Would You Read It Wednesday #85 – A Noise In The Dark (PB)

You know, there is always adventure around here! 🙂

I went for my annual haircut.

Now just hold your horses!  How do you know haircuts aren’t an adventure?  I haven’t told it yet!

AS I was saying…!  I went for my annual haircut.

I know.  Once a year might be more than is strictly necessary here in the boondocks, but I like to keep somewhat properly groomed so the bears don’t think I’m one of them.

But the lovely salon girl and I seem to have had a breakdown in communication.

I said, “Shoulder length so I can still put it in a ponytail when I go running.”

She apparently heard, “Earlobe length, or even a little higher if you feel like it.”

An easy mistake.  Anyone could make it.

Shoulder-length.  Temple fringe.

They sound practically the same.


So, yeah, my hair is pretty short, and not by any feat of brushing, combing or hair product is it going to be in a ponytail for a while 🙂

Luckily hair grows 🙂  eventually 🙂

Also luckily, an unexpected haircut outcome is nothing a little Something Chocolate can’t fix! 🙂  Hmm… what should we have today?  How about…


MILKSHAKES!  I, of course, opt for chocolate, but for those of you who have trouble facing it at this hour of the morning (Julie R-Z! :)) I’m offering strawberry as well, which is made of fruit and that’s good for you 🙂

Now then, let’s get comfy for Would You Read It.

Today’s pitch comes to us from Cynthia who says, “I’m a writer, a mother and an animal lover on the road to publication. I write poems, young adult and picture books. Visit my website at Random Thought at    www.randomthoughts-myblog.blogspot.com   You can find me there every Tuesday. “

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: A Noise In The Dark
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 5 and up)
The Pitch: Nicky’s closet is making so much noise that it’s scaring him half to death.  So much so that he’s clutching at his chest.  His mother says its just a branch against a window pane, but Nicky knows what lurks beyond is so much more then rain.  Come with Nicky into the dark, and tame the fears that are hidden in the heart.

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Cynthia improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in June so you have time to polish your pitch for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Cynthia is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to my hair growing.  That’s probably like watching a pot of water and waiting for it to boil, though…  🙂

Have a great day, everyone… you know, whatever blows your hair back! 🙂

56 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #85 – A Noise In The Dark (PB)

  1. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thanks for your very helpful suggestions for Cynthia, Vivian, and thanks for that wonderful story! No one would mistake me for someone entering the service – I have quite a bit more hair than that! – so I guess I'm pretty lucky 🙂


  2. Stina Lindenblatt says:

    lol So I'm not the only one who has annual haircuts. That sucks what she did. I had one bad haircut a few years ago that left me looking like a punk rocker. It probably would have looked better with pink chunks in it.

  3. Lauri Meyers says:

    Maybe-I'm still scared of what might be hiding in the closet! This reads more like jacket cover and less like a pitch. I'd like to see more specifics about what is happening, the problem, how he will attempt to solve it… etc. The old branch on the window seems overdone. Give me a little more hook – alien fingers? a funny clown?

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