Would You Read It Wednesday #143 – Love, Emmett (PB)

Well, folks, here it is Wednesday again!  What a week it has been, and not a good one.

I like to keep things upbeat around here, so I won’t depress you with details.  But I haven’t got the heart for high jinx and shenanigans today.  Instead I’ll just ask that if you have kids and they’re near, give them a hug.  If they’re not near, call them and tell them how much you love them.  Take a moment to be grateful if they’re alive and well, even if sometimes they try your patience, and if they’re old enough to be driving, remind them, even if they roll their eyes, that motor vehicles demand respect and caution at all times – at least twice as much respect and caution as they think.  Then hug them again.  And maybe once more, just because you can.

And now, I will be having at least two helpings of Something Chocolate, and I recommend you do the same.  Celebrate the good!  I picked something delicious and chocolatey but also delightfully cold since it’s going to climb well into the 90s today.  Two layers of decadent chocolate cake with a layer of vanilla ice cream sandwiched in between all topped with hot fudge!  Really, what could be better than that? 🙂  Maybe chocolate ice cream in the middle 🙂

Milo Ice Cream Cake
http://www.brit.co/ice-cream-cakes/

Now that we have all enjoyed a sustaining snack, let’s get right to Would You Read It.

Today’s pitch comes to us from Erin who says, “My name is Erin. I have a degree in Biology, a job that has nothing to do with my degree, and an insane urge to write, which has nothing to do with my job! A couple of years ago, I discovered a box of books I had saved from my childhood and realized I wasn’t pursuing my passion. I started writing picture books, taking online classes, and trying to learn my craft. And this year I’ve committed to putting my work out there for critique so I can eventually get to the next step–submission!”

Here is her pitch:

Working Title: Love, Emmett
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: Emmett loved books so much that he eventually loved them to pieces…literally. Going on daily adventures with a little boy will do that to a book. After his favorite one falls apart, Emmett saves the one remaining page to remember the book by, only he can’t seem to get the story quite right. When Emmett’s teacher asks the class to share their favorite books, Emmett must decide how to tell the book’s story. But his love for the book might just say everything.

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Erin improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in September so you’ve got a little time to polish up your pitches and send yours for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Erin is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to spending time with my family, including my sister and brother-in-law and my niece and nephews who are arriving this afternoon for a two week stay.  After this week, time with family is exactly what I want most.

Have a wonderful Wednesday, everyone! 🙂

89 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #143 – Love, Emmett (PB)

  1. Erin says:

    Imagining he could probably recite the story is something I struggled with a bit while writing the text, so I'm glad you mentioned it. It's definitely something I should revisit in my story and pitch. Thank you, Stacy!

  2. Erin says:

    Your revision helps me see how my original pitch is a bit wordy. Thank you for taking the time to offer feedback, Vivian!

  3. sue heavenrich says:

    sending you a virtual (and chocolate-smudged) hug, Susanna.
    Now for Erin's pitch: I would def. read it. My only thought is maybe one favorite book he loves to death? And reads and re-reads. Then I can see him taking that book on some adventures and ending with a tattered, muddy page for book-sharing at school.

  4. This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Erik says:

    Oh my. I hope it all works out, Ms. Hill.
    The book sounds great. I would definitely read it! 🙂

  5. Rosi says:

    Susanna, I sure everything is okay with your kids.
    I love the idea of a boy reading a book to pieces. Yes, I would read it!

  6. Lovable Lobo says:

    Oh Susanna! Hoping and praying that
    your kids are fine. Had to stop by to say that. Your yummy chocolate pic always makes me hungry and your words are a delight! I love Erin's pitch and would definitely read it.

  7. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thanks, LL. I so appreciate your concern and your thoughtfulness in coming over. Thankfully, my kids are okay, but it's one of those but for the grace of God situations. Glad you enjoyed the chocolate and thanks for your thoughts for Erin!

  8. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thank you, Joanne. I'm on the periphery, fortunately – it is my friend Sarah who has the difficulties. I'm sad on her behalf, and because my kids have lost a friend. Thanks so much for your suggestions for Erin!

  9. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Thank you, Angela. That means so much. And one day when Chipmunk is old enough to drive, make her promise to never ever drive at excessive speeds. Thanks so much for your helpful thoughts for Erin!

  10. Alisha Gabriel says:

    Yes, I would read it because I'd like to see what Emmett says to the class and how he handles the situation. I love the idea of a book he loves that much. It sounds like there's potential for character development and growth, too.

  11. disqus_xkUvROpuwp says:

    Hope all is well with the kids now, Susanna! Hugs!

    As for Erin's pitch, I would certainly read it! She had me at “favorite book” what a relatable experience!

  12. Lauri Meyers says:

    Sounds interesting. the pitch almost sounds like 2 books – one about loving a book to pieces and one about a book report. So tying those together would make it stronger and clearer. Also saw this on PW today: Charlesbridge pages through the season with The Boy & the Book by David Michael Slater, illus. by Bob Kolar, the tale of a boy who loves a particular library book a little too much;

  13. Erika says:

    Oh what a NEAT idea. I like stories that take sayings and play with them literally… (Amelia Bedelia anyone?????) and this sounds very cute. I would DEF want to read this. I think it's smart too, because the people that you're usually pitching too are book lovers as well, so you've already connected with them in some ways, because they can probably relate! My only comment might be this: I'm wondering if you can do some quick showing instead of telling with the line: “Going on daily adventures with a little boy will do that to a book.” Can you maybe give a one or two word example? “Making sandcastles and climbing trees alongside a little boy will do that to a book.” I'm sure you'd do it better than that, but I wanted to give an example. Just a thought though, it's a great pitch as it is!!!

  14. Erin says:

    I just want to thank everyone for their helpful feedback. This was such a fun opportunity and great experience. Many thanks to Susanna & her readers!

  15. Shar Mohr says:

    I can totally relate to young Emmett. I would definitely want to read this story to find out what his favorite book was and how he put it back together in his own words to share it with others. Great idea!

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