So, it looks like Wednesday!
Is everybody ready for Halloweensie?
It’s only 2 days away!
Have you written your entry?
Revised and edited and polished and proofread and revised and edited and polished and proofread and revised and edited and polished and proofread. . . ? yeah, I know how it is 😊
I did it on this little sample for you and I bet you can’t even tell! It probably looks like I spouted it right off the top of my head. (Okay, maybe I did. But if I’d had time I would have revised and edited and polished and proofread and it might of ended up being worth reading 😊)
Pomeline‘s Halloween (100 words)
Pomeline had a problem.
Her glow-in-the-dark grin gave her goosebumps.
Jeepers creepers! She scared her pumpkin self!
If only she hadn’t eaten all those goodies!
Tootsies and toffees and sticky-sticky caramels!
What had she been thinking?
Now her gappy three-toothed grin was truly terrifying!
Pomeline’s teeth needed protection before she ended up with a gappy one-toothed grin. . . or WORSE!
She sucked up an orange quarter, swallowed the fruit, and pressed the peel against her smiling lips.
Protected teeth and no more glow-in-the-dark smile!
Pomeline would have patted herself on the back, but she was short on arms.
I think we can agree that we all need Something Chocolate after that! 😊🎃🎃🎃
How about a plethora of Fun Halloween Treats?!
Now then, onto today’s pitch which comes to us from Melissa who says, “I have spent the last 15 years living in Tanzania as an English teacher, a journalist and then as a wife, mum and storyteller.”
Find her on the web at Twitter: @MelissaKValente
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: The Pied Piper Of Grannies
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: THE PIED PIPER OF GRANNIES: Malakai thinks he wants a granny, but when he pied-pipers a crazy conga line of grannies home using his enchanted harmonica he discovers he still feels lonely and now he has to face the town’s grandkids!
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Melissa improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in January, so you could get your pitch up pretty soon for/[so you have time to polish your pitch before putting it up] for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Melissa is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to HALLOWEENSIE!!!!!!! (Rules on that link if you haven’t written yours yet and need the guidelines!)
Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! 😊