Would You Read It Wednesday – The 23rd Pitch

Wow!  There is so much fun stuff going on it’s hard to keep track!
First off, thank you all for your enthusiastic response to Oh Susanna!  I’ve already got a couple questions, so I’ll probably post the first episode of that feature on Monday.  Lest the first also be the last, though, please send more questions 🙂
Second, guess what I get to do today?  Interview the talented author/illustrator Michael Garland – in person! – so that I can share the interview with you on Sunday!!!  I know.  I said the author interviews this year were going to be the 3rd Sunday of the month.  But January started on a Sunday so that one doesn’t count!  I hope you’ll all tune in this Sunday January 22.  I’m sure Michael will have lots of wonderful things to share, and I will do a book giveaway in conjunction with the interview.  I think something along the lines of comment on which Michael Garland book you love most or would most like to own and why…  But maybe I’ll think up something to make it more challenging… 🙂  I am open to suggestions… what do you think would be fun?
Third, (see, I TOLD you there was all kinds of fun stuff going on!) I am going to be hosting an event for the Ossining Open Door facility of Reach Out And Read on February 22.  Look at this totally cool poster:
And for our Spanish-speaking audience (which alas is not me!)…
sorry the bottoms got cut off – I had a terrible time uploading these!
How cool is that?!
Reach Out And Read seeks to get books into the hands of children ages 2-5 who otherwise wouldn’t have any.  In conjunction with this event, we are trying to get as many donations of my books as possible to give away for free to the kids that attend.  If you’d be interested in donating a copy of Can’t Sleep Without SheepPunxsutawney PhyllisApril Fool, PhyllisNot Yet, RoseAirplane Flight or Freight Train Trip, you can order from Merritt Bookstore at (845) 677-5857.  Tell them the book is for Susanna Hill’s Reach Out And Read event and you will get a 20% discount and no tax on your purchase of the books for Reach Out And Read.  Open Door will collect the books on February 1st for inventory and transport, so if you’re interested, please call before February 1.
And now, finally, grab your chocolate and get ready for Would You Read It!
This week’s pitch comes to us from Margaret.  (Her blog is just getting started, so hop on over and make her feel welcome to our writing community!)  Margaret is from the Silicon Valley and is a full-time SAHM of 2 young children (SAHM is mom blogger speak for Stay-At-Home-Mom.)  She is also a budding entrepreneur and picture book writer.  Like all of us, she is looking for a formula to stretch time so if you find one… 🙂
Here is her pitch:
Working Title:  Home Is Where The Bird Is
Age/Genre:  Picture Book
The Pitch:  Bird thought he found his perfect birdhouse – until he encountered the mouse living inside.  After a feather-raising experience house hunting on his own, Bird asks Mouse for help.  Mouse leads Bird on a hilarious tour of unconventional housing options.  As winter looms, will Bird accept anything but his perfect birdhouse?
So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Margaret improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  Pitches are currently queued through March 7, but there are lots of openings after that, so send your pitch for a chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!
Margaret is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!
Please join us Friday for Perfect Picture Books!  I have such a wonderful book to share that I can barely wait to tell you what it is… but I will 🙂  See you Friday!

76 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday – The 23rd Pitch

  1. Saba says:

    LOL! yes I would read it. Why? Well, when you think of a bird looking for a place to live, you think high places, trees, nooks and cranies of houses, tall buildings, cliffs etc. I would not imagine finding a mouse living up high off the ground. Another thing that caught my attention and made me chuck was the wording, “feather-raising”, “house-hunting” (can you picture a mouse and bird going house hunting? lol) and “unconventional” housing. I think the word 'unconventional' got me hooked. 🙂 This seems like it is going to be one fun and hilarious story!!

  2. Vivian Kirkfield says:

    Reach out and Read…putting books in the hands of children who have none!
    Would you read it…giving aspiring picture book writers a platform to present their ideas (and yes, I would read it! I wanted to know more…what housing options did mouse show him and what will his final choice be. It is a tale told before in different ways…but that doesn't matter. Children love stories like this…they love the humor and silliness and will eagerly await the return of the bird to his proper home.)
    Perfect Picture Book Friday…providing an unbelievable resource of book summaries and activities for parents and teachers.
    So, Susannah, that's why I've given you the Versatile Bloggr Award. 🙂 http://viviankirkfield.wordpress.com/2012/01/18/project-365-challenge-day-17-awards-and-attitudes/#comment-1992

  3. Joanna Marple says:

    Love your Reach out and Read project, Susanna, and super it is for Spanish speakers too.

    I confess it is hard for me to pick a Michael Garland favorite, I do love so much of his work!

    YES, I would most definitely read this picture book. It has great potential for humor and the problem is cool! I think I would try and shorten the pitch just a little.

  4. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    I'm so glad to be part of Reach Out And Read! It's such a wonderful program. And I hate to think of any child growing up without books – every child should have at least one. As for Michael, anything you want me to tell him when I see him today? Any specific questions?

  5. Erik - This Kid Reviews Books says:

    I just realized that the “Reach Out and Read” charity is one that I have been trying to win books for (the Philadelphia Reach Out and Read)! My mom works at a children's hospital and they have a drive for books. It's a good idea to do your own drive!

  6. Jess says:

    Yes, I would definitely read this! It's got humor, conflict, and the potential for some awesome illustrations! Congrats on your project, Susanna, and thanks for doing something so worthwhile! Love the posters 🙂

  7. Margaret Greanias says:

    Congrats Susanna on the Versatile Bloggr Award!
    Vivan — thank you for the feedback. Did you want to know more in the pitch, or was it an “I want to know more so I would read it” comment?

  8. Miranda Paul says:

    Susanna – great program!

    Margaret – YES I would read it! Though I wonder if changing the pitch to be present tense or shortening it up a little bit might make it even stronger and more suspenseful! Good luck with this!

  9. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thank you, Margaret! 🙂

    Margaret Greanias (unregistered) wrote, in response to Vivian Kirkfield:

    Congrats Susanna on the Versatile Bloggr Award!
    Vivan — thank you for the feedback. Did you want to know more in the pitch, or was it an “I want to know more so I would read it” comment?

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  10. Darshana says:

    Susanna – will you be accepting questions we might have for authors/illustrators you are planning to interview?

    Margaret – first I am thrilled to have you be a part of the blogging world. congrats on deciding to start a blog. second, i am glad to see the pitch for this story. i love the words “feather-raising experience”, great use of words. I think the 1st and 3rd lines could use a little tightening. I think the 2nd and 4th lines are perfect.

    (fyi- margaret and i are in a critique group. i've read the MS it is creative & hilarious, a fun read. i hope it gets picked up soon as i'm dying to see some illustrations to go with it).

  11. Cathy Mealey says:

    I recall some shocking experiences when I house hunting, so I am REALLY curious to see what Bird encounters! Hmm…will they become housemates? I love it!

    SLH – congrats on the ROR event. Terrific!

  12. Renee LaTulippe says:

    YES. I think Margaret really has a winner here. I would also try to shorten the pitch, but please don't take out “feather-raising” and “unconventional housing!” I think the premise is unique and an illustrator would have a ball with it. Brava – well done!

    And Susanna, congrats on all your cool news, too! So you're near Ossining – my aunt is a Maryknoll Sister there!

  13. Rosalind Adam says:

    It sounds like a great idea. It's already been said below but I too think it would benefit from shortening and thereby tightening up the pitch.

  14. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Absolutely, Darshana. I've already spoken with Michael, but if you have a question for him I'm sure I can ask 🙂 And if there's something you'd like to know of all authors, that would be great to know. And I guess it's a small world – you and Margaret already knowing each other 🙂

  15. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thanks, Renee. Yes, I'm about 45+ minutes from Ossining? And in case you're wondering, I have spent half my day outside in the frigid wind messing with the camera… hair in my face… forgetting the words… freezing… literally… It's going very well!

  16. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    chatterchatterchatter…. I would tell you if my teeth would stop chattering!

    Renee LaTulippe (unregistered) wrote, in response to Susanna Leonard Hill:

    Hahaha, Susanna! Too funny! I mean…thank you! Or..um…I'm sorry? I'm filming two tomorrow, hoping for decent weather. Can't wait to hear more about your experience! 🙂

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  17. Clarike Bowman-Jahn says:

    about the pitch: OH! Yes! I'd read it. Sounds like a great pitch but maybe a little too long. It would be a good back of the book blurb though. Maybe not give away so much.

    About the reach out and read: congrats! I'll call the store and order one to give away

  18. Hannah says:

    Susanna- wow, you have some very cool projects lined up!
    Margaret, Yes I would read it. I also think that maybe it could be shortened or streamlined. Hmmm. Consider take out the last sentence or trying something like “Bird finds the perfect birdhouse… too bad Mouse got there first. Wanting to help, Mouse leads Bird on a hilarious tour of unconventional housing options. As winter looms, will Bird find a nest of her own?”

    I know I'm totally taking out what a lot of other people liked, and probably lost the character of your story. Just trying to mix it up. Best of luck! Pitches are hard.

  19. pennyklostermann says:

    Yes! Not only would I read it…I want to read it. If your book is anything like your premise, it will be irresistible. I'm not sure if bird needs to hunt on his own. That seems like two adventures. The first being bird and his feather-raising hunt, and the second being Mouse leading Bird on the tour. Mouse leading Bird is what is irresistible to me. After all, he is in Bird's house so the least he can do is help Bird out. Just my opinion. To sum it up…write the book, please 🙂

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