friends would come out and join her. Can she find a way to get them to come try something new?
Why I Like This Book: This is a lovely, cozy, sweet story of a little mouse who is different from her peers and not afraid to be an individual. She is comfortable doing her own thing. But she also values her friends, doesn’t want them to miss out on fun, and knows her own experience would be enhanced by having friends to share it with. Her bold spirit, ingenuity, and warm-hearted friendship come through beautifully. The art is warm and cozy and comforting – the perfect pictures to curl up with on a snowy day 🙂
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out 🙂 ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
Oh, and by the way, if the people in charge around here manage to tear themselves away from the pie long enough to attend to their job, the Holiday Contest Guidelines will be posted sometime in the next 24 hours or so, so keep a weather eye out! 🙂
(That’s turkey for good morning and holy wow don’t we all have a lot to do today!)
I realize it’s the day before Thanksgiving and we’re probably all up to our ears in cleaning the house and fetching loved ones from the airport and baking and arranging flowers and whatnot!
So I will not take up an iota of extra time from you today!
Quick! Something Chocolate! And Thanksgiving-y! (And seriously, is there ANYTHING you can’t make out of an Oreo?! Plus, is there any flavor that Oreo doesn’t make…? They’ve gotten a little out of control! But I digress…! 🙂 )
I thought you might enjoy some chocolate in the shape of turkeys… plus they’re fun recipes you can do with the kids 🙂
Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Leonie, whom you will remember from her recent pitches for I’m Hungry Mummy and The Magician’s Apprentice in September and October. Leonie says, “Writing is my fun, I love putting pen to paper and watching a story unfold. I just know you’ll love my stories too! I live in Melbourne, Australia and work for a big company during the day and write early in the morning or late into the night. My husband, 3 daughters and I live in a Bayside community with our pooch, Jade – a German Short-haired Pointer. My love of reading started when I was a young girl and continued into my first job as a librarian. I now spend as much time as I can, reading and writing fiction.”
Find her on the web at
Face Book: Leonie Hearn Author
Twitter: @leonie_hearn
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Sara Stole My Hiccups
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: Tommy has a problem and Sara is here to help! Follow these two friends on their journey to solve Tommy’s problem – with a twist.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Leonie improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in January, so you have time to polish your pitch before putting it up for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Leonie is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to seeing 3/5 of my kids tomorrow, and 4/5 on Friday! (The last one will have to wait as he is in another country… but maybe we can Skype him in 🙂 )
Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! And Happy Thanksgiving!!! 🙂
This is because the people in charge around here have had a scheduling foul-up of monstrous proportions which clearly took place in the shadowy underbelly of the administration and left us all in a rut as sticky as candy corn!
There is no other explanation.
Although, now that I think about it, it may have been that, due to budget cuts, the lighting was extremely dim, making it very difficult to discern what was written on the calendar amongst the long shadows cast by the one remaining light bulb, and the PICOS (Person In Charge Of Scheduling…er… which would be me) was so hopped up on candy corn that she was trying to make sense of the schedule whilst dancing the monster mash and thus failed to realize that today – Friday – was supposed to be for Perfect Picture Books.
I think it must have been that.
Unless…
It’s just possible that an army of candy corn led by General Sugarshadow rumbled into my office in orange camo monster trucks and staged a coups, and the new regime insists that every day is National Tri-Colored Undigestible Candy Day and to heck with perfect picture books because they are not made out of sugar nor can they be used as a traction aid in inclement weather.
Be that as it may, according to my sources it is Friday. And that means, it’s time for Perfect Picture Books. So let’s get to it, shall we?
Oh.
Wait a minute.
Didn’t some monstrously candy-corn-headed nitwit just say something shadowy about a scheduling conflict?
I’ll have my people get in touch with your people and sort this whole scheduling conundrum out!
Meanwhile, perhaps you’d like to engage in the age-old debate over pop-tarts: toast them? or eat them cold? Where do you weigh in on this critical issue?
Or maybe we should discuss the qualifications one should look for in a scheduling assistant… because clearly I could use some advice…
Or maybe…
…just maybe…
you’d like to hear about
THEWINNERS OF The7thAnnualHALLOWEENSIECONTEST!!!!!
WA-HOOOOOOO!!!!!
As you are all aware by now, we had a record turnout for the Halloweensie Contest – 244 entries! Holy Halloweensie! Who’d-a-thunk it?
I was thrilled beyond measure to see so many wonderful stories and meet so many new writers!
But with large entry numbers come hard choices. My assistant judges and I worked hard to winnow the total down to a manageable number of finalists that we felt were truly all-around deserving of that distinction, and those were the ones we presented to you on Monday for your vote.
There were, however, many other entries that were outstanding in certain areas even though they might not have qualified all-around for one reason or another (one reason being that, at a certain point, we just had to stop adding finalists to the list! :))
So my assistant judges and I would like to award recognition and a small prize to the following authors for the following merits:
1. For Honorable Mention In The Competition As A Whole: (all-arond well-written stories we loved that just missed the finals for one small reason or another!)
Vanessa Marcus for Scary To Someone
Ryan Roberts for Pumpkin Patch
Jennifer Buchet for Gobblewolly’s Halloweensie Treasure
Katherine Rothstein for Sharkcula
Jen Bagan for Shadow Monster
Nancy Granberry for Monster Had A Little Ghost
Nancy Riley for Monster’s Woe
Jill Proctor for Monster Marathon
Delfina Salimbene for The Sweet Tooth Trick Or Treat
Jennifer Raudenbush for Montgomery Monster
2. For Great Kid Appeal: (not already in the finals)
Greg Bray for Killer Candy Corn Costume
Ann Martin for Who Scared Who? (also very cute story!)
Diana (Peach?) for Monster Under The Bed
3. For Best Descriptive/Mood Piece:
Terri Ross for Witchy (delightfully Halloweensie mood)
Meryl Cullom for Watch Out! (spooky)
4. For Best Use of Poetic Language: (not already in the finals)
Maria Marshall for A Halloween Treasure (lovely mood)
Janie Reinart for Parade Of Horribles (spooky mood)
5. For Spookiest Entry: (not already in the finals)
Brianna Zamborsky for The Lock
Lynley Stace for Sweetie
6. For Funniest Entry: (not already in the finals)
Nina Q. Haines for Broomstick Sale
Sandy Perlic for Trick Or Treats For Monster?
7. For Sweetest Entry: (not already in the finals)
Jennifer Prevost for Candie’s Monster Shadows
Candace Kubinec for No Costume Required
8. For Best Written Original Point of View: (not already in the finals)
Kaye Baillie for House Hates Halloween (POV of a haunted house)
9. For Fun Concept With Great Potential:
B.L. Bachman for Witch Hiccups
10. For Favorite Character:
Julie Abery for her Teensy-Weensy Witch
Jean James for her Evil Dr. Gerbil 🙂
11. For Best Entry In 12 Words! 🙂 :
Danielle Hammelef for A Shadow’s Secret
12. For Cleverest Parody Close To Judge #1’s Heart 🙂 :
Julie LaCombe for When Your Monster Has The Sneazles
Congratulations to all of you for fantastic elements of your stories! You may all email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com to collect your prize, which is your choice of one of the following: (the titles are all links so you can go see what they’re about)
If you already have all these, or can’t decide, or want to build up your wish list fund:
A $5 Amazon Email Gift Certificate
Now then. A word about the prizes before I announce the winners.
We have 12 fabulous prizes, generously donated by authors and various professionals in the writing field. My policy is to let the first place winner have first pick of all the prizes, the second place winner have second choice, etc. That way hopefully nobody gets something they already have, and hopefully everyone gets something that’s valuable to them. All prizes are listed at the bottom of this post for your convenience in perusing the goodies 🙂
Now.
Finally!
Onto the moment you’ve all been waiting for. . .
. . . the reason you got out of bed this morning. . .
. . . in spite of shadows under your bleary eyes. . .
. . . and the candy corn that is stuck in your monsterly bed head!!!
. . . THE WINNERS OF THE 2017 HALLOWEENSIE CONTEST as chosen by you, our esteemed voters!!!!!
In First Place, winner of the whole entire contest and top of the heap who gets first choice of all the prizes…
Dawn Young
for
Clomp, Stomp, Chomp!
Congratulations, Dawn, on a delightful and humorous entry with good tension that was all around well done and clearly very popular!!!
In Second Place,
Debbie Day
for
Attack Of The Vampire Cookie
Congratulations, Debbie, on a creative, wonderfully written entry with a great title! You get first choice of the prizes that are left after Dawn chooses!
In Third Place,
Lucretia Schafroth for Marvin…The Monster
Congratulations, Lucretia, on an entertaining entry with a great surprise ending that we all loved! You get first choice of the prizes that are left after Dawn and Debbie choose!
In Fourth Place,
Jennifer Broedel
for Beware The Candysnatch
Congratulations, Jennifer, on a fun version of the classic rhyme with a great ending! You get to pick a prize after Dawn, Debbie, and Lucretia!
In Fifth Place,
Judy Sobanski for Vampire Has A Sweet Tooth
Congratulations, Judy, on your well written entry with a resourceful MC! You get to pick your prize after Dawn, Debbie, Lucretia, and Jennifer!
In Sixth Place,
Kelly Conroy
for
Werewolf Trick Or Treat
Congratulations, Kelly, on your well written just-the-right-amount-of-scary entry! You get to pick your prize after Dawn, Debbie, Lucretia, Jennifer, and Judy!
In Seventh Place,
Jessica Bennett
for Shadow Play
Congratulations, Jessica, on your delightfully spooky story! I’m sure you get the idea of the prize picking by now! 🙂
In Eighth Place,
Chambrae Griffith for Boogley’s Halloween
Congratulations, Chambrae, for a wonderful character and well written story with a nice surprise ending! You get to pick your prize after Jessica.
In Ninth Place
Susie Sawyer
for The Scariest House On The Block
Congratulations, Susie, on your humorous depiction of every kid’s worst Halloween nightmare 🙂 You get to prize pick after Chambrae.
In Tenth Place,
Katie Frawley
for Vampette’s Visions
Congratulations, Katie, on a fun backward twist of an entry that we all loved! You get to pick a prize after Susie…!
In Eleventh Place, a tie between
JenniferCole Judd and Sara Gentry
for for Bathilda’s Scary SurpriseJimmy’s Nighttime Guest
Congratulations Jen and Sara on your wonderful, kid-friendly, fun-spooky entries! You two will have to fight over the last two prizes, but I’ll give priority to whoever emails me first 🙂
And, I don’t think I need to remind anyone that in addition to all these fabulous prizes, everyone mentioned on this page has bragging rights as having won or placed in the Pretty Much World Famous Halloweensie Contest! Not just anyone can say that 🙂
All the winners should email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com with the subject heading Prize Winner so we can work out details for you to receive your prizes! Finalists who did not finish in the top 12 (Christine and Deborah) may also contact me for their choice of the Kindle or paperback prizes listed above. If you choose a prize that requires snail mailing, PLEASE include your snail mail address so we don’t have to email back and forth too many times 🙂
Congratulations again to all our winners – it was a stiff competition!! – and congratulations to EVERYONE who wrote and entered a story in the contest. You all deserve a huge round of applause, a confetti parade, and a large amount of chocolate cake 🙂
Thank you to everyone who helped make this contest SO MUCH FUN, whether by writing an entry, reading people’s stories, leaving comments for the authors, and/or voting in the finals, or by donating a prize! It’s because of all of you that this contest was such a success, so many, many thanks from the bottom of my heart!
And before we go, I will give you all advance warning so you can start planning a little time into your December schedule…
The 7th Annual Holiday Writing Contest will be coming up sometime in the neighborhood of December 8-12 so we can all fully enjoy it and still have time for last minute holiday things. I will do my best to post the rules well in advance (maybe the Saturday after Thanksgiving, good lord willin’ and the creek don’t rise! 🙂 ) so you all have time to work on your stories!
Have a terrific weekend everyone, and thanks again for making the Halloweensie Contest such a wonderful time for all! 🙂
The Prizes:
– a read and Skype critique of a picture book manuscript by the fabulous editor Callie Metler-Smith of Clear Fork/Spork Publishing!!!
– a 30 minute Skype conversation/critique of a picture book manuscript with the amazingly wonderful and talented author Penny Klostermann!!! (THERE WAS AN OLD DRAGON WHO SWALLOWED A KNIGHT – Random House 2015, A COOKED-UP FAIRY TALE – Random House 2017)
– a webinar of your choice from among the selection offered by Julie Hedlund on her Teachable site (details of selection choice to be discussed with Julie)
Julie Hedlund
– a picture book manuscript critique from accomplished author/illustrator Cori Doerrfeld (PENNY LOVES PINK – Little Brown 2011, LITTLE BUNNY FOO FOO: THE REAL STORY – Dial 2012 and the forthcoming THE RABBIT LISTENED – Dial 2018 and THE TRUE ADVENTURES OF ESTHER THE WONDER PIG – Little Brown 2018, and many, many more!)
Cori Doerrfeld
– a picture book manuscript critique from talented author Lynne Marie (HEDGEHOG GOES TO KINDERGARTEN – Scholastic 2011, HEDGEHOG’S 100th DAY OF SCHOOL – Scholastic 2017, THE STAR OF THE CHRISTMAS PLAY – Sparkhouse Family 2018 and MOLDILOCKS AND THE 3 SCARES – Sterling, TBA. Her stories, articles and poems have appeared in many magazines, including Family Fun, Highlights, High Five, Spider and Baby Bug. She’s a Feature Columnist/On-staff writer for Children’s Book Insider, a book reviewer and a 2016/17 Cybils Picture Book Panelist. She’s a former New Yorker who now lives a simpler life on a lake in South Florida with her daughter and several resident water birds.
Lynne Marie
– a query letter critique from SubIt Club Founder and fabulous author Heather Burnell (BEDTIME MONSTER – Raven Tree Press 2010, KICK! JUMP! CHOP!: The Adventures of the Ninjabread Man – Sterling 2017)
– a Bundle Of Books from KidLit411 (must be selected by someone in the USA due to postage) which will include picture books and middle grade book, about 7 in total, details still to come. (Totally awesome for writers, readers, parents, teachers, or gift-givers!!!)
– a personalized signed copy of GRIMELDA AND THE SPOOKTACULAR PET SHOW by Diana MurrayPLUS a personalized signed copy of BIG SISTER, LITTLE MONSTER by Andria Rosenbaum
– a personalized signed copy of MANJHI MOVES A MOUNTAIN by Nancy Churnin
– a copy of MEET WOOF & QUACK by Jamie Swenson and donated by the illustrator, Ryan Sias
Please join me again in thanking these very generous authors and other writing professionals for contributing their books and writing expertise as prizes by visiting their websites and blogs, considering their books and services for holiday or other gift purchases, rating and/or reviewing their books on GoodReads, Amazon, B&N or anywhere else if you like them, or supporting them in any other way you can dream up 🙂
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