My goodness, we have a busy day today!
What with all the Halloweensie hoopla, there hasn’t been time for much else, so we have a packed agenda. In the interest of moving things along and not making this post any longer than necessary, I will try to keep my usual charming ramblings to a minimum 🙂
First, if you haven’t yet had a chance to read the Halloweensie Contest finalists and vote for the one you think deserves to win, please go HERE. The poll is open until 5 PM EST today.
Next, we’ll skip on to Straight From The Editor. You will recall that Kirsti won the September Pitch Pick with her pitch for Upside Down In Frown Town.
Here is her pitch:
Where Sam lives, smiling is frowned upon. But, no matter what he tries, he can’t wipe the smile off his face. Even a frowning contest doesn’t make a frowner out of Sam. When he can’t change himself, he decides to change the town instead.
and here are editor Erin Molta’s thoughts:
I really like Erin’s idea! It’s always so interesting to hear her insights!
Now I think we could use a little break. Something Chocolate, anyone?
It feels like a Chocolate Lava Cake day, don’t you think?
Let’s dig in 🙂
And now, without getting chocolate all over your keyboards, let’s tackle the October Pitch Pick!
Here are the pitches, thoughtfully revised after your very helpful feedback.
#1 Kari
The Great UFO Hunt – ER
Seven year old Mekayla, who’s an aspiring astronaut and lover of all things space, is convinced she sees a UFO crash land in the woods behind her house. Weird stuff begins to happen around town: lights are going on and off in an empty house, a strange girl keeps showing up out of thin air, and Mekayla finds what she believes is part of the space ship. But despite all the evidence, no one believes her! Can Mekayla and her friends save the town before it’s overrun?
#2 Linda
Proberta Gerber And The Terrible Mess PB (ages 4-8)
“Clean one thing at a time.” Proberta’s brother suggests. “Start with your bed.” But Proberta can’t find it in the terrible mess that used to be her bedroom. She blames the Dust Bunnies, but Mom isn’t buying it. Proberta hopes for magic but discovers she should be careful what she wishes for!
#3 Rosi
Iris The Rainbow Girl PB (ages 2-5)
Iris sees a sparkling rainbow. It’s so beautiful, she decides she wants to be one. Her parents tell her all the reasons she cannot, but Iris is determined and won’t let anyone hang a dark cloud over her idea. Soap bubbles have little rainbows on them, but when she covers herself with them, they burst and wash away. After dreaming about rainbows, Iris comes up with a way to achieve her goal.
#4 Julie
Broccolilocks PB (ages 3-6)
CRUNCH! To satisfy Broccolilocks’ GIANT appetite her parents plant every inch of their community garden plot. But a mysterious stink leads her nose down the rows to find that something has been munching on her favorite: broccoli! Inviting hungry friends to keep pesky aphids in check, and Broccolilocks fed, may be just right!
I know you may be a little burned out on voting 🙂 but this one should be a little easier – only 4 choices instead of 12 🙂 Please cast your vote for the pitch you think deserves a read by editor Erin Molta by 5 PM EST on Sunday November 10.
Many thanks for voting… again 🙂Finally, we have today’s pitch which comes to us from Steve. Steve says, “I spent 20 years as a teacher of small children in London. Reading aloud was my favourite part of teaching. This means that I absolutely know what a PB, Lower MG should sound like. The challenge is to make my own writing sound right!“
Steve is currently in New Zealand and wants everyone to know that if he doesn’t respond to your comments right away it’s because of the time difference. He is greatly appreciative of everyone’s input and looks forward to hearing from you!
Here is his pitch:
Working Title: Rashad Saves The World
Age/Genre: Picture Book (ages 5-8)
The Pitch: Rashad is tired of being the youngest and the least important member of his family, so when he learns at school that he can save the world, he leaps straight into action. Which leads him straight into trouble with the rest of his family. And when he accidentally demolishes the garden of his Rottweiler Next Door Neighbour, his career as a Super Hero seems to have come to an abrupt end. Will he still be able to save the world? Or will somebody special have to step in to help?
So what do you think? Would You Read It? YES, MAYBE or NO?
Steve is looking forward to your thoughts on his pitch! I am looking forward to announcing the Halloweensie Contest Winners tomorrow, along with some other little surprises!!! 🙂
Have a wonderful Wednesday, everyone! And see you tomorrow for a very special Halloweensie Winners Post!!! 🙂
Thanks so much for taking the time to give Steve such helpful feedback, Beverly!
Sounds exciting for sure! Is Rashad a dog or is just the Rottweiler a dog? A little tighter here and clearer there will give the pitch pop.
Thanks so much for chiming in for Steve, Lauri – I know he really appreciates all the helpful feedback!
Yes! I would definitely read it! I think children will be able to relate very well to this story , and how sometimes we get ahead of ourselves and bite off more than we can chew (even as adults; especially as adults!) but there's always a friend to help us tailor it down and get us on track once again. Kudos, Steve!
Yes, I would read this book 🙂 I think we need more superhero's the save the world! Or at least more kids wearing capes….
I don't know if I'd state that the youngest is the least important member of the family (maybe I'm taking it personally because I'm the youngest…) but typically the youngest is favored from most of the families I've been involved with.
This is how I would tighten the lead.
Being the youngest in the family, Rashad decides he doesn't want to be treated like a baby anymore, and establishes himself as the family Superhero. This leads to a series of unfortunate events involving each member of his family (and his neighbor's petunia's) …..
I'm not sure if Rottweiler is the neighbor or the dog?
I'm excited to check this book out Steve, great pitch!
Thanks for your very thoughtful comments for Steve, Lyla! Very kind of you to take the time to be so helpful 🙂
Thanks so much for your helpful comments for Steve, Beth! I know he appreciates everybody's input!
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