Would You Read It Wednesday #292 – The Boys Who Brushed Teeth Too Much (PB)

Happy 4th of July, Everyone!

Due to all our work/life schedules, I’d love to share what my daughter shared on FB yesterday, but it was a SomeCards meme  that used an impolite word, and as this blog is family-friendly and g-rated I will have to summarize by saying that it showed Thomas Jefferson on July 3, 1776 realizing he had a serious and as yet unmet work deadline coming up 🙂

I think we can all relate 🙂

Since it’s July 4th, I suppose we should be celebrating with a snack in patriotic colors.  But chocolate brown is not one of them, and what kind of celebration would it be without chocolate???!!!  (And I’m sorry – white chocolate and red velvet just don’t cut it! 🙂  And even if they did, what the heck chocolate would qualify as blue?!)

So let’s just throw caution to the wind and make brownies out of candy!

Ferrero Rocher Fudge Brownies

I think we can all agree they have a firecracker-y celebratory look about them! 🙂

Hip hip hooray for the 4th of July and Something Fabulously Chocolate!!! 🙂

Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Katie whom you will remember from her recent pitch for The Tooth Fairy Conference and who says, “I’m an educator, Word Nerd, and Ice Cream-Loving Optimist. Faith, family, and fitness are my motivators. My #1 writing goal is picture books featuring Big Ideas for Young Minds (also the name of my main blog). My side gig is creating teaching resources (my own and for hire).

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: The Boys Who Brushed Teeth Too Much (and almost destroyed the world)

Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 5-9)

The Pitch:  In this modern nod to Panchatantra fables, Advik’s addiction to a toothbrushing game app accidentally launches a gum abrasion pandemic that threatens global shut-down. When his tech-avoidant brother, Barun, realizes he’s part of the problem, too, the boys must unite to restore dental and mental balance to the world before it’s too late.

·        ~775 words, PB ages 5-9+

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Katie improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)

Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above.  There are openings in September, which will be here before you know it, so polish up your pitch and submit for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!

Katie is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to whenever this insane heatwave ends!  Meanwhile, if you need me, the dogs and I plan to tie cool wet cloths around our heads (a look I’m sure will set a new trend 🙂 ) and lie on the floor in front of the fan 🙂  Come on over and hang out with us!

Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! 🙂