Would You Read It Wednesday #393 – The Good Wolf (PB)

Howdy Friends!

How’s the first week of school going for everyone? Hopefully your school buses are showing up!

Things are busy in my neck of the woods, but I got a surprise visit from my sister, so that was amazing! (Too short, but I guess every visit is. We should live closer!)

Also, in my quest to discover that which is nonessential but endlessly entertaining, I found out that Violet’s DNA test claims she is a mix of 24 breeds including 9% Chihuahua, which is why even though she looks like this:

she still clearly thinks she’s a lap dog 😊

It’s all in how you see yourself, right? 😊 I’m pretty sure there are a whole lot of good picture book ideas in that!

I don’t know about you, but I see myself having a little Something Chocolate right about now. Chocolate Oreo Cheesecake Chocolate Cake anyone? Why yes, thank you, don’t mind if I do! 😊

Oreo Cheesecake Chocolate Cake

Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Hannah who says, “Hello, there! I’m Hannah, an army wife, mother to three boys, and children’s writer. I love writing for kids because it brings out the kid in me 😊”

Find her on the web at https://www.hannahlapehnbooks.com/

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: The Good Wolf

Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)

The Pitch: All Wolfington wants is to be included, but when he goes into town, grandmothers hide, pigs squeal, and sheep faint. Fed up with the big bad wolf stereotype, Wolfington sets out to prove that his heart is bigger than his stomach.

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Hannah improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)

Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above.  There are openings in October, so you could get your pitch up pretty soon for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!

Hannah is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to reading the pile of picture books on my desk – some new, some just new to me – but all of them look good!

Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! 😊

45 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #393 – The Good Wolf (PB)

  1. authorlaurablog says:

    Yes, I would definitely read it! This is such a perfect pitch with just enough information to draw me in and not giving too much away. I also like that you’re writing about the dangers of stereotypes and preconceived ideas which is a fabulous topic. Good luck.
    Susanna, regarding the DNA testing, every dog is a lapdog!

    • Susanna Leonard Hill says:

      Thanks so much for your thoughtful reply to Hannah, Laura! And hahaha, yes, you might be right! Although most of my other big dogs (and I’ve only ever had big dogs) have been content to sit/lie next to me – not ON me! 😊

  2. ptnozell says:

    Yes, I definitely would read this, Hannah. Like Laura said, this is a fabulous topic. And I love that last phrase, “his heart was bigger than his stomach.” Awww! You’ve got us rooting for Wolfington!

    Our mostly coon hound grandpup thinks she’s a lapdog, too, Susanna. For some reason, the DNA test companies fail to include lapdog in the results.

  3. Sarah Meade says:

    Yes, I’d read this! I love books where the “bad guys” are really good guys. This sounds delightful. I love the details about what happens when the MC goes into town. Best wishes with this story, Hannah!

  4. marsue77 says:

    I love it and the pitch is just enough to pique my interest. I adore the breaking down of stereotypes. Just wondering are there other wolves in the story? Is he the only Good Wolf? Yes, I agree with Deborah Foster, your website is very inviting. Good luck.

  5. Judy Sobanski says:

    I would definitely read this! Great job of referencing the original “wolf” stories and breaking that stereotype with your story pitch! Sounds really fun!

  6. Patti Ranson (@RansonPatti) says:

    Yes, it sounds awesome! The main character and his problem are clearly stated! I think the title is ‘good’ but not ‘great’. An adult would understand the play on The Good Wife title but a child needs a little more to grab onto in order to pluck it off the shelf.

  7. rosecappelli says:

    Yes, I would definitely read this story. I kept reading over your pitch and couldn’t come up with much to suggest for improvement. It’s concise, tells what it needs to tell, and invites the reader into the book to find out how he proved himself. The only thing I might suggest is that although it hints at humor with the reactions of the characters, you might think of adding something so there is no question that this is a funny book. Are there specific words or additional situations you could include? But really, it’s probably fine the way it is. Good luck with this one! I’d love to read it.

  8. marty bellis says:

    This is an intriguing pitch. I’d definitely read your story. One bit of confusion for me: you say the wolf goes to town, where he finds pigs and sheep. What are they doing in town?! Maybe clarify a bit, if this is indeed the case?

    Susanna, belatedly getting my vote in for the Halloweensie contest. Hope you’ll do it again. Always look forward to it 🙂

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