Would You Read It Wednesday #80 – Phewie Hughie (PB) PLUS The February Pitch Pick Winner

Woo-hoo!  It’s Wednesday!  And you know what that means 🙂

Something Chocolate!!!

Help yourselves, dahlings 🙂

Before we get started, I’d like to thank everyone who participated to help our young Jedi friend, Renn, get through his long days in the hospital.  If you didn’t get a chance to see all the wonderful creations from our large-hearted community, please go HERE and hop through the link list.  Prepare to be blown away! 🙂  Just so you know, and can all send extra thoughts and prayers, today is the really tough day, but he will hopefully be able to go home at the end of it or tomorrow.

Also, I’d like to remind you all (and let’s be honest, I’m reminding myself while I’m at it :)) that the In Just Spring Contest (details HERE) opens on Friday March 15 (that’s in 2 days, peeps!) and the first place winner will get to have one of their picture book manuscripts read by editor Laura Galvin at KidsBooks (or, should the winner happen not to write picture books or want a read by an actual real live editor at a real live publishing house, the winner will get a writing book and gift certificate and the editor prize will go to the next highest placed finisher who wants it! :))  So I hope you’re all getting your stories finished up!

This also means that there will be no Perfect Picture Book Friday link up this Friday because we will be reading the fabulous stories written by you! 🙂 and there will also not be a new post Monday (so we can keep reading your stories) or a WYRI next Wednesday because we will be voting on who should win.  Hopefully we will actually get some entries for this contest or it will be a very boring blog week here on Blueberry Hill 🙂

Now, onto WYRI business!  Anyone need another slice of cake? 🙂

The winner of the February Pitch Pick is Wendy with her pitch for Why Fireflies Should NEVER Drink Soda!  Congratulations, Wendy!!!  (Apparently Wendy is the name to have – we’ve had Wendys win two months in a row :))  And congratulations to all our pitchers for excellent pitches, all of which were improved thanks to reader feedback.

Today’s pitch comes to us from Denise.  Denise says, “I’m a lover of all things Anne of Green Gables and Maud Montgomery so am so thankful to live on PEI. I’m also a Christian mom of 4 wonderful children, all named for Lucy Maud Montgomery characters of some sort. When I’m not cleaning, baking, playing, I do get to go to Bible Study and take Rilla, age 7, and Emily. (boys aren’t ready for that yet lol)… I think it’s important that our kids go so they will learn more about God and get used to hearing about God, thereby loving Him more.  I also collect paper dolls.  My daughter is in the works of making some more clothes just for Phyllis, who’s a very patient lass, she is 🙂

You can visit Denise:

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: Phewie Hughie
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: Hughie loves his toots. The louder the better, but because Hughie thought everyone should love his toots, he had a hard time understanding why no one appreciated his wonderful ability until two children come to an important dinner and Hughie’s dad reminds him to remember his manners.  Mayhem happens after Hughie realizes he just can’t hold it in.   Will Hughie find a way to control his engine’s noise and find friends along the way?

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Denise improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in May so send in your pitches for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Denise is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to the In Just Spring Contest (for which I haven’t even begun writing my sample, so you can only imagine how dreadful it’s going to be :))  I can’t wait to read lots and lots of stories about spring, lovely spring!… so I really hope we get some 🙂

Have a great day, everyone! 🙂

65 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #80 – Phewie Hughie (PB) PLUS The February Pitch Pick Winner

  1. Patricia Tilton says:

    Denise – Yes, I would read this. I was laughing while reading. Enough people gave you suggestions, but this is a lot of fun. I could see part 2 with belching.

    Congratulations Wendy.

    Susanna, hope I'm back up and running now.

  2. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thanks for your comments, Tina – and how nice that you and Denise have so much in common 🙂 Hope you enjoy your chocolate, and hope I'll see a contest entry from you! 🙂

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    Denise,
    I'd read this, and I used the word toot with my kids as well.I'd take out the part “but because Hughie thought everyone should love his toots.” I also love Anna of Green Gables & going to Bible study! How neat you live on PEI! Susanna, the chocolate looks wonderful! It keeps staring at me like I need to go make something chocolaty now!
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  3. Tracy Campbell says:

    Yummy chocolate.
    The posts for Renn were fantastic.
    All the best to everyone who has written a story for your spring contest
    I loved today's pitch. 🙂

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