Would You Read It Wednesday #150 – Zoo Rules (PB) PLUS Straight From The Editor

There is never a dull moment around here.

First, I got a flat tire.  (It’s possible this had something to do with the wood full of nails and screws that someone left directly in front of the garage… that I drove over as I hurried out to pick up my daughter from school and wondered, “Hmm… what was that?” Really, your guess is as good as mine… :))

Then the bear came and had a picnic out of our trash cans.  (If you haven’t had much experience with bear picnics, I can tell you they are not at all tidy.  There is much clean-up involved…)

Then on Monday the house that’s going in down the road from us had its foundation poured, so a parade of cement trucks thundered up and down the road all day.  Scout felt it her duty to bark at the passage of each one.  Both ways.  Jemma hid under the piano.  It was traumatic for everyone.

And now we are expecting rain in these parts so if anyone needs me I will be in my basement in the canoe.

I know!

Harrowing tales of this nature just don’t come along every day!

I’m dreadfully sorry if my horror stories have left you in a weakened state, but never fear!  I have snacks!

Continuing with our get-ready-for-Halloween-theme, today’s Something Chocolate is just the thing for when you want something sweet, salty, and candy-corny all at once.  (Because really, isn’t that a combination you often find yourself wanting?  I know I frequently find myself thinking, “Hmm… I’m in the mood for something sweet, salty and candy-corny… what to have?”  Okay.  I admit it.  I have never thought that.  But there’s always a first time :))  And they are pretty 🙂

Candy Corn Pretzel Hugs 🙂  Recipe HERE!

I think they might be easy enough for even me to make, so go ahead!  Give them a try!

Now that we have averted any danger of fainting, we have Straight From The Editor for September, which you will recall was won by Hope with her pitch for Cleo And Pinkie:

Whether it is marker stains on the carpet or mud trails in the hall, Cleo blames her mischievous, imaginary friend, Pinkie, for everything. “Pinkie did it!” Soon Mommy can’t take it anymore and declares, “No more Pinkie!” But without Pinkie, the house is too quiet until Cleo makes another mess, this time, to everyone’s delight.

Here’s what editor Erin Molta had to say:

This sounds really cute. I made a small tweak because I think if you put the Pinkie did it in the beginning it’s more of a hook. The only thing that didn’t quite work for me was the very ambiguous ending—Cleo made a mess to everyone’s delight? You don’t want to make readers guess, you want to intrigue them, yet this is just confusing. It would be better to be more specific so they can get the joke. Then they would appreciate it more.

“Pinkie did it!” Whether it is marker stains on the carpet or mud trails in the hall, Cleo blames her mischievous, imaginary friend for everything. Soon Mommy can’t take it anymore and declares, “No more Pinkie!” But without Pinkie, the house is too quiet until Cleo makes another mess, this time, to everyone’s delight.

It’s amazing what a difference a small change can make, isn’t it?  As always, I find Erin’s comments so helpful!

Let’s move onto Would You Read It, shall we?  (Please, have another pretzel hug if you’re feeling peckish!)

Today’s pitch comes to us from Michelle, who you will remember from her July pitch for Escalators Don’t Bite (WYRI #140).  She is a mom, a teacher, and a writer.  She blogs at http://amomnextdoor.wordpress.com/about/

Here is her pitch: (and she did mention that she’s still looking for a title that really zings, so feel free to chime in if you’ve got any brilliant ideas!)

Working Title: Zoo Rules
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: Miss Knaffle’s second graders have a thing or two to learn about their teacher. They think they can get away with feeding coffee beans to the class hamster, or making farting houses during read aloud. Will a trip to the zoo set them straight? When the canny Miss Knaffle enlists zoo animals to her cause, readers will delight in seeing what happens to children who don’t follow the zoo rules in this PB cross between Peggy Rathmann’s GOODNIGHT, GORILLA, and William Bee’s WHATEVER.

So what do you think?  Would You Read It?  YES, MAYBE or NO?

If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest.  If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Michelle improve her pitch.  Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome.  (However, I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful.  I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks!  For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on the Would You Read It tab in the bar above.  There are openings in December so you’ve got a little time to polish up your pitches and send yours for your chance to be read by editor Erin Molta!

Michelle is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch!  I am looking forward to (yes, I warned you last week I would probably say this again!) the Halloweensie Contest!  At least 4 people have mentioned here and/or on FB that they have written stories and I can’t wait to read them!  I also can’t wait until I think up my sample story, because time is running out and I’m getting just a teensy bit anxious about the fact that I haven’t even started thinking about it.  Which is shocking, because usually I’m prepared months in advance.  Oh wait.  That’s not me.  Okay.  Everything is right on schedule 🙂

Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! 🙂

51 thoughts on “Would You Read It Wednesday #150 – Zoo Rules (PB) PLUS Straight From The Editor

  1. This_Kid_Reviews_Books_Erik says:

    That would be awesome if it worked out like that! I still am laughing over the thought of farting houses, maybe you could work that into a book! 😉

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