I don’t mean to make you jealous, but it’s pretty much non-stop fun and games here on Blueberry Hill where the dogs and I entertain ourselves with such tried-and-true favorite activities as vacuuming, laundry, sweeping leaves out of the garage, and dusting. (I know! What times are these when Susanna Hill is reduced to dusting?! š) Violet is especially helpful, doing her energetic best to protect me from the vacuum, abscond with every single sock she can get her little jaws on, pounce on every leaf, and grab the dust cloths and run away with them, refusing to be caught. Scout contributes by shedding so I have something to vacuum and dust š
The weather is getting colder. Yesterday it actually snowed at my house for a little while, and today the expected high temperature is only 34 degrees, so I think the perfect Something Chocolate is Hot Cocoa Cookies! Doesn’t that sound good?
I think they’d be extra delicious with some hot cocoa! You can never have too much chocolate, especially on a chilly day! I mean, let’s face it – we need to be well-fueled because we’re burning an outrageous number of calories just staying warm! Or we would be if we didn’t have central heating and/or a fireplace or wood stove š
Now then, onto today’s pitch whichĀ comes to us from Diana who says, “I am Diana Lynn Gibson, a retired teacher who never gave up her passion for children’s picture books. There are more picture books on my bookshelves than novels- and what serious children’s book writer does not? And the funnier, the better. Come on over and we’ll giggle together! Here’s my spinoff on Little Red Riding Hood.”
Find her on the web at
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Little Witch Zooming Broom
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: Look up! There she zips again. Now she’s off to Grandma’s house with her basket of Trick-or-Treat goodies. But when Werewolf tries to trick Little Witch Zooming Broom, he finds she has tricks of her own under her hat.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Diana improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in January, so you have time to polish your pitch before putting it up for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Diana is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! Ā I am looking forward to writing something new if I can get Violet to take a nap long enough for me to put two sentences together! š
It’s Perfect Picture Book Friday, and in the wake of the recent election and Veteran’s Day, I have a wonderful book that celebrates the American Dream!
Title: Oscar’s American Dream
Written By: Barry Wittenstein
Illustrated By: Kristen & Kevin Howdeshell
Schwartz & Wade, October 2020, informational fiction
Suitable For Ages: publisher says 4-8, School Library Journal says 6-10 – I think SLJ is more on target
Themes/Topics: American history, immigration, American Dream, change and opportunity
text copyright Barry Wittenstein 2020, illustration copyright Kristen&Kevin Howdeshell 2020 Schwartz & Wade
Opening: “Oskar Nowicki arrived at Ellis Island carrying his life in a cardboard suitcase and a skinny roll of money in his coat pocket, a loan from his mother in Poland for a down payment on his dream.“
Brief Synopsis: 20th century American history unfolds on a street corner in New York City as a little shop changes hands and dreams, from a barbershop in 1899 to luxury apartments in 1999.
Links To Resources: an author’s note at the back of the book expands on the history included in the story; trace the history of your home, or of a building in your neighborhood or town that you find interesting (a library, a town hall, a church, etc.): when was it built? who built it? what kind of history has it seen?; design, draw, and/or describe a shop/building that you would like to own that embodies your dream!
text copyright Barry Wittenstein 2020, illustration copyright Kristen&Kevin Howdeshell 2020 Schwartz & Wade
Why I Like This Book: I really enjoyed the idea of seeing history unfold on a street corner. What an interesting way of looking at the passage of time! A succession of people from different backgrounds with different dreams bought the little corner shop, and as a barbershop, a women’s clothing store, a soup kitchen, an army recruitment office, a bodega, and several other incarnations, the little shop saw the Roaring Twenties, the Great Depression, World War II, Civil Rights – all the history of the 20th century – and how the shop played a role in fulfilling the American Dreams of the various owners. The art is a beautiful complement to the text, filled with interesting details, and reflecting the mood of the times.
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out š ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
It’s Wednesday, and I’m still in Halloweensie Land doing wrap up, but I knew you wouldn’t want to miss Would You Read It, so here we are! š. . .
. . . heading straight for Something Chocolate because some days, that’s the only option! š Can I interest any of you in some Chocolate Eclair Cake?
I mean really. How scrumptious does that look? It’s like hot chocolate turned into a cake. Clearly breakfast! š
nonnomnomnomnom!
Ah! I feel refreshed! How about you? Ready for some pitching?
Me too!
Today’s pitch whichĀ comes to us from Patricia. Patricia is a serial mover and mother to three adult humans and two orange pups. She loves gardening, snorkeling, and exploring new places.
Find her on the web at: Wander, Ponder, Write Twitter: @ptntweets Instagram: ptnozell
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Back To The Sea
Age/Genre: Informational Fiction Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: One magical morning on a lush, tropical island, a young child accompanies a cast of terrestrial hermit crabs as theyĀ scritchedy-scratchĀ andĀ clickety-clackĀ on their annual journey to spawn in the sea. Inspired by a viral video of this rarely-viewed event, this lyrical STEM manuscript isĀ Hawk RisingĀ for beach lovers.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Patricia improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in January, so you have time to polish your pitch before putting it up for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Patricia is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! Ā I am looking forward to a very long nap which I will be scheduling to take place when I have time. . . perhaps a year from Tuesday or so š
Before we go, let’s take a moment to celebrate and thank our veterans, since today is their day. I’m sure we all have at least one veteran right in our own families, and to say we owe them everything is not an overstatement. We live the lives we live today because of them. Thank you all for your service ā¤ļø
Especially at this hour when it is WAY past bedtime!
(Shhhh! Don’t tell your mamas!)
But I’m so glad you’re here.
If you’ll all just snuggle up among the pillows, we’ll get right to story time.
Milk and cookies?
Alrighty.
Once upon a time last week, five little skeletons floated down the Halloweensie River in a hollowed out pumpkin.
As they floated they sang:
“Row, row, row your gourd Gently down the stream,” “Toss your noggin overboard. . .”
That was the end of the song because their singing parts were all under water!
They fished their skulls back out with their femurs.
Hahahahaha! they all laughed merrily.
“Whose idea was that?” asked one.
“I don’t know,” said another. “We haven’t got a brain between us!”
This was true.
And probably the reason why they decided to play that game again!
And again. . .
. . . and again.
The End.
Wasn’t that a heartwarming story?
I hope you all enjoyed it!
Thank you for coming to story time! I hope you’ll join me again next week when we’ll read all about the five little potatoes who ran away so they wouldn’t be mashed for Thanksgiving! Even though they didn’t have a leg to stand on. (Sorry š)
Goodbye.
Bye now.
Buh-bye.
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What?
You’re still here?
I told you only one story tonight since it’s already past bedtime.
Were you expecting something else?
Maybe something like. . .
The 10 Annual Halloweensie Contest WINNERS? !!!!!!!
Okay. You’ve twisted my radius, ulna, and humerus š
Turns out you’ve come to the right place because it just so happens that I know how it all turned out!
As you are all aware by now, we had an amazing turnout for Halloweensie 2020 – 289!!! entries! (And did I use “turn out” enough times in the last two sentences?? š) Golly gee willikers!!!
I was thrilled beyond measure to see so many wonderful stories and meet so many new writers! And I don’t know about you guys, but for me Halloween is all the better for 289 fabulous stories to read by jack -o’ – lantern light! šā¢ļø
With large entry numbers come hard choices, though. My assistant judges and I worked hard to winnow the total down to a manageable number of finalists that we felt were truly all-around deserving of that distinction, and those were the ones we presented to you for your vote.
There were, however, many other entries that were outstanding in certain areas even though they might not have qualified all-around for one reason or another (one reason being that, at a certain point, we just had to stop adding finalists to the list! :))
So my assistant judges and I would like to award recognition and a small prize to the following authors for the following merits:
1. For Honorable Mention In The Competition As A Whole: (all-around well-written stories we loved that just missed the finals for one small reason or another!)
Jennifer Broedel for Boneyard Ballet (also great use of language!)
Kristen Foote for A 2020 Halloween Bash
Claire Schlinkert for Not-So-Happy Halloween
Rhett Trull for Lightning And A Mask Of Stars (also nice use of language)
2. For Great Writing and Use of Language: (not already in the finals)
Carrie Karnes-Fannin for The Trash Bandit
Rebecca Allain for The Maple Tree Fright
3. For Spookiest/Creepy Entry: (not already in the finals)
Andrew Hacket for A-Huntin’ (yikes!)
Meghan Wallace for The Haunted House Dare
Kelly Swemba for The House That No One Visits
Elizabeth Meyer zu Heringdorf for A Cat-astrophic Halloween
(A Yogi Is Born – no author identified) for Pumpkin Jack
4. For Excellent Story Telling from 8-and-under Writers!
Autumn Haley for The Night Stacy Saved Halloween
Lea Boyd for Beware Of Skeletons
5. For Funniest Entry: (not already in the finals)
E. Elle Bea for Final Moments
Barbara Di Marco for The Attic Mask
Mary Bleckwehl for Class Pet Trickery! (great ending š)
6. For Great Read For Younger Readers: (not already in the finals)
Nicole Loos Miller for Pumpkin Hunt
Kristy Nuttall for The Itsy Bitsy Skeleton
Ashley Congdon for A-Z: Who’s Behind Me?
Linda Staszak for The Skele-Mummy
Sarah Meade for Skeleton Ring
Beth Volkmann for Halloween Hesitation
Congratulations to all of you for fantastic elements of your stories! You may all email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com subject line Prize Winner to collect your prize, which is (and I have to be cryptic here because when I said it right out last year I got a LO-HO-HOT! of spam email!) a gift of a number of dollars that is between 4 and 6, for a large and well-known online store that begins with A, which will be presented to you in an email š You can spend it on one of the many Kindle choices listed in previous contests here, or add to your account for a gift for yourself or someone else, or whatever else you might choose to do! In addition, you will receive a beautiful badge of achievement that you may display on your blog or print out and frame or turn into a flag to carry with you everywhere and wave out the window of your pumpkin š
A word about the prizes before I announce the winners.
We have 12 fabulous prizes, generously donated by authors and various professionals in the writing field. My policy is to let the first place winner have first pick of all the prizes, the second place winner have second choice, etc. That way hopefully nobody gets something they already have, and hopefully everyone gets something that’s valuable to them. All prizes are listed at the bottom of this post for your convenience in perusing the goodies š
Now.
Finally!
Onto the moment you’ve all been waiting for. . .
. . . the reason you rowed your pumpkin gently down the stream to get here even though it is past your bedtime. . .
. . . THE WINNERS OF THE 2020 HALLOWEENSIE CONTEST as chosen by you, our esteemed voters!!!!!
In First Place, winner of the whole entire contest and top of the heap who gets first choice of all the prizes…
Helen Ishmurzin
for
Marine Halloween
Congratulations, Helen, on a fabulously written, creative and original entry that was all around well done and clearly very popular with judges and voters alike!!!
In Second Place,
Ginny Neil
for
The Eletonks
Congratulations, Ginny, on a clever, entertaining, well written, kid friendly entry. You get first choice of the prizes that are left after Helen chooses!
In Third Place,
Lisa Perron for Trick Or Teeth
Congratulations, Lisa, on your cleverly spun tale of the Tooth Fairy’s halloween! You get first choice of the prizes that are left after Helen and Ginny choose!
In Fourth Place,
Heather Kinser for A Scare A Skull A Skeleton
Congratulations, Heather, on a fun story with a creative format and a wonderful read-aloud rhythm. You get to pick a prize after Helen, Ginny, and Lisa.
In Fifth Place,
Hollie Wolverton for A Hollow Halloween
Congratulations, Hollie, on making us laugh at just how frustrating it must be for a skeleton to eat candy! You get to pick your prize after Helen, Ginny, Lisa, and Heather.
In Sixth Place,
Deb Sullivan for A Night Out. . .
Congratulations, Deb, on your clever, fun and creative entry! You made us laugh out loud at your ending š You get to pick your prize after Helen, Ginny, Lisa, Heather, and Hollie!
In Seventh Place,
Keatley Eastman for Bones: A Love Story
Congratulations, Keatley, on your delightful Halloween love story, so well written with such great rhythm and rhyme and use of language! You get to pick your prize after Deb!
In Eighth Place,
Crystal Lamb for The Brown, Brown Boots On The Cold, Cold Floor
Congratulations, Crystal, on your creatively written, suspenseful story that was just right for young readers! You get to pick your prize after Keatley!
In Ninth Place,
Tracy Curran for The Skeleton Creep
Congratulations, Tracy! We really enjoyed your playful story with its clever punchline! š You get to pick a prize after Crystal…!
In Tenth Place
“Boo Darkling” (Roo Parkin) for Hola Halloween!
Congratulations, Roo, on your sun-loving skeleton and your wonderful inclusion of Day of the Dead! You get to prize pick after Tracy!
In Eleventh Place
Sarah Hawklyn for Halloween Surprise
Congratulations, Sandy, we loved your little Jojo, disappointed by COVID but still able to celebrate Halloween after all! š You get to pick a prize after Roo.
In Twelfth Place
Marla Yablon for Trick Or Treat
Congratulations, Marla, on a delightfully creepy story! Eek! š You get to pick your prize after Sarah!
And, I don’t think I need to remind anyone that in addition to all these fabulous prizes, everyone mentioned on this page has bragging rights as having won or placed in the Pretty Much World Famous Halloweensie Contest! Not just anyone can say that š
All the winners should email me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com with the subject heading Prize Winner so we can work out details for you to receive your prizes! If you choose a prize that requires snail mailing, PLEASE include your snail mail address so we don’t have to email back and forth too many times š If you would like a beautiful certificate to celebrate your accomplishment, you are most welcome to one!
Congratulations again to all our winners – it was a stiff competition!! – and congratulations to EVERYONE who wrote and entered a story in the contest. You all deserve a huge round of applause, a confetti parade, and a truckload of leftover fun-sized chocolate. . . if there is any š
Thank you to everyone who helped make this contest SO MUCH FUN, whether by writing an entry, reading people’s stories, leaving comments for the authors, and/or voting in the finals, or by donating a prize! It’s because of all of you that this contest was such a success, so many, many thanks from the bottom of my heart!
And before we go, I will give you all advance warning so you can start planning a little time into your December schedule…
Assuming you guys are up for it – and you’d better let me know in the comments!!! – the 10th Annual Holiday Writing Contest will be coming up sometime in the neighborhood of December 7 so we can all fully enjoy it and still have time for last minute holiday things. I will do my best to post the rules well in advance (maybe a few days before Thanksgiving, good lord willin’ and the creek don’t rise! š although yikes that’s just around the corner!) so you all have time to work on your stories! But please let me know if you feel like it’s too much and you’d rather not do it!
Have a terrific Monday everyone, (or actually, I guess by the time most of you read this it will be Tuesday!) and thanks again for making the Halloweensie Contest such a wonderful time for all! š
The Prizes: SO AMAZING! What a generous community we have to donate so much awesomeness!!! š
1 – Get Your MS in Tip Top Shape With Vivian Kirkfield!
Vivian is offering a PB MS Critique (fiction or nonfiction/rhyming or prose), along with a 30 minute Skype or FB video chat to discuss, along with a read-through of the revision. And top it all off she will also help you with a query/cover letter edit to go with your polished up ms! WOW!
2 – Pennyās Two Cents – an incredible opportunity for any picture book writer!
Sometimes itās helpful to chat with a published author about your writing journey. Penny Parker Klostermann is offering her two cents. The prize includes General/Big-Picture Feedback on one picture book manuscript + One 30-Minute Chat (Rhyming or prose-750 words or under) Penny doesnāt claim to have it all figured out, (by any means) but sheās happy to share her two cents based on what sheās learned and continues to learn on her journey as an author.
Please join me in thanking these very generous authors and other writing professionals for contributing their books and writing expertise as prizes by visiting their websites and blogs, considering their books and services for holiday or other gift purchases, rating and/or reviewing their books on GoodReads, Amazon, B&N or anywhere else if you like them, recommending them for school visits, or supporting them in any other way you can dream up š
Always with the most up-to-date, hip fashions, always with my finger on the pulse of current events, absolute master of the newest technology (snort! ok, I can’t pull any of these off with a straight face š)
But today, I am trendy.
Why? you may ask.
Because as some of you may have noticed, voting is extremely trendy this week.
It’s all anyone is talking about. Going to vote, talking about how you voted, counting votes, speculating about the outcome of votes, waiting for the outcome of votes. . .
And just when you were worried you might run out of voting-related things to do and discuss, I have something else for you to vote on in the nick of time so you don’t go into voting withdrawal š . . .
The 2020 Halloweensie Contest Finalists!
After many grueling days of reading the 289 fabulous entries you submitted and being forced to winnow them down to 12 (oh! cruel and terrible fate!), (interrupted only by our obsession with following the election coverage which lost us all a big part of Tuesday and is responsible for why the finalists didn’t get posted sooner) my fellow judges and I are mere skeletons, creeping toward bed now that our work is done, and waiting for YOU to unmask the winner! (See what I did there? š)
There were SO MANY well-written, fabulous, entertaining, delightful, and spooky entries. In order to pick 12 for you to vote on we had to put aside literally hundreds, many of which were of equal quality. So I recognize that many of you may feel you would have chosen differently. I get that. In the final analysis, try as we might to be objective, an element of subjectivity almost has to come in to play in order to choose between multiple entries of similar quality. Please know we admire everyone for their talent, throughly enjoyed every story we read, and that we did the best we could.
12 entries made the finals.
277 did not.
A mere 4.15% made it to the top. If you’re in that 4.15%, give yourself a congratulatory handshake. If you’re not, rest assured you’re in extremely good company. (And if you’d like to question how I arrived at 4.15% because I failed to Show My Work, please don’t because I’m pretty sure I invented some “math” to arrive at that number. Math is not my strong suit unless it’s If Susanna had one of those gorgeous boxes containing 6 Godiva chocolates, what percentage did she eat? because that answer is always 100% š)
We were ruthless about some things because we simply had to be.
(Following is the part where I remind you of the judging criteria and rationalize, explain, and apologize for the fact that we had to cut some of you even though you’re awesome – it is not required reading unless you need a little emotional bolstering before you look at who the elite 12 are – feel free to skip a bit, Brother Maynard š)
The judging criteria were clear:
1. Kid-appeal! – These stories are intended for a young audience, so entries that were well-written but lacked child-friendliness did not make the cut. Same for entries where the appeal, humorous or otherwise, seemed more directed toward adult readers than children.
2. Halloweeniness – the rules stated a Halloween story, so entries that failed to mention anything Halloween-y did not make the cut even if they were well-written. Unfortunately, as always seems to happen, there were some stories that could have taken place at any time – not specifically Halloween. Two of the entries all the judges loved fell into this category – we were SO disappointed not to be able to include them with the finalists.
3. Quality of story – the rules stated that entries were to tell a story, so if they appeared to be more of a description or mood piece, they didn’t make the cut. We looked for a character and a true story arc.
4. Quality of Writing: we took note of spelling, grammar, punctuation etc. In addition, for the rhymers, we looked at rhyme and meter (for which we are sticklers!) We also looked at overall writing quality and use of language. There were a lot of problems in this department, and since the competition was so fierce, we did cut people for punctuation, capitalization, spelling, and word usage errors, as well as for relatively minor glitches in meter – one or two lines that threw the rhythm off – because there were so many that were perfect.
5. Originality and creativity – because that is often what sets one story above another.
A surprising number of this year’s entries were amazingly written… but in spite of the warning, still failed to really tell a story. This is SO TOUGH in 100 words – I totally get it. But some people managed better than others. There were any number of entries that were superbly written that we wanted to choose, but when we got right down to it, there really just wasn’t much story… not compared to some of the other entries that really managed to tell one. They were more descriptions, lists, or mood pieces. So as awesome as they were, we had to make some very hard calls. A couple were too adult. Some, because of the cruelly limiting word count were a little hard to follow. Some of the rhyming ones we really liked were too off-meter to make the cut. Some entries were just so close, but missed out because of one relatively small thing! GAH! So hard!
(There is nothing like reading through so many to give you an editor’s perspective. Read through 300+ stories and you’ll quickly see how there can be A LOT that are really quite good, so there has to be something to make them stand out. Something that sets them apart from the ocean of very-strong-nothing-particularly-wrong-with-them-but-nothing-that-makes-you-say-WOW submissions. It will make you realize exactly how important it is to make your manuscript fresh and heart -or mind-capturing in some way. You want yours to be the submission the editor (or contest judge) can’t stop thinking about.š)
So now, just quick before we get to the finalists, I want to thank EVERYONE who took the time and care to write an entry for this contest. You all did a fabulous job and provided great enjoyment for many!
Second, I’d also like to thank EVERYONE – writer, reader, or both – who took the time to go around and read as many entries as you could and leave supportive comments. This means so much to the writers who worked hard on their stories. It helps them see what they did well, as well as giving them the joy of knowing that their stories were read and enjoyed. I hope you all got as much delight and entertainment out of the reading as I did! Plus, we got to meet quite a few new people which was a wonderful added bonus! š
Third, before I list the finalists, I want to say one final time how truly difficult it was too narrow such a field! There were so many amazing entries. Really. I could find at least something terrific about every single one. The sheer volume of entries meant that many good ones had to be cut. So if yours didn’t make the final cut please don’t feel bad. The fact that you didn’t make the final cut DOES NOT mean you didn’t write a great story. Everyone who plonked their butt in a chair and worked hard to write a story for this contest is a winner! You showed up. You did your best work. You practiced your craft. You wrote to specifications and a deadline. You bravely shared your writing with the world. And you have a brand new story that is now yours to expand beyond 100 words if you like and maybe submit at some point to a magazine or as a PB manuscript. A lot of people have successfully done that at this point – we have quite a few books in the world that were born or had new life breathed into them in Halloweensie, Holiday, or Valentiny Contests! So bravo to everyone who entered!
So, without further ado, I present to you the 2020 Halloweensie Contest Finalists. A mix of poetry and prose (weirdly weighted toward rhyme – just the way it panned out), stories for younger readers and slightly older (but still kid) readers, funny, spooky, and cute. Please read through them carefully, take your time, think it over, and vote for your favorite. To help with objectivity, finalists are listed by title only, not by author.
And I’d like to be very clear about the voting process. You are MOST welcome to share a link to this post on FB, twitter, or wherever you like to hang out, and encourage people to come read ALL the finalists and vote for the one they think is best. Please do that. The more people who read and enjoy these stories the better, and the more objective votes we get the better. HOWEVER (and I want to be very clear on this) please do not ask people to vote for a specific number or title, or for the story about werewolf Snow White or whatever. Trolling for votes or trying to influence the outcome is counter to the spirit of this competition which is supposed to be based on merit. I thank you in advance for respecting this.
So here we go!
#1 – A Night Outā¦
This will be fun Iāll just jump in the dish, Like a chocolate delight Or a red Swedish Fish.
No one will notice Iām not like my peers, As I creep through the wrappers Without any fears.
All the skeletons, witches, And mask wearing folk, Will think Iām a treat Itās my little joke.
That all of the children Perhaps parents too, Will happily eat me Iām one of the crew.
I did it! I did it! Iām sly like a fox, āHey raisin,ā Twix shouts. āGet back in your box.ā
#2 –
#3 – Hola Halloween!
Morty McCreak was a skeleton freak who just didnāt dig darkness or doom. The mere squeak of a rat or the flap of a bat sent him clattering out of the room.
Halloween Balls made him put up his walls and a creep-tastic mask wasnāt fun ā Trick or Treat was a strain, so he jumped on a plane to go whiten his bones in the sun.
Morty was shocked, his bones pleasantly rocked, all the beaches and streets were alive. This olā Mexican rave brought some glitz to the grave, Yep, this āDay of the Deadā was his jive!
#4 – Bones: A Love Story
āA Halloween Ball!ā Lafta longingly sighed, āWhat clever maneuver could get me inside?ā (For Mummy decorum expressly forbade A Skeleton guest at the Mum-masquerade.) Undaunted, she crept in at seven oāclock, Impeccably swathed in a masking tape frock. She charmed the Queenās son with a sweet pirouette. āI might,ā Lafta whispered, āFool everyone yet!ā But catching her tape on a dowagerās shroud, Her costume unraveled in front of the crowd! The onlookers gaspedābut their host cracked a grin, āYour wrappings were hiding the treasure within.ā Their boundless romance has endured ever since, The skeleton girl and her Halloween prince.
#5 – Halloween Surprise
Tonight was Halloween and Jojo was upset.
She had a costume she had made herself. She wore her sparkly pink tutu, a skeleton shirt, bones cut out of cardboard and a mask decorated with glitter.
But there was no trick or treating in her neighborhood.
To make matters worse, it stormed outside.
Suddenly she heard a horrible shrieking sound.
Were the Halloween monsters coming?
Would they creep up on her in the darkness?
She looked out the window ā¦
and quickly opened the door to a tiny wet, black kitten.
She cuddled him close. āMaybe Halloween has come to me.ā
#6 – THE ELETONKS
A skeletonās job on Halloween night
is making kids scream with terrible fright.
But this Halloween, poor skeleton stumbled,
as he crept down the hill, and got totally jumbled.
Now, eletonksā bones are all out of place.
A mask full of tarsals makes up his face.
His femurs are feet. His skullās near his knee.
His spineās tangled up where his left arm should be.
His fidgety fingers hang down from his thighs,
and two broken ribs poke out of his eyes.
So, giggle at eletonks. Trust me youād tremble
if skeletonās bones could just
reassemble.
#7 – A SCARE A SKULL A SKELETON
a scare
a skull
a skeleton
I clatter down the street
a creep
a crawl
a caterwaul
Iām knocking for a treat
a rant
a rave
an open grave
I wear a scary mask
a trick
a treat
a something sweet
I TAKE! (and NEVER ask)
a bugaboo
a witchās brew
the treat I took is cursedā¦
a salty lick
a yuck
an ick
my brother is the WORST!
a snore
a sleep
a sneaky peek
a tippy-toe attack
a spiderā¦
SCREAM!
its Halloween
andāyep!āI got him back
#8 – A Hollow Halloween
āTis Halloween night and next to the church, Old skeletons exit their tombs with a lurch.
They creep through the graveyard and into the streets, armed with a trick to get themselves treats.
Pretending theyāre kids wearing costumes and masks, they go door-to-door, holding out their big sacks.
When the candyās collected, they scurry away, dying to feast on their sugar buffet.
Gobbling up jawbreakers, chocolates and gummies, they get mad when the treats fall right out of their tummies.
With no tongues in their heads and no sense of taste, all that work getting candy was sadly…a waste!
#9 – MARINE HALLOWEEN
Deep in the ocean thereās quite a commotion; what nautical nightmare is this? Curious creatures with spine-chilling features are slithering through the abyssā¦
With his powerful claws and his snippy-snap jaws, skeleton shrimp creeps along. Slimy and squirming, now hagfish comes worming her way through the sinister throng.
An inky-black cape, a mean, mask-like shape ā vampire squid joins the pack. Fangtooth soon follows, she lunges and swallows, devouring a flavoursome snack.
With a flurry of fins, the party begins; behold the spectacular scene! So whatās this commotion deep down in the ocean? Thatās right ā itās Marine Halloween!
#10 – The Brown, Brown Boots on the Cold, Cold Floor
I was slurping soup on Halloween night When⦠KNOCKā¦..KNOCKā¦..KNOCK āWho is it?ā
Creeeeeeeeeaaaaaaak
In stomped two brown, brown boots on the
cold, cold floor.
I crept to the corner, clutching my napkin like a mask and waited.
KNOCKā¦ā¦KNOCKā¦..KNOCKā¦. āWhoā¦..who is it?ā Creeeeeeeeeaaaaaaak
A bony, bony body floated in and placed itself on brownā¦.brown bootsā¦.. on the coldā¦cold floorā¦ā¦ā¦.
KNOCKā¦ā¦KNOCKā¦..KNOCKā¦. āWhoā¦..who is it?ā Creeeeeeeeeaaaaaaak
A skull floated and sat on the bony, bony body on brown, brown boots on the coldā¦ā¦ā¦.cold floor.
āWHAT DO YOU WANT?!ā
The skeleton pointed:
āYouāreā¦eatingā¦myā¦soup!ā
āItās yours!ā I said as I ran into the shivering night.
#11 – The Skeleton Creep
On All Hallows Eve when Iām meant to be asleep I peep out at the graveyard where skeletons creep. They push aside their gravestones, rising from the ground. Have they come to haunt us? No! They simply⦠hang around. They melt into the shadows until theyāre masked from view, scaring one other by playing⦠PEEK-A Boo! I really want to join them, play their games, hang out! But the teeny tiny problem is⦠MY BODYāS INSIDE OUT! If my bones were on the outside would they let me play?
āNo, but youāll be welcomeā¦
WHEN YOUR RIBS ARE ON DISPLAY!ā
#12 – Trick or Treat
Whoās dancing down the street at night This spooky Halloween? The rattling sound she makes is like A boney tambourine.
You might think sheās a little girl, If you donāt get too near. The dark night makes it look as though Thereās nothing there to fear.
She wears a mask, a sweet childās face, That covers up a grin Of ivory teeth that clack inside A skull that needs some skin.
So, if she creeps up to your house, Donāt open up your door. A skeletonās shrieked, āTrick or Treat!ā Will stop your heart with horror.
I know this is a tough choice! But please read and consider and choose your favorite and vote for it in the poll below by Sunday November 8 at 5 PM Eastern time! That gives you 3 whole days to vote! (Which, as we’ve established, you’ve had plenty of practice at lately š)
I am so looking forward to seeing who you guys choose as your winner and how everyone will place! š Enjoy reading and voting and have a great weekend!!! š
The Contest: write a 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children (children here defined as 12 and under) (title not included in the 100 words), using the words skeleton, creep, and mask. Your story can be scary, funny, sweet, or anything in between, poetry or prose, but it will only count for the contest if it includes those 3 words and is 100 words (you can go under, but not over!) Get it? Halloweensie – because it’s not very long and it’s for little people š (And yes, I know 100 words is short, but that’s part of the fun and the challenge! We got over 325 fantastic entries last year, so I know you can do it!) Also, you may use the words in any form – e.g. skeletons, creepy/crept, masked/unmasked, whathaveyou š NO ILLUSTRATION NOTES PLEASE! (And yes, you may submit more than one entry if you’re so inclined š )
Post: your story on your blog between right now this very second and Saturday October 31st by 11:59 PM Eastern Time and add your post-specific link to the list below. There will be no Tuesday Debut, Perfect Picture Book or Would You Read It posts for the duration of the contest so the links will stay up for everyone to visit and enjoy. If you don’t have a blog and would like to enter, you can simply copy and paste your entry in the comments section below (please include your byline if your posting handle is something like MamaWritesByNightlight so I can identify you.) If you have difficulty posting in the comments, which unfortunately sometimes happens, you may email your entry to me at susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com and I’ll post it for you. Please place your entry in the body of the emailincluding your title and byline at the top – NO ATTACHMENTS! And please do not submit entries in more than one place because it becomes confusing.
The Judging: in a grueling marathon over the following days, my devoted assistants and I will narrow down the entrants to 369 12? top choices (give or take… you know how hard it is to choose!) which will be posted here and voted on for a winner on Wednesday November 4th or Thursday November 5th (if the judging takes longer than we expect if could be later…but we will do our best!) The winner will be announced on Monday November 9th (good lord willin’ and the creek don’t rise š )
Judging criteria will be as follows:
1. Kid-appeal! – These stories are intended for a young audience (ages 12 and under), so we’re looking for stories that children will enjoy and relate to.
2. Halloweeniness – the rules state a Halloween story, so it must be crystal clear that the story is about Halloween, not just some random spooky night.
3. Quality of story – entries must tell a story, including a main character of some kind and a true story arc even if it’s tiny š Entries must not be merely descriptions or mood pieces.
4. Quality of Writing: check your spelling, grammar, punctuation etc. If you’re going to rhyme, give us your best š Overall writing quality and use of language are also important.
5. Originality and creativity – because that is often what sets one story above another.
6. PLEASE FOLLOW THE DIRECTIONS! Large numbers of entries make it easy to cut entries that haven’t been entered as we asked.
The Prizes: SO AMAZING! What a generous community we have to donate so much awesomeness!!! š
1 – Get Your MS in Tip Top Shape With Vivian Kirkfield!
Vivian is offering a PB MS Critique (fiction or nonfiction/rhyming or prose), along with a 30 minute Skype or FB video chat to discuss, along with a read-through of the revision. And top it all off she will also help you with a query/cover letter edit to go with your polished up ms! WOW!
2 – Pennyās Two Cents – an incredible opportunity for any picture book writer!
Sometimes itās helpful to chat with a published author about your writing journey. Penny Parker Klostermann is offering her two cents. The prize includes General/Big-Picture Feedback on one picture book manuscript + One 30-Minute Chat (Rhyming or prose-750 words or under) Penny doesnāt claim to have it all figured out, (by any means) but sheās happy to share her two cents based on what sheās learned and continues to learn on her journey as an author.
Please join me in thanking these very generous authors and other writing professionals for contributing their books and writing expertise as prizes by visiting their websites and blogs, considering their books and services for holiday or other gift purchases, rating and/or reviewing their books on GoodReads, Amazon, B&N or anywhere else if you like them, recommending them for school visits, or supporting them in any other way you can dream up š
Now then, my pretties! It’s past the witching hour in the dead of night – very appropriate for a Halloween story, don’t you think? – and the time has come for me to embarrass myself my sample entry which should fill you with confidence in your own MUCH MUCH better efforts!!!
Halloween A pumpkin moon A ghostly ship A still lagoon Tattered sails Like swirling mist Ancient rigging Creaks and twists Skull and crossbones Striking fear Warning sailors Far and near Captain Jack Comes thump-a-peg Limping on His broomstick leg āSteady now,ā breathes Captain Jack, āMustnāt blow our sneak attack!ā Silently The ghost ship glides Closer . . . Closer . . . On the tides Guided through The murky blue By the ghastly Skeleton crew Stealthily it comes abreast creeping uninvited guest nearing windows warm with light no idea of their plight Captain Jack Deceit complete Unmasks and shouts out, āTrick-or-treat!ā
It’s truly spooky how willing I am to embarrass myself for you! ššš
I can’t wait to read all of your entries! I’m so looking forward to them! I hope there will be a lot – the more the merrier! And there are still nearly 3 days to write, so you have time if you haven’t written yet. Feel free to spread the word to your writing friends as well. And your reading friends – parents, teachers, etc. The more people who read and enjoy your stories, the better!!!
Contest Entrants, remember to add your post-specific link to the google form below so we can all come read your awesome stories! (Post-specific means not your main blog url, but the actual url of the post that has your story in it – otherwise if you post again before the contest ends, your link will take readers… and judges!… to the wrong place!)
Eager Readers – just go along the list of links, click on them, and enjoy the stories!
Happy Writing and Happy Halloween!!! š š
And don’t miss the 169!!! fabulous entries that are posted in the comments
below! (Hopefully each one is a link, but thanks to the new wordpress, I’ve redone the list twice with uncertain success!)
Okay. I know a lot of us feel that white chocolate isn’t real chocolate, only dark and milk chocolate’s poor cousin. But it is technically chocolate, and these mummies are so cute for a Halloween snack that I figured we could excuse white chocolate for being a bit of a wannabe today š
Now then, onto today’s pitch whichĀ comes to us from Nicole. A school social worker by day and a mama by every other waking moment, Nicole can usually be found laughing with her husband and two toddlers, drinking room temperature coffee, and cramming writing into every spare second.
The Pitch: When her octopus stuffie moves to the ocean to pursue a lifelong dream of becoming a mermaid, a young girl is forced to move out of her comfort zone and an octopus learns what is truly important.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Nicole improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in January, so you have time to polish your pitch before putting it up for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Nicole is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! I am looking forward to
Have a wonderful Wednesday everyone!!! š
And can’t wait to see you TOMORROW for Halloweensie!!! šā¢ļø
text copyright Karen Jameson 2020, illustration copyright Marc Boutavant 2020, Chronicle Books
Why I Like This Book: This is a lovely lullaby of a bedtime book. The rhyming text is lyrical, with such lines as “Meadow hopper clover cropper twilight whispers. Time to furrow. Curl up tight inside your burrow” and “Nectar sipper dizzy dipper stars are twinkling. Flutter. Search. Light upon your leafy perch.” The art is warm, cozy, and inviting, and will make young readers want to curl up and sleep with the woodland animals. As a bonus, elements of nonfiction are included through the animal descriptions and the artistic depiction of their homes/habitat. A sweet, gentle bedtime read!
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out š ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
It’s nice that some things stay the same in spite of the crazy times we’re living in, isn’t it?
This past weekend should have been the New York State Sheep and Wool Festival – an all around delightful event that I have attended every year since CAN’T SLEEP WITHOUT SHEEP came out in 2010 – 10 years! – and this year for all the reasons you know so well they weren’t able to hold it.
Merritt Bookstore did a virtual version, and lots of us who are usually there in person, including fellow kidlit folks Nancy Shaw and Iza Trapani, did little videos. There were still signed books for sale. But it wasn’t the same. š
Hopefully next year things will be back to normal!
If you can call this normal. . . š
Meanwhile, at least some things are the way they should be as we’re here for Would You Read It Wednesday!
I think we need Something Chocolate immediately to bolster our spirits and get us in the mood. For today’s delicacy, I have chosen a cake with the longest name ever! š
Sour Cream Chocolate Cake with Cream Cheese Peanut Butter Frosting and Chocolate Peanut Butter Glaze
I think this is really a case where a picture (or two) is worth a thousand words. Just look at that beautiful creation! If that doesn’t make your mouth water, no amount of words will entice you more š So dig into that lusciousness and let’s get to pitching!
Today’s pitchĀ comes to us from Katie whom you will remember from last month and her MG pitch for Winx Thinks Dinosaurs. Katie writes stories and learning resources toĀ engage young minds with big ideas.Ā Happy to leave her desk for family funĀ andĀ sports Katie is fueled by faith, laughter, and ice cream. She lives in Maryland where one of her favorite runs is the ~10 miles to the Washington Monument in D.C. Her website isĀ hereĀ and she’s on TwitterĀ @KTOEngen
Here is her pitch:
Working Title: Imagine That: The Lion, Maria, and Brindy
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 4-8)
The Pitch: Brindy spends hours each day imagining worlds packed with amazing characters. So, reading alone is never lonely for Brindy. But being with other kids is. On the school bus, at the park, or during swim practice, Brindy canāt imagine making even just one real friend. Until the books conspire… After Maria and the Lion visit, the unimaginable becomes possible. Brindy finds her own way to sing with confidence and speechify with courage – and make a friend.
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
If your answer is YES, please feel free to tell us what you particularly liked and why the pitch piqued your interest. If your answer is MAYBE or NO, please feel free to tell us what you think could be better in the spirit of helping Katie improve her pitch. Helpful examples of possible alternate wordings are welcome. (However I must ask that comments be constructive and respectful. I reserve the right not to publish comments that are mean because that is not what this is about.)
Please send YOUR pitches for the coming weeks! For rules and where to submit, click on this link Would You Read It or on Would You Read it in the dropdown under For Writers in the bar above. There are openings in January, so you have time to polish your pitch before putting it up for helpful feedback and a chance to have it read and commented on by editor Erin Molta!
Katie is looking forward to your thoughts on her pitch! Ā I am looking forward to getting a bag (ok, probably 2 or 3 bags š) of miniature Halloween chocolate bars – you know, the kind that are so tiny they have no calories š They’re not called Fun Size for nothing! Snickers, Twix, and KitKats, here I come!
It’s Perfect Picture Book Friday, and I’m thinking about how much I love October because of all the wonderful autumn and Halloween picture books there are. š ā¢ļø
This one is new this year from talented author/illustrator Nicola Killen and I think you will be as taken with it as I am!
Title: The Little Kitten
Written & Illustrated By: Nicola Killen
Simon & Schuster/Paula Wiseman Books, July 21 2020, fiction
Suitable For Ages: 4-8 (though I think kids slightly younger would enjoy it too!)
Themes/Topics: seasons (autumn – with a nod to Halloween), kindness, friendship, doing the right thing
Opening: “It was a crisp autumn morning, andĀ Ollie was heading outside to play, closely followed by her cat, Pumpkin.“
text and illustration copyright Nicola Killen, 2020, Paula Wiseman Books
Brief Synopsis: Ollie and her cat Pumpkin come upon a tiny kitten shivering in a pile of fallen leaves. Ollie warms the kitten up and the three become fast friends, but when Ollie sees āLost Kittenā posters she knows she has to help her new friend get home.
text and illustration copyright Nicola Killen, 2020, Paula Wiseman Books
Why I Like This Book: I know quiet books are notĀ the “in” thing, but I love them š This book is so sweet and lovely, such a gentle story about friendship and caring on a crisp autumn day.Ā Ollie, dressed in her cat costume, her cat Pumpkin, and the Little Kitten are three of a kind – perfect playmates.Ā Ollie’s distraction with the kitten (which makes her lose track of her beloved Pumpkin) is very believable.Ā Her kind heart helps her get the kitten to its rightful home.Ā And the moment when she can’t find Pumpkin is touching and saved from being too tearful by Pumpkin’s happy reappearance.Ā The art is what really makes this story special, though.Ā Little die-cut windows allow for an interactive experience on some of the pages.Ā Other pages shine with foil leaves.Ā The simple color palette lets the warm orange really stand out.Ā And the combination of text and art makes for a quiet, comforting story about everyone ending up where they’re supposed to be.
I hope you enjoy it as much as I do š
text and illustration copyright Nicola Killen, 2020, Paula Wiseman Books
PPBF folks, please add your titles and post-specific links (and any other info you feel like filling out š ) to the form below so we can all come see what fabulous picture books you’ve chosen to share this week!
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