Would You Read It Wednesday #101 – Cartwheel Queen (PB) PLUS The July Pitch Pick!

Next year I would like someone to remind me in June that August is an insane month and I should plan NOTHING!

Since I forgot this year, I’m in over my head.  And that’s with only one regular blog post per week!  I am seriously hoping that things are going to settle down and get more organized when school starts.  Otherwise I shall have to check myself into a home! 🙂

So quick, darlings, everyone help yourself to more of Coleen’s goodies – Peanut Butter Rice Krispie treats today (please note the luscious chocolate drizzle which qualifies them as our Something Chocolate!)

Photo copyright Coleen Patrick 2013 used by permission

YUM!  And totally breakfast because they’ve got the word Rice Krispie right in the title!  You really cannot argue with that 🙂

And now let’s get right down to business!

First, we’ve got the July Pitch Pick.  Our brave pitchers have taken all your excellent advice to heart and revised their pitches to the best of their abilities.  Here are the choices:

#1 Lisa
That Tommy Thompson (PB ages 5 and up)
Just a girl???? Abigail Richmond was not about to let “that” Tommy Thompson ruin her day. In fact, she has just enough confidence combined with a dash of sass that allows her to prove she can do anything she puts her mind to, just like some other famous women in history. Luckily, she also has the smarts to know what she shouldn’t do. 

#2 Rachel
The Curse of The Shattered Sceptre (Chapter Book/MG)
After accidentally unleashing a torrent of curses, Ollie and his Book Club buddies must use their wits and imagination to unravel a series of twisted clues. In a race against time, will the boys mend the shattered sceptre, restoring the balance of nature, or will they be cursed forever? 

#3 Angela
Fable Ranger (MG)
Swept away in a storm of rose petals, twelve-year-old Case lands in a world of make-believe, chosen by the book of Lorealia as the new Fable Ranger. But in a realm where Prince Charming always saves the day, she’s dismissed…just for being a girl. Proving bravery comes in all packages, Case ventures off to reverse the evil Dovetail’s enchantments. He’s unbalanced magic and forced the Red Rose Bounds to shut down. Unless Case completes the tasks to set magic right, she’ll remain trapped in a spiraling happily-never-after or worse, captured by Dovetail himself.

#4 Vivian
The Tomato Turner Gets A Job (PB ages 4 and up)
The annual summer bike relay is only two weeks away,  but no matter how many times Peter counts the money in his piggy bank, it’s still not enough to buy the new bike he needs to join his best friend’s team. Peter must find a way to earn more…fast! Mixing Gardener’s Gold is not the best smelling job – but his piggy bank IS getting heavier – if only he could stop breathing or make the manure smell better.

I know it’s a tough choice (as always!) but please choose the pitch you think deserves a read by editor Erin Molta and cast your vote by 11:59 PM EDT Sunday August 25.

Thank you so much for voting!

Now!  Onward! 🙂

Today’s pitch comes to us from Carrie who says, “My passion for picture books and literacy began while studying to be an elementary teacher.  I took a break from teaching this past school year to immerse myself into writing full-time.  I guess you could say I finally figured out what all the brain babble was for!  

You can find me on my blog site Carrie On… at www.carriecharleybrown.com or follow me on Facebook www.fb.com/carrie.brown.56614#, Twitter @carriebrowntx, or You Tube https://www.youtube.com/user/carriecharleybrown“

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: Cartwheel Queen
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 3-6)
The Pitch: After learning how to do a cartwheel, Queen Carina begins her rule over Cartwheelandia. Cheers and cartwheels explode through the crowd, but stop short with Carina’s heart-broken little brother.  In an effort to restore peace to the kingdom, Queen Carina does all she can to help Caden train to be the greatest Cartwheel King that ever lived.

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Carrie improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in September so we could really use some new pitches!  Send yours for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Carrie is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to something so wonderful you won’t even believe it!!  We are expecting a new grandbaby and he or she is due to be delivered TOMORROW!!!  Next time you see me I’ll be a grandmother again… or a grandfather 🙂  Meanwhile, hoping all will go smoothly with the delivery and that this little one will be as healthy and wonderful as his or her big sister!

Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone! 🙂

70 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #101 – Cartwheel Queen (PB) PLUS The July Pitch Pick!”

  3. Angela Brown says:
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    Congratulations on the new grandbaby-to-come. That is such awesomesauce news!!

    As for today's pitch, I do love seeing kiddos do cartwheels, so that would intrigue me to read the story. However, I paused when it got to the brother…mainly because I didn't link the heartbreak with peace or no peace in Cartwheelandia (that is such an adorable name!) If that can be clarified a bit, that would be great.

  4. Genevieve Petrillo says:
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    I like the pitch, and would not only love to read it, but would love to see the illustrations, which I'm sure would be action packed and lots of fun. I'm unsure of why there is not peace in the kingdom, just because the brother can't do a cartwheel. I think I need a clearer picture of the actual problem…

  5. Carrie Charley Brown says:
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    Thank you so much for the feedback, everyone! This was a tough pitch to write because it is a super simple topic and I don't want to give the resolution or twist away completely. Here are the basics…maybe you can help: Problem: Queen Carina announces that everyone must do a cartwheel to enter the pretend kingdom of Cartwheelandia. Caden cannot do a cartwheel, so in order to keep the peace, Carina helps him learn how. As a reward, she passes her throne to him in the end and moves on to her next goal as a jump roping jester. Thanks for your help!

  7. Carrie Charley Brown says:
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    Thanks, Genevieve! You are right, this story relies on the illustrations to paint the pretend world, too. It is really just a backyard/garage scene…but Carina is so proud of herself that she dubs herself queen after achieving a cartwheel. One bawling little brother can cause quite a ruckus in an agreeable kingdom. 🙂

  8. Patricia Tilton says:
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    Sorry I'm late. Yes, I'd read the book. I liked the pitch, especially with further explanations about the backdrop from Carrie. My mind was in a kingdom at first.
    Congratulations on the new grandbaby!

  9. Rachel says:
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    I like your pitch Carrie. The story sounds really cute and I know my daughters would love it as they are always cartwheeling around the place. I can imagine there would be some great illustrations to go with your story.

  11. disqus_xkUvROpuwp says:
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    I would definitely read it! I think that this is a great concept, and I have had the pleasure of reading the fantastic manuscript! I know it will land someday- Good Luck, Carrie! 😀

  17. Susanna Leonard Hill says:
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    You're helpful comments are appreciated and welcome no matter when you post them, Pat! Thanks so much! And thanks for the congrats 🙂 The baby is safely here and she is perfect and sweet! 🙂

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