It’s Would You Read It Wednesday once again – hooray!
And today we’re lucky enough to have Straight From The Editor for September and October as well, thanks to our esteemed and generous editor, Erin Molta!
Let’s jump right in, shall we?
The winner of the September Pitch Pick was Kim with her pitch for P.I. Goat: The Case of the Missing Bone (PB ages 4-8)
You will recall Kim’s pitch:
P.I. Goat has just opened his private investigator office when Puddles, a puppy, hires him to find Paw-Paw’s bone. Elderly Paw-Paw thinks Goat is a pig, but Goat has a worse problem: he faints when startled! A cast of wacky animals helps Goat discover the surprising truth behind the Case of the Missing Bone and that being a P.I. is not for the faint of heart—KLUNK!
I think this is super cute. I would just trim it a bit as below. No need to specify that Puddles is a puppy, since you say cast of wacky animals and that they’re looking for a bone.
Puddles hires Goat, a P.I, to find Paw-Paw’s bone. Elderly Paw-Paw thinks Goat is a pig, but Goat has a worse problem: he faints when startled! A cast of wacky animals helps Goat discover the surprising truth behind the Case of the Missing Bone and Goat realizes that being a P.I. is not for the faint of heart—KLUNK!
The winner of the October Pitch Pick was Sri with her pitch for Mighty Little Nikita (PB/ER ages 4-8)
You will recall Sri’s pitch:
Nikita’s friends call her “Little Nikita” because she is really small but Nikita does not like it a wee bit. When a huge dragonfly enters the class, it scares the jelly out of everyone, except Little Nikita. Nikita shows everyone just how brave she can be even when facing a scary insect, thus earning a new nickname that she is absolutely proud of.
This is nice but I think it would work better if it were more specific and active and for the pitch you should tell the editor the nickname. See what I’ve suggested below.
Nikita’s friends call her “Little Nikita” and she does not like it a wee bit. When a huge dragonfly enters the class, it scares the jelly out of everyone, except Little Nikita. Nikita faces down that big scary insect, thus earning a new nickname ((which is what?)).
As always, I find Erin’s thoughts very enlightening! I hope you all do too! Thank you, Erin, for helping us all become better pitchers! 🙂
And now, I believe, is the perfect moment for Something Chocolate! (Because is any moment not perfect for Something Chocolate???!!! 🙂 )
Hmmm….. what should we have? I could go for a little Chocolate Trifle (or a lot), how about you? (Trifle always makes me think of the episode of Friends where Rachel makes the trifle with a layer of beef sautéed with peas and onions 🙂 Luckily this trifle is all chocolate!)
YUM! Rich, creamy and delicious! The perfect start to any morning! 🙂 (And yes, okay it’s basically glorified pudding 🙂 Call it pudding with ambition… pudding with an attitude… pudding with delusions of grandeur! 🙂 )
Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Rena. Rena Traxel is a writer-librarian and STEAM enthusiast. She writes contemporary young adult novels, chapter book mysteries, and Canadian tinged picture books. She can be found online www.renatraxel.com or on Instagram @writer_librarian
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Iggy Crane: The Case of the Missing Bolt
Age/Genre: Chapter Book mystery (ages 7-9)
The Pitch: A mystery is brewing in Monster Hollow. Young Iggy Crane must find Franko Stein’s missing bolt in time to save their science fair project. Can Iggy follow in her great uncles sleuthing footsteps, or she is nothing but a fraud! Nancy Drew: Clues Crew meets Sleepy Hollow.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Rena improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in March, so you could get your pitch up pretty soon for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Rena is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to writing a story today which features pudding! What kind of pudding? Chocolate, of course! But where should the pudding be? Who should make it, buy it, or eat it? Spill it, trade it, or sell it at a corner Pudding Stand (who needs lemonade?!) Make Way For Pudding? The Little Pudding That Could? The Pudding Man? Okay… needs a little work 🙂
Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! 🙂