Would You Read It Wednesday #119 – Simon Wants To Be A Helper (PB)

I hope you are all keeping up with Phyllis’s Fun Fashion Show which began with Monday’s post and will continue through Groundhog Day.  (And if you’d care to join in the hilarity haute couture, hop on over and see the instructions HERE.  I hope you will because there are prizes, and also because it is more fun with more people :))

So far we have two – count ’em, 2! – fabulous entries!

Done With Glum Phyllis was brought to you by Linda, and Steampunk Phyllis was decked out by Stacy.  Yes, that’s right!  The very same Stacy whose pitch we will get to in two shakes of a groundhog’s tail!

But first, you know what time it is 🙂

Since Groundhog Day is almost here, I thought we should celebrate with Something Chocolate that groundhogs AND chocolate-lovers would appreciate 🙂  Isn’t this amazing?  It is actual cake!  And the fur is all piped on buttercream frosting (and no I did not make it!)

From Cake Central

It ALMOST looks too good to eat…  🙂

Alrighty, then.  Now that we all have our mouths full of cake, today’s pitch comes to us from Stacy who says, I write {picture books and memoir}. I design {websites}. I eat {chocolate}.

Stacy can be found online at her website http://stacysjensen.com on Twitter @StacySJensen on Facebook   http://facebook.com/StacySJensen  and lurking around Pinterest at http://www.pinterest.com/stacysjensen/.

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: Simon Wants To Be A Helper
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: When Simon wakes up he decides to help his mother around the house, but his idea of helping isn’t the same as his mother’s. Just when Simon feels his assistance isn’t needed, one turn of a knob gives him a chance to make things better.  

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Stacy improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in March so you’ve got a little time to polish up your pitches and send yours for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Stacy is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to seeing more Phyllis models in stylish and creative outfits!!!  I am pretty interested to see what I’ll dress her in, since so far I haven’t the foggiest notion what it will be or how I will do it!  That is almost definitely because I am up to my eyebrows in inventing new, fun, doable crafts for my 2 library visits this weekend and not because I am totally unprepared 🙂

Ooh!  And this just in!  A new entry for the fashion show!

Olympic Phyllis by Katie Hill!

She looks totally ready, doesn’t she?  Foam finger and everything! 🙂

Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone! 🙂

58 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #119 – Simon Wants To Be A Helper (PB)

  1. This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Erik says:

    Great pitch Ms. Jensen! 😀
    I think the title could be “Simon the Helper” because it sounds less revealing, but still gets the point out that he is a “helper”. Plus, I agree with what the past commenters have said. Good luck! I can't wait to see this in print! 😀

  2. Tracy Campbell says:

    Susanna, I am enjoying all the groundhog entries being posted on MPBM FB. She'll be the best dressed groundhog. Stacey, I like the premise of your pitch. Have you thought about introducing a character trait and the age of Simon in the pitch? 🙂

  3. Belinda Brock says:

    Hi, there were too many comments to read, so I'm probably repeating what others might have said: there should be a comma after wakes up, think title could be a little snappier. Is this story more on the straight-forward or the silly side? Maybe that could be better conveyed. I would read it…my son loved to help, and he's in medical school now!

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