Woo hoo! Woo hoo!
Time for something new.
Woo hoo! Woo hoo!
How’s that for a theme song?
It doesn’t have a tune yet . . . but that’s just a minor detail 🙂
Here on Blueberry Hill the weather forecast is less than optimal. Rain, snow, ice and other cr** . . . er, precipitation threatens to make going outside something to avoid unless you have a very good reason to want to fall down your mudroom stairs and introduce your hindquarters to the driveway, so today’s debut picture book is perfect! It will carry us away to the island paradise of Hawai’i!
Ho’onani: Hula Warrior
written by Heather Gale
illustrated by Mika Song
October 1, 2019
Nonfiction, Ages 4 – 9
An empowering celebration of identity, acceptance and Hawaiian culture based on the true story of a young girl in Hawai’i who dreams of leading the boys-only hula troupe at her school.
SUSANNA: Welcome, Heather! Thank you so much for joining us today! Where did the idea for this book come from?
HEATHER: This story came after watching the PBS documentary A Place in the Middle, but it took a while for me to consider it as even a possible picture book.
I had used the documentary to help wind down after a day of research for that next picture book idea. Yet while watching Ho’onani and Kumu Hina face their struggles I was transfixed, swept along with the story and the power of emotions it evoked. When Ho’onani turned to face her community, I held my breath as if I were amongst the awed silence of the crowd. And when Ho’onani opened her mouth to begin the chant usually reserved for males, I whooped it up, both proud and relieved she had pulled off her biggest challenge.
The next day I could not stop thinking about each character in the documentary.
I watched and re-watched A Place in the Middle, never getting tired of feeling those same emotions. When this happens, I think you have no choice but to write the story. It’s under your skin and won’t let go until you do.
SUSANNA: How long did it take you to write this book?
HEATHER: Initially I’d promised the producers, Dean Hamer and Joe Wilson, a no-commitment rough draft within 6 weeks. But it helped that by the time we’d met, I already knew where the story would start and where it should end. I’d never written and researched so hard in my life to meet that deadline, but it worked. They got their first draft and I got their green light to carry on.
After that the revisions took almost a year.
My best advice to anyone is to not start a story until you know those two key moments. They’ll keep you going when the writing process gets rough.
SUSANNA: Did you go through many revisions?
HEATHER: I must have gone through at least 150 revisions and this is the time to ask for help from your critique partners and writing buddies. Listen to their comments and suggestions and if more than one person is saying the same, you know you have to go back.
As you learn the mechanics behind a story, you’ll also discover your own revision process, and which ones are your favorites.
Mine are adding emotion and deleting.
I may already have one or two emotions in a draft, but there comes a point when the story needs a whole lot more. Thankfully, at this stage of the manuscript you’ll know your character inside and out, so this part is fun.
As I read scene by scene, I imagine my character’s face and gut reactions to the situation. I’ll jot them down and return for a more serious edit.
After emotions are added my next favorite is deleting.
Distilling a draft to 1000 special words is a challenge.
Every word matters.
Every sentence should feel unique.
Every paragraph has the potential to build a scene.
Like decluttering a room, there’s a sense of lightness with deleting which makes a story even better.
I start with spacing out the sentences. This gives me some working room (aka thinking or doodling space).
Then line by line, I’ll check the timing of events. I’ll ask myself does this follow and is it logical?
Then I check the sentence itself, looking at the structure.
Have you noticed sometimes when you split the sentence in half then swap their order it’s so much stronger? Or move one word to the end and you’ve got a WOW sentence.
Next, I look at each word in the sentence.
And here’s where my thesaurus is used to check each word conveys the best meaning I intended.
Perhaps there’s a better word with a deeper meaning. Or, the word is perfect, but in that sentence, it’s a tongue-twister.
And then I like to use words that surprise the reader and are easy or fun to say out loud.
If, after doing all this, the paragraph adds no story value, it qualifies for a total strike-through.
It’s hard to explain but when there’s a line through all that hard work, the story often pops through the noise and clutter.
SUSANNA: When did you know your manuscript was ready for submission?
HEATHER: I’m slowly learning when my manuscripts are almost ready for submission.
I always read my manuscript out loud to our two dogs (because my two kids are grown up now). This is an incredible way to discover those fancy words you found in thesaurus don’t quite work when placed together.
I check off any sentences where my brain did a ‘huh?’ and question any gaps in the timing of events.
On another round I’ll hunt for emotions in the scenes. I want to walk in that person’s shoes, feel their frustrations and their achievements, get goosebumps and a lump in my throat.
Then, my best tool is the pitch.
Because my working pitches seem to always start off 4-6 sentences long, until I‘ve got one that’s whittled down to one or two sentences, I know the manuscript is not ready.
I tweak and hone that pitch every 3-4 revisions.
Once everything is as close as I can get it , I save my work in a folder, stash it away, put the timer on and wait two weeks.
And . . . tah-dah! This is when you’ll know if your story is ready to submit.
With fresh eyes I’ll read my story out loud, looking for all the same things as before. I want to laugh, to tear up, have the words swimming in front of me.
I want the story to unfold, unrushed yet not too wordy.
And when that happens there’s no way to describe the feeling except you know you’ve given your story the best possible chance.
Your manuscript is ready to face the big wide world.
I have two workspaces that inspire my writing process.
Here’s my view from the cottage:
SUSANNA: That is inspiring all right! But I’m not sure I’d get much work done with a view like that!!! 🙂 When and how did you submit?
HEATHER: I’d submitted this story to one agent while seeking representation and then to a publishing house through an earlier conference connection.
Both times Ho’onani: Hula Warrior was turned down but coming up was our annual Pack Your Imagination conference hosted by CANSCAIP in Toronto.
We have an opportunity to skip the line with Canadian publishing houses which is a fantastic opportunity. I decided to hold this manuscript back from further submissions because I had to know what was wrong with this story!
SUSANNA: When did you get “the call”? (Best moment ever! 🙂 )
HEATHER: I was the last person slated to meet Lynne Missen, the Publishing Director for Penguin Young Readers at the CANSCAIP conference. You can take being last as good news, bad news, or part of the lucky draw so as I sat and waited. I’ll admit, I was nervous.
And then it was my turn.
As I listened, waiting for the, ‘here’s why your story isn’t working,’ I struggled to understand why Lynne was smiling.
Lynne must have repeated it three or four times before her words and their meaning sank in – they loved my story!
We got to work right there, going through the manuscript, tweaking areas, discussing ideas and my 15-minute slot turned into the best 30 minutes I could’ve ever imagined . . . working on a story that my heart was so vested in.
SUSANNA: How did you celebrate signing your contract?
HEATHER: We popped a bottle of bubbles and had a barbeque with my hubby, kids and dogs.
SUSANNA: Was the contract what you expected in terms of advance, royalty percentage, publication timeline, author copies etc.?
HEATHER: The contract was just what I expected, an advance, followed by a percentage in royalties and for me, the best gift ever – 10 author copies! (I’m one of 6 kids so my siblings all got a dedicated and signed copy.)
SUSANNA: What can you tell us about the editorial process?
HEATHER: Samantha Swenson is such a gifted editor who, through some word tweaks made the story pop, and that’s when I saw the potential they’d seen all along.
SUSANNA: How about your experience of the illustration process?
HEATHER: I was so lucky with having Mika as my illustrator.
From the beginning I saw all her sketches, and my thoughts and ideas were sought out while any questions I had were explained. Mika captured each child in the documentary at the right moment while Kumu Hina looked the same yet different as she too experienced her emotions.
I had one illustration note in the story at the end and that was only because Ho’onani’s sister is not mentioned in the text.
Here’s what I wrote:
One person stood.
[illo: Kana smiles]
SUSANNA: Did you get to see advance reviews from Kirkus, SLJ, etc? What was that like?
HEATHER: I saw a mix of advance reviews while others were sent to me soon after being released.
I think the best part about reading a review is, you get to see how the rest of the world views your story.
I’ve learnt so much about Mika’s illustrations from reading reviews.
For example, one review commented on Mika’s technique as a way to convey information to children.
“Boldly outlined watercolor and ink artwork by Song (A Friend for Henry) conveys visual information with strength that suggests Ho‘onani’s own.”
And then I read, “Watercolor and thick, angular black lines against a combination of white, open spaces, and blue or tan backgrounds elevate and emphasize Ho’onani as the central character within each spread.
As well, the use of bold colors at times helps some characters become more noticeable in crowd scenes.”
Canadian Review of Materials
And here’s another wonderful comment on Mika’s illustrations: “The boys filing past in the background, and the empty pair of flip-flops left in the hallway, are pale and weak in comparison to Ho’onani’s profound sense of self as a hula warrior.”
E. Schneider at Imaginary Elevators
With each of these reviews I went back to my copy and noticed the same.
SUSANNA: How long did it take from offer to having the first copy in your hand?
HEATHER: The process from signing the contract to a first copy was almost two years. That sounds like a long time, but it wasn’t. We were always moving forward with the next steps.
SUSANNA: What kind of marketing and promotion has your publisher done for this book?
HEATHER: Tundra Books has gone above and beyond in their efforts to get this book noticed by various communities.
From trade reviews to tradeshows, to advertising to promotions, Ho’onani: Hula Warrior has been included or is their featured title.
SUSANNA: Describe any marketing/promotion you did for this book.
HEATHER: I’ve reached out to picture book bloggers I know and asked for any opportunity to be a guest post or have the book reviewed.
I’ve also figured out Twitter and become more involved.
And I plan on doing school and library visits – my first is in NZ!
SUSANNA: Wow! NZ?! That is AMAZING! How long was it between the time you started writing seriously and the time you sold your first picture book?
HEATHER: The whole process took me six years along with a lot of online and class courses, some conferences and then just hours in the chair, practicing and honing the craft.
I actually started my serious writing with a psychological thriller which I wrote one year during NANOWRIMO (National November Writing Month). And, I still like that story and maybe one day I’ll get to revise it.
SUSANNA: Anything else you’d like to share about your book’s journey from inspiration to publication?
HEATHER: This book has taught me a lot about the industry and I’m in awe. We have so many dedicated, passionate professionals who work with picture books and once a manuscript is sold, there’s still so much more that happens behind the scenes before it reaches the shelves.
SUSANNA: Heather, thank you so much for taking the time to participate in this series and paying it forward to other writers! We so appreciate all your insights, and the helpful information you shared about your writing process! Wishing you the very best of success with this and future books!!!
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Thank you all for stopping by to read today! Have a lovely, inspiration-filled Tuesday! Maybe today is the day you’ll write your debut picture book 🙂
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21 thoughts on “Tuesday Debut – Presenting Heather Gale!”
Congratulations, Heather! I enjoyed reading how this all came about!
Thank you Tina,
don’t you love how each book also has its own story!?
Great interview, Heather and Susanna! Congratulations on the book, Heather! Sounds wonderful. Thank you for sharing about how you know when the ms. is ready. Great advice!
Thanks, Kim. Knowing when your ms is ready is a tough one and I’m sure this process will evolve.
Wonderful interview and, Heather, your detailed advice on how you really examine your sotyr is so helpful. Congrats on this great book!
Thank you so much, Kathy! I hope this helps at least a little, because it’s not an exact science either.
Great interview. Love the reviews of the art. And I especially liked Heather’s revision process.
Thank you Carole!
Mika’s illustrations are amazing and add so much more to the story that words can’t do.
Heather – these are ridiculously fabulous, inspired steps on how you revise and refine your manuscript. They were helpful to me, and I am sure they will help many others explore and define their own paths to revision. Thank you and congratulations!
Cathy, thank you!
So pleased they’re helpful as a process. You’re so right, revision is a little exploration and a lot of time, trial and error. Sometimes I wish it was like baking a cake – wouldn’t that be amazing for those days you feel nothing works!?
Yes! A fail proof recipe!
Thank you so much, Susanna…what a stellar post!!!
Heather…I’m so glad I got to meet you in person at the WOW retreat back in 2016…and I’m thrilled with your success. This is a brilliant book…I can’t wait to get a copy and read it with my 6-year old granddaughter. And thank you so much for sharing your writing/revision process…there are tips and techniques for all of us to embrace! Congratulations, my friend!
Vivian, thank you!!
I’m honoured to have met you as a friend as well.
I hope your granddaughter loves the story and its message. Revision is never easy but with a tactical plan, there’s hope in every manuscript (at least, that’s what I tell myself!)
Thanks for the revision tips. And congrats on finding a home for this story! Quite inspiring!
Thank you Jilanne. I hope the tips help start the process.
Yes, this story sure did find the right home.
Great interview! LOVE the revision tips. Congratulations!
What a terrific interview, athough it took me an hour to get through because I had to look up A Place In The Middle, then I had to start it, then I couldn’t stop watching. Now I really can’t wait to see this book. I love Heather’s in depth look at her revision process.
This post was so inspiring! The passion for this story is just fabulous and I cannot wait to read it! Thank you so much.
Wonderful interview. I love how you describe revising. Congratulations!
I love everything about this interview and I can’t wait to read your book. It looks amazing. Thank you for sharing. I especially appreciate your revision process.
Heather, thank you for the detailed overview of your revision process. Super helpful! And congrats on your book, It sounds fascinating. Also loved the comments regarding the illustrations. All in all, a terrific interview. Thanks, Susanna 🙂