Would You Read It Wednesday #107 – The Great UFO Hunt (ER) PLUS Straight From The Editor

I love my dogs.

I really do.

They keep me company while I work.  They are warm and cuddly and sweet and lovable.  They’re always up for an outing if the writing is not going well.

Really, how can you not love these two?
(Even though they are blurry because it’s next to impossible
to get them both in the same picture :))

But yesterday?

Yes, well, yesterday, I can’t say I was terribly happy with either one of them.

First, on a perfectly lovely morning run, during which I don’t recall losing sight of Scout (although Jemma disappeared for a while to investigate the neighbor’s compost heap), Scout somehow managed to get skunked.

we run here – no cars, so no leashes

Those of you who have dogs know that anything to do with skunks IS NOT FUN!

How could I have not seen it happen?  I was right there!

Nevertheless, skunked she was.  And I didn’t have time to wash her – I had to get my daughter to school!  So I had to gate her in the kitchen, open all the windows, and pray that her extreme odor wouldn’t asphyxiate either dog while I was gone and that I would somehow be able to get the smell out of the house when I returned.

Then came the bathing.

Although she will get in any scummy, algae covered, filth-laden mud puddle, pond or stream as long as it isn’t actually iced over, Scout does NOT like to be bathed!

And when I am alone, with no one to hold on to her, bathing Scout is an Olympic sport, let me tell you!

Afterwards, she sulked.

See?  She wouldn’t even look at me.

Then, while she was still QUITE wet (it’s hard to comprehend how much water that coat holds if you haven’t experienced it firsthand), the guy showed up out of nowhere to service the furnace.

“But you said October 3rd!” I sputtered, when he insisted the dogs be shut up before he got out of the truck.

So I had to shut them in my office… which now smells like wet skunk dog with a trace of lemon dish soap.  Quite the scent.  I think Febreze will be introducing it this fall.

So then, when he finally left, I put them out in hopes of airing out the house…

… and they conveniently found something dead to roll in….

…so we had another round of baths….

…and now my house smells like wet skunk dog mixed with barely concealed dead animal and a trace of lemon dish soap.

Truthfully it’s a miracle I was even able to write this 🙂

I think that calls for Something Chocolate if anything ever did!

Let’s go hog wild!!! (with many thanks to Kathy P. for the photo!! :))

It’s called Candy Shop Truffle!
(but it kind of looks like cereal so let’s pretend it’s good for us :))

So, after all that!, we have the August Straight From The Editor.  You will recall that Lisa won the August Pitch Pick with her pitch for The Golden Egg, a PB for ages 5-8.

Here is her pitch:

The golden egg that doesn’t hatch creates quite a stir among the feathered friends on the farm. The Eggsperts are called and the Whisperers weigh in. In the end, Mother Hen must decide whether to follow their advice or listen to her heart.

And here is what Erin had to say:

This sounds like it has potential, but in order for an editor to be intrigued you have to clarify it a bit. I love the Eggsperts and can imagine all the other hens giving advice, but who are the Whisperers? Are they the horses, or the cows? Some other animal entirely? If so, if you are envisioning the horses, perhaps you can say something like the Whisperers neighed their opinions or the Whisperers mooed their recommendations. If it’s a snake then the Whisperers would hiss . . .  It helps to draw a picture in the reader’s mind.  Good luck!

As always, I find Erin’s comments interesting and enlightening!  Thank you, Erin, and thank you Lisa!

Now, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Kari who says, “I live in upstate NY and resurrected this children’s series I started way back in elementary school.  My stories are based in part on things that happened to me and my friends when we were younger.  Living in a very small town in the middle of nowhere, you had to make your own fun, just like Mekayla and her friends do.”

Twitter (I just joined twitter so there’s not much there yet):https://twitter.com/kariwithey 

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: The Great UFO Hunt
Age/Genre: Early Reader
The Pitch: Aspiring space explorer Mekayla is convinced she sees a UFO crash land in the woods behind her house.  But despite finding evidence of something from another world, no one but her friends believe her!  With weird things happening in their small, sleepy town, Mekayla and her friends are out to save their town and prove life from outerspace does exist.

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Kari improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in January so you have a little time to polish up your pitches and send yours for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Kari is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to when my house no longer smells like wet skunk dog with barely concealed dead animal and a trace of lemon dish soap!

See you all on Friday for PPBF!

Have a wonderful Wednesday, everyone! 🙂

62 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #107 – The Great UFO Hunt (ER) PLUS Straight From The Editor

  1. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Yes, Carrie, it was one of those days 🙂 But all is forgiven now and Scout only smells like skunk if you get with 5 or 10 feet of her 🙂 Thanks for your very helpful thoughts and suggestions for Kari – insightful as always!

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  2. Lyla Nutt says:

    First of all, getting skunked is horrible, I'm so sorry your dealing with that Susanna!

    Now, YES I would read it! Why? Because I am a UFO hunter myself, and think we need more, way more alien books on the market!

    I would specify what object she found though…

  3. Tracy Campbell says:

    I'm still “howling” with laughter, Susanna. Sorry. Really I am. I'm not a UFO fan, but the pitch intrigued me to want to find out more. Erin's comments are always helpful. 🙂

  4. Rosi says:

    OMG, that was so funny! The wet skunk dog with barely concealed dead animal and a trace of lemon dish soap just cracked me up. As for the pitch, YES I would read it. I think it is a great concept. I do, think, though that there is too much here for an early reader, but it would be a great chapter book.

  5. Kari Withey says:

    My critique group had suggested that it seemed a little too much for early reader, but not enough for middle grade, so chapter book may be where I wind up in the end.

    With the little bit I provided, I'm amazed that the suggestions I received are the same that I received from my group on what needed work and what was working. It's easier to work on if it's consistent at least!

  6. Crystal Colleir says:

    Yes! I would totally read this. And love it.

    The wet skunk dog with a trace of lemon dish soap air spray, yeah, not so much going to buy into that one. 😉

  7. Stacy S. Jensen says:

    I love the story idea. (I'm a PB person, so looks like you have lots of advice on the genre front). With the two missions, save the town and prove life from outerspace exits … the pitch made me wonder why Meykala has to prove this as she and friends already believe this. Is proving that life exists crucial to them saving the town or can they do this while the townspeople/adults are clueless? Good luck with your story. (Stinky on the skunk front Susanna.)

  8. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thanks for your comments for Kari, Tracy. I'm glad you liked Erin's thoughts on the pitch pick, and glad I could make you howl 🙂 Believe me, there was plenty of howling going on over here – most of it from me… and not in a good way 🙂

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