Hi Everyone. Posting of finalists is delayed. I’m not exactly sure when they’ll be up, but it will be as soon as possible. Likely another week.
Eye of newt and dragon fang! It’s time for . . .
The 12th Annual Halloweensie Writing Contest!!!
~ for children’s writers ~
THE CONTEST: write a 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children (children here defined as 12 and under) (title not included in word count) using the words slither, treat, and scare.
- Your story can be poetry or prose, scary, funny, sweet, or anything in between, but it will only count for the contest if it includes those 3 words and is 100 words. Get it? Halloweensie – because it’s not very long and it’s for little people 😊
- You can go under the word count but not over!
- Title is not included in the word count.
- You may use the words in any form i.e. slithery (yes, it’s a word, we looked it up 😊), treated, scary, etc, etc, whathaveyou 😊
- You are welcome to enter more than one entry – just remember you’ll be competing against yourself 😊
- No illustration notes please!
And yes, I know 100 words is short, but that’s part of the fun and the challenge!
POST: your story in the comment section of the Official Contest Post (that’s this one!)( between Right NOW this very second! and 11:59PM Eastern Monday October 31st (So you have 3 full days to post – today, tomorrow, and Monday.)
- For those of you who would also like to post on your blogs, please feel free to do so! You are welcome to include the link to your blog with your entry in the comment section of the Official Contest Post so that people can come visit your blog, but all entries must be posted in the comment section of THIS Post between right now and Monday October 31st at 11:59PM Eastern.
- If you have difficulty posting your entry to the comments, which unfortunately sometimes happens, you may email your entry to me and I’ll post it for you! [susanna[at]susannahill[dot]com Please place your entry in the body of the email including your title, byline (that means who the story is by – you! – so for example, By Jane Doe) and word count at the top – NO ATTACHMENTS! and please do not submit any entries before the official opening of the contest at 12:01 AM Saturday October 29th. They will not be accepted.
- I know how hard you all work on your entries, and how anxious you are to get them posted, but please try to be a little patient if your entry doesn’t show up immediately. Many comments have to be manually approved, and it sometimes takes me a little while to post entries that come in by email. I promise I will get to everything as soon as I can. I try never to leave my desk during contests, but sometimes it’s unavoidable 😊
THE JUDGING: over the following days, my devoted assistants and I will read and re-read and narrow down the entries to a finalist field of about 12 which will be posted here for you to vote on I hope by Saturday November 5th (though if the judging takes longer than expected it might be a little later – we will do our best! But fair warning I have two school visits that week and a long drive Friday.) The winners will be announced Tuesday November 8th (good lord willin’ and the creek don’t rise 😊)
Judging criteria will be as follows:
- 1. Kid-appeal! – These stories are intended for a young audience (ages 12 and under), so we’re looking for stories that children will enjoy and relate to.
- 2. Halloweeniness – the rules state a Halloween story, so it must be crystal clear that the story is about Halloween, not just some random spooky night.
- 3. Use of all 3 required words and whether you came it at 100 words or less.
- 4. Quality of story – entries must tell a story, including a main character of some kind and a true story arc even if it’s tiny 😊 Entries must not be merely descriptions or mood pieces.
- 5. Quality of Writing: check your spelling, grammar, punctuation etc. If you’re going to rhyme, give us your best 😊 Use and flow of language, correctness of mechanics, excellence of rhyme and meter if you use it, PROOFREADING!
- 6. Originality and creativity – because that is often what sets one story above another.
- 7. How well you followed the Submission Guidelines – agents and editors expect professionalism. This is a chance to practice making sure you read and follow specified guidelines. If you don’t follow agent and editor submission guidelines, they won’t even read your submission.
THE PRIZES: So amazing! What wonderful, generous people we have in our kidlit community! Just wait til you see what you can win!
⭐️ Rhyme & Meter Self Study Course – Renee LaTulippe Renée M. LaTulippe is the author of The Crab Ballet (Cameron Kids/Abrams, 2022) and Limelight: Theater Poems to Perform (Charlesbridge, 2024) and has poems published in many anthologies including No World Too Big, Night Wishes, School People, National Geographic’s The Poetry of US, One Minute Till Bedtime, Poems Are Teachers, ThankU: Poems of Gratitude, and A World Full of Poems.
⭐️ Picture Book Manuscript Critique (Rhyming or Non-rhyming, Fiction or Nonfiction) with written feedback AND a 30-minute Zoom Chat with children’s author Vivian Kirkfield, author of PIPPA’S PASSOVER PLATE (Holiday House, 2019), SWEET DREAMS, SARAH (Creston Books, 2019), FOUR OTTERS TOBOGGAN (Pomegranate, 2019), MAKING THEIR VOICES HEARD: THE INSPIRING FRIENDSHIP OF ELLA FITZGERALD AND MARILYN MONROE (Little Bee Books, 2020), FROM HERE TO THERE: INVENTIONS THAT CHANGED THE WAY THE WORLD MOVES (Clarion Books, 2021), and SHOW ME HOW! BUILD YOUR CHILD’S SELF-ESTEEM THROUGH READING, CRAFTING AND COOKING (MoneyPenny Press Ltd, 2010)
⭐️ 30 Minute Zoom Ask Me Anything with Rosie Pova author of IF I WEREN’T WITH YOU (Spork, April 2017), SARAH’S SONG (Spork, September 2017), SUNDAY RAIN (Lantana Publishing, March 2021), THE SCHOOL OF FAILURE: A STORY ABOUT SUCCESS (Yehoo Press, May 2022), and for Middle Grade readers, HAILEY QUEEN PRANKING MAKES PERFECT: THE ALIEN ENCOUNTER (Spork, April 2017) Rosie does a lot of school visits and presentations, should that happen to be of interest for your Ask Me Anything.
⭐️ Picture Book Manuscript Critique (rhyming preferred) with Andrea Denish, author of EVERYONE LOVES A PARADE (Astra Young Readers, March 2020), and THE WAY WE SAY HELLO forthcoming from Starry Forest Books February 7, 2023
⭐️ Picture Book Critique (non-rhyming) with Becky Scharnhorst, author of MY SCHOOL STINKS! (Flamingo Books, July 2021) and THIS FIELD TRIP STINKS! (Flamingo Books, August 2022)
⭐️ Connecting With School Librarians! Fabulous Opportunity for published or soon to be published authors! Winner’s Choice of either a Zoom or phone chat about how to connect with school librarians and get their ear or an Ask Me Anything Zoom or phone chat about K-8th grade author visits from a librarian’s POV from Kathy Halsey. Kathy Halsey is Storyteller Academy’s Community Manager and Ambassador. She enjoys writing picture books, humor, and nonfiction. Kathy’s active in SCBWI and blogs with other kid lit writers on the GROG. She serves on the Choose to Read Ohio Advisory Council and speaks at educational and literary conferences. Kathy’s a former K-12 school librarian and children’s bookseller. She writes monthly author studies for the Reading for Research Month along with Keila Dawson.
⭐️ 30 Minute Ask Me Anything Zoom Chat (anything relating to writing/publishing) with Penny Parker Klostermann, talented author of THERE WAS AN OLD DRAGON WHO SWALLOWED A KNIGHT (Random House 2015) and A COOKED-UP FAIRY TALE (Random House 2017) as well as the forthcoming SPIDER LADY: Nan Songer and Her Arachnid WWII Army (Astra/Calkins Creek 2025) and another as yet unannounced 😊
⭐️ Picture Book Manuscript Critique (Rhyming) PLUS Zoom Chat from developmental editor Lou Piccolo! Lou studied English Literature, creative writing and teaching at university in South Africa. After working as an EFL teacher in France for twenty years, she studied proofreading and editing before becoming a developmental editor of children’s and young adult’s literature for independent authors. She is a graduate of Renee LaTulippe’s Lyrical Language Lab – Punching Up Prose With Poetry course and Making Picture Book Magic, the in-house writer for Editions Entrefilet’s language-learning magazine ‘Go English Kids’ for children of 8-12 in France, and a traditionally published author of MG and YA fiction with Burlington Books.
⭐️ Picture Book Manuscript Critique PLUS Zoom Chat with Ellen Leventhal! Ellen is the author of DON’T EAT THE BLUEBONNETS (Spork, 2017), LOLA CAN’T LEAP (Spork, 2018), HAYFEST: A HOLIDAY QUEST (ABCs Press, 2010), and A FLOOD OF KINDNESS (WorthyKids, 2021)
⭐️ Picture Book Manuscript Critique (rhyming or non-rhyming) with Kelly Conroy whose poems have been published in 5 anthologies (10.10, wee words for wee ones, October 2021; BETTER THAN STARBUCKS, January 2022; THINGS WE EAT, Pomelo Books, March 2022; THINGS WE FEEL, Pomelo Books, July 2022; WHAT IS A FRIEND, Pomelo Books, October 2022) and also the author of a rhyming board book due out in 2025.
⭐️ 30 Minute Picture Book Zoom Critique Session with Lynne Marie
Lynne Marie is the accomplished author of Hedgehog Goes to Kindergarten – art by Anne Kennedy (Scholastic 2011), Hedgehog’s 100th Day of School – art by Lorna Hussey (Scholastic 2017), The Star of the Christmas Play — art by Lorna Hussey (Beaming Books 2018), Moldilocks and the 3 Scares — art by David Rodriguez Lorenzo (Sterling 2019 and Scholastic 2019), Let’s Eat! Mealtime Around the World — art by Parwinder Singh (Beaming Books 2019) and The Three Little Pigs And The Rocket Project — art by Wendy Fedan (Mac and Cheese Press 2022) and American Pie — art by Dea Lenihan (Dancing Flamingo Press, April 12, 2022)
⭐️ Picture Book Manuscript Critique (Rhyming or Non-rhyming, Fiction or Nonfiction) with a recording of first read-through by children’s author and poet Sarah Meade, contributor to HOP TO IT: POEMS TO GET YOU MOVING (Pomelo Books, 2020!)
⭐️ 20 Minute Zoom Ask Me Anything with Darshana Khiani, author of HOW TO WEAR A SARI (Versify, June 2021), I’M AN AMERICAN (Viking Books for Young Readers, May 2023), and THE BOYS OF KOH PANYEE (coming Fall 2023)
⭐️ Rate Your Story Speed Pass from Lynne Marie
And maybe I’ll have some extra picture books to add in here and there to sweeten the pie. . . 😊
Please join me in thanking these very generous authors and other writing professionals for contributing their books and writing expertise as prizes by visiting their websites and blogs, considering their books and services for birthday, holiday or other gift purchases, rating and/or reviewing their books on GoodReads, Amazon, B&N, or anywhere else if you like them, recommending them for school and library visits, recommending their books for school and library purchases, and supporting them in any other way you can dream up! 😊
Happy Writing! Happy Reading! And Happy Halloween!
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Now, let the Halloweensie begin!
The 239 entries listed below are linked to where they appear in the comments so you can click on the titles and get right to them! (Assuming WordPress cooperates . . . fingers crossed!) Anyone who feels kind can start at the bottom of the list so those entries get some comments too! 🎃 😊
- Apparition Preparation For A Scary Halloween – Royal Baysinger
- Attack Of The Zornaks – Royal Baysinger
- Down In the Halloween Cave – Royal Baysinger
- Sisters – Sara Kruger
- Halloween Nightmare – Helen Lai
- The Follower – Marla Yablon
- A Frightfully Fun Time – Susan E. Schipper
- The Halloween Dream Team – Jenna Elyse Johnson
- Skeleton Sam Settles The Score – Jennifer Cowan
- Slug Slime – Vashti Verbowski
- Ghost Recipes – Julia Pierre Hammond
- Rainforest Halloween – Heather Kinser
- On Snail-O-Ween – Heather Kinser
- The Frightful Fugitive – Anne Lipton
- Little Witchy – Elizabeth Myer zu Heringdorf
- Get Your Glow On – Corine Timmer
- Sally The Slug Has A Sweet Tooth – Eleanor Ann Peterson
- In The Middle Of A Snack – Bridget Magee
- Coming Around – Emily Durant
- Piper’s Pickle – Colleen Murphy
- Safe From Scares – Sarah Meade
- Claudia Maude Clickerticker’s Costume Shop – Sarah Meade
- What Do Witches Eat? – Kelly Clasen
- Ghouldilocks And The Three Shares – Claire Blumenfeld
- Closer – Reed Hilton-Eddy
- SSSSSScary – Jen Subra
- A Shady Halloween – Jennifer Lowe
- Help! – Elizabeth James
- Arabella’s Halloween Treat – Colleen Fogarty
- Trick Or Treat? – Corine Timmer
- The Coolest Halloween Costume – Carmen Castillo Gilbert
- Green Goulash Stew – Claudine Pullen
- The House With The Good Candy – Vanessa Konoval
- The House Creatures’ Halloween – Lauri Meyers
- When Good Luck Struck – Molly Ippolito
- The Haunted House Halloween Challenge – Marty Bellis
- Demon On The Line – Laura Polasek
- The Spooky Halloween Parade – Janet Krauthamer
- Mrs. Cleary’s Cats – Susan Eyerman
- A Halloween Twist – Cheryl Simon
- Wilhelmina The Witch – Ashlee MacCallum
- Halloween Hater – Blaire Moore
- The Halloween Bake-Off – Rose Cappelli
- Trick-Or-Treat, Shoes To Eat – Ashley Sierra
- Tricks Before Treats – Danielle S. Hammelef
- Happy Halloween – Stephanie R. Mena
- A Batty Halloween – Melissa Chupp
- Who Whispers In The Dark? – Erika Romero
- Interview With The Vampire – Helen Lai
- Slug Life – Kim Wagner Nolan
- Sapling’s Halloween – Lori Sheroan
- Nothing Scared Alicia Bones – Christine Evans
- The Mask – Su Ko
- DON’T FLUSH YOUR GOLDFISH DOWN THE TOILET OR HE WILL COME BACK TO GET YOU ON HALLOWEEN NIGHT – Sue Ko
- Going As Myself – Marianna Sacra
- Halloween Snack – Debra Daugherty
- Halloween-ing – Lori Himmel
- Something Wriggling This Way Comes – Amy Chini
- Edgar Allen Crow – Kathleen Jacobs
- Queen Slug’s Halloween – Kelsey E. Gross
- Pull Of The Moon – Darla Christie
- There’s One In Every Class – Linda Staszak
- Snollooween – Katie McEnaney
- A (little) STEM Halloween – Jilanne Hoffman
- Trick For Treat – Linda Starszak
- Mattie, The Scaredy Tabby Cat – Janet Parkinson Bryce
- Nothing Scares Me – Karen Condit
- ‘Twas Halloween Night – Sharon Coffey
- A Hotdog Halloween Hullabaloo – Sharon Coffey
- Their Trick, My Treat – Carol Van Gorp
- Interview With The Vampire – Helen Lai
- Halloween Night Light – Daniella Kaufman
- Do Goblins Gobble? – Sally Yorke-Viney
- Witchy-licious Stew – Charlotte Dixon
- The Ghouliest Ghouls – Marta Cutler
- The Scariest Bear – Marta Cutler
- Halloween Is Different This Year – S.S. Lee
- The Rattlesloth – Russell Wolff
- The Eyes Have It – Marta Cutler
- A Scare Affair – Lori C. Evans
- Halloween Haul – Stephanie Maksymiw
- Halloween Is Magic – Kristen Littlefield
- Command Performance – Jamie Donahoe
- Zombie In The House – Isabel Rodriguez
- A Wise Disguise – Jill Purtee
- Truck-Or-Treat – Mia Geiger
- The Halloween Dare – Marty Findley
- Witch’s Brew – Marty Findley
- A Halloween Tail – Katie Lee Reinert
- Creepy People – Sharon McCarthy
- Happy Halloween – Elaine D’Alessandro
- Scared Sssssilly – Julie Lerczak
- A Spooky House – Gail Hartman
- A Halloween Smile – Tonnye Fletcher
- A Scary Dare – Mona Pease
- Stop Your Bellyaching Soup, A Jump Rope Song – Debbie Meneses
- A Spell Of Transformation – Meagan T. Gentry
- First Flight – Paul Kurtz
- I Scare You, You Scare Me – Paul Kurtz
- Spiders vs. Snakes – Linda Schueler
- Pot Of The Witch – Reed Ambrose
- Snake In The Grass – Judy Sobanski
- Beware Or Be Scared – Norah Colvin
- Bat’s First Halloween – no author listed
- Children Of The Bog – Melissa Miles
- In Through My Window – Eric Sondergeld
- A Squishy Scare – Stephanie Henson
- The Last House – Janet Smart
- Jack-O-Lantern – Darcee A. Freier
- Beak-A-Boo! – Jill Lambert
- Jackie Saves Halloween – Brittany Richman
- The Treat – S. E. Cottrill
- Little Vampire’s First Halloween – Sharon Dalgleish
- Franny Fruit Bat’s Friendly Halloween – Amy LaMae Brewer
- Chicken’s First Halloween – Emma Hay
- Moldy Mayhem – Sue Lancaster
- Sea Monster – Patricia Nozell
- A Halloween Lullaby – Brigid Finucane
- Tricky Treats – Lisa Lowe Stauffer
- KA-RUNCH! – Donna Kurtz
- Scary-Fairy – Donna Kurtz
- Halloween Hop – Carole Gerber
- Halloween Treat – Krista Legge
- Sara’s Hairy Halloween – Jesse Anna Bornemann
- Scary Goat Scam – Elenore Byrne
- Goulentine – Michelle S. Kennedy
- My Teacher Is A Creature – Mary Ann Cortez
- The Haunted House – Karen Morgan
- Trick or Treat: A Forest Halloween – Sarah Marhevsky
- Shadows Come Crawling – Marlee Fuller-Morris
- Slithering Snake – Deborah Hunt
- Jack-oh-no! – Pollu Mendoza
- Jack’s Lament – Steve Jankousky
- Sense The Way – Sarah Hetu
- Slither and Hiss: Trick or Treat? – Cathrene Youngquist
- Pumpkin Jack – Jennifer Weingardt
- The Peanut Butter Cup Song – Hannah Roy LaGrone
- Gregory’s First Halloween – Morgan Lau
- Scary Treats – Ken Major
- Super Scary Sausages – Chris James
- Midnight Snack – Deborah Foster
- How To Trick-or-Treat If You’re A Snake – Abigail Mumford
- Scarecrows Of Halloween – Helen Ishmurzin
- Sneaky Snake – Jan Suhr
- Who’s There? – Dawn Renee Young
- Space Rangers And Skeletons – Cynthia Mackey
- A Halloween For Willard – Krista Harrington
- On Halloween Night – Amanda Flinn
- Early Worm’s Halloween Birthday Wish – Curtis King
- Sweetie The Parrot – Barbara DiMarco
- The Annual Pumpkin Carving Contest – Laura Straut
- Boo – Jean Martin
- Pete The Smallest Pumpkin – Tiffany Hanson
- Candy Corn’s Revenge – Tiffany Hanson
- A Martian’s Halloween – Angela Calabrese
- Candy Monster – Patricia MacMillan
- Igor’s First Halloween – Danna Zeiger
- You Can’t Scare Me – Danna Zeiger
- Pumpkin, Skeleton, Wolverine – Brenna Jeanneret
- Tricky Treats – Ashley Sutphen Delaney
- Little Sister Saves The Night – Laurie Kaiser
- The Sweetest Treat – Christina Shawn
- All Hallows’ Eve – Sasha Sirisena-Green
- Pumpkin Cat’s Turn – Bru Benson
- Frankenslug – Ryann Jones
- The Costume – Nina Nolan
- The Best Halloween Ever – Dianne Borowski
- Tricked – Geraldine V. Oades-Sese
- Trista’s Treat Or Trick? – Krissy Massey
- The Scariest Costume Of All – Abby N. Wooldridge
- Halloween is the BEST, but. . . – Andi Chitty
- It’s A Tricky Afterlife – Katie Schwartz
- Spider’s Halloween – Cassy Clarcq
- Slimon’s Halloween – Imelda Taylor
- The Zombie Flop – Liz Kehrli
- Melanie Monster – Lindsey LeBlanc
- Switch Witch Swap – Julie Fruitticher Schroeder
- S-S-Selma – Nancy Forbis-Stokes
- A Halloween Adventure – Gregory E. Bray
- Enter If You Dare – Trista Herring Baughman
- Snake’s Sweet Treats – Nadia Ali
- Costume Crisis – Keatley Eastman
- Tricked By The Treats – Elizabeth Muster
- Halloween Friend – Thelia Hutchinson
- My Dreadfully Dangerous Walk – Susan Twiggs
- Slither, Treat, Scare: A Halloween Story – Lynn Greenway
- I’m Not That Scared – Allison Gray
- The Halloween Prize – Mary Rudzinski
- Portia Pumpkin Proclaims – Judy Caldwell Hughes
- Pookie The Pomeranian’s Halloween Wish – Stephanie Jackson
- Boo The Ghost Gets Beaten – Stephanie Jackson
- Costume Drama – David Cobb
- Slither Spook – Jessica Milo
- Samira’s Potion – Jessica Milo
- Sabrina Squirrel Does Not Scare Easily – Liz Gill
- Snake’s Stealthy Solution – Kira Barrett
- What Did You See? – Kathleen Mazurowski
- Father Knows Best – Janice Kay
- The Costume – Amy Duchene
- Trick Or Treat – Laura Seely-Pollack
- Many Happy Resquirms – Diana Webb
- Theodore Turkey’s Halloween Hunt – Mary-Catherine Amadu
- Ghost Finds His Groove – Cindy Greene
- Weird Halloween Treats – Una Belle Townsend
- The Jabberwocks Of Halloween – Jenny Bowman
- Sooner And Sooner Every Year! – Stephanie Henson
- A Slimy Halloween: Halloweenie Competition – Erin Buhr
- Candy Night – Anne Weaver
- Growing Candy Apples – Hannah Roy LaGrone
- Sister’s First Halloween Night – Linda Hofke
- Calling All Campers to the Camp Spooky Halloween Campfire – Jamie Rodarte
- A Pumpkin Named Rattlesnake Pete – Pat Finnegan
- Pumpkin Pride – Pat Finnegan
- Gardenia Ghost – Katie Walsh
- I Am Always a Cat – Amanda Littlefield
- Scaredy Snake – Kathy Hill Crable
- Classroom Costume Conundrum – Cynthia Reeg
- A Beckoning Spell – Les Degnan
- Halloween Eve – Tarsia Rhyne
- Which Witch Will Win? – Lucretia Schafroth
- The Spider Web House – CJ Penko
- The Monster of Barlow’s Bakery – Jill Burns
- A Candy Break For Mongoose And Snake – Katie Schwartz
- Kid Cobra’s Halloween – Denise Seidman
- Costume Not Required – JC Kelly
- Lucinda Blackletter – Karen Pickrell
- Candi Corn – Liz Kehrli
- Glass Lizard Halloween – Maria Marshall
- Scaredy Cat And The Haunted Hunt – Samantha Cora Christian Haas
- Graduation Night – Naz Alibhai
- New Friends – Sarah Hawklyn
- Sam Wasn’t Afraid – T. May LeGrys
- Black Cats Get A Bad Rap – Colleen Dougherty
- Dad’s First Trick or Treat – Annette Bethers
- Skeletons Need Teddy Bears Too – Sharon Jackson
- Sam And Dusty Trick Or Treat – Julianna Helt
- Lost – Brenda Covert
- The Snakertons – Emily Holewczynski
2,677 thoughts on “The 12th Annual Halloweensie Writing Contest aahhhrrrooooOOOOO!!!”
ENTRY POSTED FOR PAUL
By Paul Kurtz
The moon grins like a Cheshire cat—
I morph into a scary bat,
To soar on autumn’s chilly breeze
And snake and slither through bare trees.
“It’s Halloween,” I cheer. “Hooray!
I love this treat-filled holiday.”
A giant jack-o’-lantern ROARS!
“He’s bigger than ten dinosaurs!”
He chases me—I’m tired, afraid.
A rooster crows as bright stars fade.
To my relief, it’s nearly day—
The huge squash, groaning, rolls away.
In bed, I try hard not to snore,
And morph into a kid once more.
I laugh. “Mom, if you only knew
On Halloween night what I do!”
I love this story! Good luck Paul!!
Yes. Mom is better off not knowing!
Oops! Sorry I put my submission in the comments of your story, Paul! I have since put mine in the right place, and sorry about that! Nice job and good luck!!
This is wonderful! Good luck!
So much fun!
Great rhyme and the last 2 lines are my favorite!
I love the opening line “The moon grins like a Cheshire Cat!” Brilliant!
What a fun Halloween adventure! Good job and good luck.
ENTRY POSTED FOR PAUL
I Scare You, You Scare Me
by Paul Kurtz
I scare you,
You scare me,
We’re a monster family.
With a great big howl and a shriek from me to you,
Won’t you shriek and scare me too?
Scaring is such a treat—
Folks flee fast on flying feet!
Slither, fly, crawl, gallop, swim or run—
Halloween is loads of fun!
I scare you,
You scare me,
We’re a monster family.
With a great big howl and a shriek from me to you,
Now let’s scare each other—
Did you hear me singing? (Although I didn’t know how the tune to the middle verse went.) But fun piece.
A Halloween song! Clever!
So fun to sing along with!
Won’t you shriek and scare me too? – Such a great Halloween take on the original!
So fun to sing along! Nicely done.
Very, very clever, Paul! Excellent job!
Cleverly put together entry. So fun to read. Good luck in the contest!
Spiders vs. Snakes
by Linda Schueler
Spiders sneaking down the street
Snakes slithering, the elite
What happens when the two meet?
Snakes and spiders whip out cleats
For the 3rd annual Halloween Scary Soccer Meet!
Who’ll be slinking away in defeat?
Score! And score! And score again!
And one more time…
It’s a tie!
Snakes and spiders take a seat
Snakes and spiders join teams; how sweet!
And as one they sneak and slither down the street
Snakes and spiders sing “Trick or treat!”
Now that is quite the event to imagine–snakes and spiders playing soccer! Fun.
Very original! I’d like to see a soccer game with snakes and spiders.
So enjoyed it Linda – can just imagine the game that would take place.
“The 3rd annual Halloween Scary Soccer Meet” – It gets me very interested in knowing the results of previous Meets! And who they will be playing next year!
Very original! Love the idea of spiders and snakes in soccer cleats! Funny.
Pot of the Witch
By Reed Ambrose
Wiggling, giggling, walk!
The witch rolled out her pot!
It’s what she did
To scare the kids.
Wiggling, giggling, walk!
Snippety, clippety, chop!
The witch cut up a lot:
A hair, a bean,
And something green!
Snippety, clippety, chop!
Slippery, slithery, plop!
The witch filled up her pot!
The snake slid in
And lost its skin.
Slippery, slithery, plop!
Snaggletooth, babble-poof, wah?!
The witch stirred in her pot:
A caw, a purr,
A magic word!
Snaggletooth, babble-poof, wah?!
Trickery, trick-or-treat, knock!
The witch served up her slop!
She spooned it in
Their pails of tin.
Trickery, trick-or-treat, yuck!
I love the alliteration at the beginning and end of the stanzas.
Soooo much fun to read. So active!
What fun language you used! I had to read it out loud. Although I did get a little tongue-tied on the second to last stanza. Well done.
Thanks for the kind words and the feedback.
What a fun story to read. Well done!
This reminds me of Hickory Dickory dock, which is great for a sing-along.
A clever take on “Hickory Dickory Dock.” Kiddos would have such fun listening and repeating the creative text(babble-poof!).
Loved the alliteration. What an interesting tale of witch and potion
This is such fun. Alliteration always appeals to me and I know it will appeal to children too. It’s got a great rhythm and begs readers/listeners to join in.
Thanks for the kind words, Norah!
My pleasure, Reed.
So funny! Well done!
Thank you, Deborah!
Such a fun take on a familiar rhythm! The final line change to Yuck is PERFECTION!
I appreciate that, Royal!
Love your inventive words. I think kids will love to hear this over and over! Good luck!
Thank you Nancy!
This was so much fun to read!
Such catchy verse – Hickory Hickory Dock a la Halloween
SNAKE IN THE GRASS
Judy Sobanski – 99 words
See the house at the end of the street?
Take a risk for a Halloween treat?
There’s a snake in that yard,
that you can’t disregard,
and, trust me, you don’t want to meet.
See it slither around all the trees?
A Constrictor, the type that will squeeze,
‘til your eyeballs bulge out,
and you’ve no breath to shout,
“Let GO of me snake! Pretty please?”
Are you scared? Are you starting to shake?
Then run away now from that snake!
it’s an old garden hose.)
Now the treats are all mine to partake! WOOOHWAAAAA!!!
I can totally see someone’s brother doing this!
Love the Hickory-Dickory-Dock feel. And the WOOOHWAAAA!
Love this. Beware of snakes! Especially shrewd ones.
Ha ha ha! You had me going there for a while!
Wicked fun! Great ending.
A nasty trick, but he won. Good luck!
This is a hilarious serving of NOSTALGIA! It brings back the true Halloween scares of Trick or Treating! A real slice of life story!
Hahaha! Old garden hose, love it! Nicely done!
Fun limerick entry here. I like that form of poetry. Good luck!
Beware or be Scared
by Norah Colvin
Nathara expected her ginormous jelly Poisonous Pythons, individually sealed for hygiene safety, to make the children’s eyes POP! And they did. Laced, through the fence the treats were irresistible. Children ignored the “BEWARE” sign. They failed to read the small print “Open only after midnight.” They didn’t flinch when Nathara laughed, “Mwahahaha!” and found no reason to be scared when she hissed, “Enjoy eating children!” They couldn’t wait to tuck into the squishy, sweet, stickiness of the enormous Poisonous Pythons and ripped the seals apart. Nathara’s slippery servants slithered free and wrapped the trick-or-treaters in their squishy sweet stickiness.
Well they may not have been wary, but I am scared for them!
And justifiably so. Thank you for your comment. 💖👻🐍
Scary!…and wrapped the trick-or-treaters in their squishy sweet stickiness
It was meant to be scary. Funny scary though. Not too scary I hope. Thank you for commenting.
I love creepy critters so, it wasn’t too scary but just right.
Thank you, Eleanor. That’s so kind of you.
Oh my goodness I will never eat jelly snakes again! Hahahaha! I love it!
I’m pleased the story was both scary and humorous. Thank you for enjoying it.
Always beware of Poisonous Pythons. I find that to be a good rule of thumb, especially on Halloween night. Scary and funny at the same time. Love the small print note. Great fun!
Thank you for your comments. I’m pleased you liked the small print. I agree with your about Poisonous Pythons. 😉😂
This is AMAZING! From the double alliteration in the name of her slippery servants, to the written warnings Nathara (in all fairness) delivers, and finally the double meaning of her “enjoy eating children,” this Halloween tale is a DELIGHT! I love it! Well done, Norah!
Thank you so much, Royal, for your generous words. Your comment has made my day. I’m so pleased you noticed all those little things I added. Even more so that you enjoyed it. 😊👻🐍
Creepy, slithery, and scary! Naughty Nathara. I hope the kids found a way to escape!
Thank you for reading and commenting, Nancy.
Hi Nancy, Did you enter a story? I’ve had a look through but couldn’t see one. Would you mind linking to it, if you did, so I can read it please.
Not this year, I’m busy Illustrating my 3rd picture book that I’m self publishing. I love all of Susanna’s contests and try to comment on all the entries if I have time!
Illustrating your third picture book is exciting. I wish you success with it. Susanna is amazing. You’re amazing too. There are so many entries to read and comment on. I’ve been reading as many as possible, but no where near all of them. I am impressed by the quality, even more than the quantity.
So spooky! Love the cautionary tale of failing to read the fine print.
Thank you, Karen. I’m pleased you enjoyed it.
Bat’s First Halloween
Baby bat pricks her ears.
Crunch, chirp, buzz-ing below.
Ant, cricket, mosquito —
Treats, not tricks. Do not fear!
Explore the forest floor.
Strange creatures knock and ring.
Eyes shut, to mama cling.
Squirrel zombie opens door!
Squeak! Mama, please, go home!
Slithering, slurping …
Scary noises nearing—
Slugs sipping pumpkin foam!
So much heard and seen!
Soothing song, misty hug,
A bite of candy bug,
Happy first Halloween!
I do believe you have weaved some bat facts into your Halloweensie story. Well done. And sleep tight little bat.
I can sense how baby bat is feeling—but mama’s there (and candy bugs). A sweet tale with a soothing ending.
Mother love, sweet!
I love the sounds of the forest floor as “strange creatures knock and ring!” A perfect description of night sounds in nature that parallel trick or treating so well!
Very creative! Love your word choices and I have a soft spot for baby bats. Good luck!
What wonderful experiences for baby bat on his first Halloween. So many sights and sounds.
Children of the Bog
By Melissa Miles
adults of Reaper’s Bog
beseech their children
to stay close for trick-or-treating.
For every Hallows-Eve, a lone child
is swallowed up by the bog,
and the terrifying creatures within.
Do they slither, scamper, or snatch?
Growl, grimace, or gnaw?
No child’s ever returned to tell.
Betsy Braveheart isn’t scared.
Stuffing her princess costume
behind a tree, she pulls a slingshot
from her pocket,
creeps to swamp’s edge…
At dawn, only her costume’s recovered.
She’s joined the bog children.
Betsy’s scribbled note,
roughly jammed into a gnarled tree’s hole,
“They were human once too!”
Nice twist putting the note into the tree, but poor Betsy!
Poor Betsy, at least she had the time to leave a note.
If only someone had noticed. 😦
You can fix that when you write your next picture book, right!
Oooooohhhh! This one is eerie! Nice job.
Poor Betsy! Or does she like it with the bog children?
Maybe she does! 🙂 She’s a bit of a rebel after all.
Love the fright factor you’ve created with so few words!
Thank you so much!
This is PHENOMENAL story-telling! It draws us right in to the mysterious disappearances of Reaper’s Bog! And poor brave Betsy! I would love to hear more! EXCELLENT WORK!
Thank you so much! I love trying to create a true story with so few words. Appreciate the feedback!
Scary . . . I like it!
In Through My Window (a monorhyme)
By Eric Sondergeld
In through my window on Halloween night
They slithered, they crawled, some even took flight
So big and scary they gave me a fright
They ate all my treats, oh how impolite!
I wrestled them hard, with all of my might
But that didn’t stop them at all … not quite
Could it be that they’re afraid of the light?
I jumped out of bed and turned one on bright
Boy was I lucky, because I was right
They flew out the window, what a great sight!
From now on I’ll shut my window at night
Very tight!! And maybe even sleep with the lights on!!
Lovely and scary!
Thank you Eleanor Ann. I’m not sure which adjective I prefer! I’ll have to go with scary, at least for this contest!
You can always change it in the next draft. Lovely as in, I enjoyed reading it although it was a tid-bit scary.
This gave me such vivid brain pictures! And eating your treats ~ how rude!
I know, right?
Eating all the treats?! Good thing a solution was found!
That’s hard to do, well done with the monorhyme!
Superb use of monorhyme and so perfect the way you left “they” unnamed, leading readers to conjure up their worst fears. And treat stealing…that’s the worst! Very creative, Eric! Best of luck in the contest.
Thanks Jill! Yes, I was hoping readers would fill in the blanks with their imagination.
I love the bravery of your main character! Wrestling the intruders despite being frightened!
Didn’t I mention there was candy at stake?
Nice job with the rhyme and the story. I’m keeping my windows shut tight too!
I think that’s great advice. I’ll follow suit.
A Squishy Scare – (Please use this version, thanks)
By Stephanie Henson 2022
Children at the Halloween Faire eat their way through sweet and salty treats.
From within the core of the last candy apple, a wriggly worm resides.
Unsuspected and undetected, the tainted fruit sparkles and speaks to the costumed crowd,
One order away from impending doom.
Scooped off the shelf, the apple is shared.
Smiles turn to frowns as the caramel winds down,
Two children fight over the last bite with sticky fingers.
Pushing and prying, smooshing and crying,
The glistening apple plummets toward the ground—
Cracked open wide, the worm slithers out unbothered.
A squishy scare averted!
Whew! Great use of internal rhyme!
“Smiles turn to frowns as the caramel winds down” – an all-too-familiar feeling with Candy Apples!
Glad the worm and the children escape unscathed! Good job!
ENTRY POSTED FOR JANET
The Last House
by Janet Smart
THE LAST HOUSE
“Are you sure this is the right place?”
My brother and I slithered down the spooky path to the last house of our trick or treat travels.
Ghosts dangled from tree limbs.
Spooky jack o lanterns’ eyes burned bright.
The porch light flickered.
We trod up the squeaky steps, one by one.
A witch cackled and stirred a creepy cauldron filled with candy.
“I’m glad we saved this house for last.”
“Boo!” yelled Grandpa from behind the door. “Did we scare you?”
“How do you like my outfit?” cackled the wicked witch.
“Grandma! Is that you?”
This is also posted on my blog at
Creative Writing in the Blackberry Patch
Grandpa and grandma joining in the Halloween fun. Now that was a creepy surprise!
Thanks. Grandparents can be fun!
Nice twist at the end.
So not so wicked of a witch after all!! Cute ending.
Thanks, Colleen. She can’t be too wicked with a cauldron full of candy.
I LOVE the visual of a witch stirring a cauldron filled with candy! This is something I would have LOVED seeing as a trick-or-treater! A beautifully festive scene!
Thanks! I’d like to have seen that as a child, too.
Haha! Grandparents are the best! (If I do say so, myself!)
They sure are!
Jack-O-Lantern by Darcee A. Freier
Pirates, skeletons, and zombies are out tonight. I shiver on the porch stoop.
My glowing eyes and toothy grimace don’t keep the hordes away. They climb the steps, pound upon the door, and demand treats.
I’m scared, but I cry, “Boo!” No one notices. I holler, “Beware!” No one hears.
But below, in the bushes, something slithers.
“Eek!” I shriek. My light flames out. I shake so hard I tumble down the stairs, roll under the leaves and see …
a mouse? She scurries in though my grin and curls up.
Hidden and safe, we wait out Halloween. Together.
Imaginative. I’m glad Jack-O-Lantern and mouse found each other.
I’m happy she managed to hide with a friend. Good luck!
I love that you are telling this from the pumpkin’s perspective. And your images make me smile, as well as the Jack-o-lantern crying out boo and beware.
Great POV, Darcee. So glad Jack and Mouse have each other.
Aw! I love the sweet ending!!!
I really enjoy this simple, heart-warming tale of unexpected solace from Halloween scares! BEAUTIFUL personification work!
Aww, sweet ending! Never thought about how the jack o lantern feels! Nice!
ENTRY POSTED FOR JILL
Thank you, Susanna, and prize donors for sponsoring this fun contest!
Here is my entry:
By Jill Lambert
Scary season is upon us.
Victor Vulture is my name.
My bony beak is quite unique,
sensing dead things is my game.
For Halloween, a treat that slithers.
I’ve been soaring hard today.
Something rich before I roost…
perhaps a carrion puree.
Egads! I grossed you out a bit.
Roadkill dining is a feat.
My stupendous stomach acid
thwarts diseases on the street.
Can you now appreciate
services that I provide?
I’ll resume my twilight quest:
gooey goodies, putrified.
Beak-a-boo, I smell you,
rotten zombie down below!
I’m not used to meals moving.
Here I come, I hope you’re slow!
That is so much fun! Love the ending. Well done!
I’m glad you enjoyed it, Laura! Thank you for reading and commenting!
How funny with that surprise ending. I like how you weave nonfiction in there. So fun, Jill!
Thank you, Ashley! I’m glad you liked it. Your entry was fun, too!
I love this! So well done. The facts are effortlessly woven into the tale with humor and voice. A carion puree. Fun! That made me laugh.
Aww, thank you, Corine, for reading and commenting.
Original! I like how you include facts about scavengers. Well done – Beak-a-boo, I smell you…
Yes, I have kind of a thing about vultures. We have a kettle of vultures (another vulture fact) that roosts in the vicinity. Once I had the title, I had to go there! Thank you for reading and commenting!
Aren’t scavengers amazing! Wishing you the best of luck!
This is so clever and fun to read – and perfectly gross for Halloween.
Love your comment–in rhyme! Thanks so much, Elenore!
A bit of vulture facts woven into your wonderfully gruesome story. Love the ending! Great work Jill.
I’m glad you liked it, Colleen. Thank you for reading and commenting!
Wow, Jill! Love all of the amazing words you got in this one! Great job! My favorite line is- ‘Something rich before I roost… perhaps a carrion puree.’ Well done!
A little gross, but I was giggling when I wrote that one, Michelle! Thanks so much for your support!
Excellent story and rhyming. And vultures are so, well, Halloweensie! Good luck!
Thank you for reading and commenting, Eric! Good luck to you as well!
Love this, a vulture is such a perfect Halloween main character! Great play on words, Beak-a-boo, putrified, such perfect word choices throughout.
I’m glad you enjoyed it, Polly! Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
A FANTASTIC closing stanza, set up from the very beginning! What a clever and unique way to draw nature into Halloween! I LOVE it!
Thank you, Royal. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Love it! Victor’s doing his best to clean up the roadkill! Nice working the biology into your story.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Nancy!
ENTRY POSTED FOR BRITTANY
Jackie Saves Halloween
By Brittany Richman
First Lady Jackie Kennedy dressed to impress.
Chanel suits . . .
were absolute PERFECTION!
But Jackie attracted a crowd.
And on Halloween that posed a problem—a BIG problem. How could she
Take her children trick-or-treating?
Make them feel normal?
Enjoy a peaceful evening?
Jackie’s mind churned with ideas. Then she got to work.
Then she slithered right in . . . slipped on gloves . . . and strapped on boots.
Not too scary.
In fact, absolute PERFECTION!
No one would suspect Jackie in THAT.
Until . . .
“Hey, is that Secret Service?”
It must be wonderful for famous people to disguise themselves and join in the Halloween fun.
It’s tough to be a celebrity. Well done!
Ha ha ha. You just can’t get away from them, but good job trying Mom.
I like your use of alliteration in Jackie’s costume preparations!
What a unique Halloween tale. I want to know if Jackie actually did this and if so, you should turn this into a picture book!
That’s funny. It would be difficult to not be noticed when security is tight around you.
Interesting . . . I liked your use of the word PERFECTION for Jackie in couture close and about the Halloween costume that was made
Promptly at the stroke of dark, Mr. Slither hobbled outside.
He would take care of those little hooligans.
Pumpkin orange spilled across his yard.
He flipped a switch.
The lifeless mess buzzed, crackled, and slowly pushed up to loom high overhead—
it’s gaping mouth set to gobble up scared passersby!
News of the monstrosity traveled fast.
Trick-or-treaters bravely approached.
The old man listened to each time-honored plea and grunted, “Enter.”
As each stepped into the fray, shadows lurched and shivered.
Would they survive?
Mr. Slither smiled.
Screams would tell happy stories of Halloween tumbles in the Pumpkin Pounce bouncy house.
Very much a treat. Great job with this line: “The lifeless mess buzzed, crackled, and slowly pushed up to loom high overhead.” I can clearly see the bounce house coming to life.
An unexpected reveal at the end! I LOVE your opening and closing sentences! Very visual!
Great fun in the bouncy house. Good job!
LITTLE VAMPIRE’S FIRST HALLOWEEN
by Sharon Dalgleish
I’m going on a treat hunt.
I’m going to get some good ones.
What a creepy night.
I’m not a scaredy bat.
Tumble over tombstones.
Hide from the gargoyles.
Watch out for witches.
Swoop past the werewolves.
Zigzag through the zombies.
Slither with the space slugs.
Jump over Jack-o’-Lantern.
Hang from the haunted house.
Reach into treat bowl …
Back away quickly.
Hang from the haunted house.
Jump over Jack-o’-Lantern.
Slither with the space slugs.
Zigzag through the zombies.
Swoop past the werewolves.
Watch out for witches.
Hide from the gargoyles.
Tumble over tombstones.
Slam the coffin shut!
This is so clever. Effective use of repetition with a garlic punch in the middle. Surprisingly bat-like. I love it. Good luck!
Poor little vampire bat. Fun!
Yes, poor batty got quite a shock!
Fun turning point, repetition and action in your story. I am glad the little vampire made it home safely.
Thank you! It’s such a fun challenge!
Darling, seasonal variation on “Beat Hunt.” Spooky fun!
Thank you! Bear Hunt is just so much fun to read, isn’t it?!
That is such a fun story, Sharon. I like the way you have innovated on but changed ‘Going on a Bear Hunt’ and made it your, or the vampire’s, own. I always enjoy alliteration and you’ve used it well.
Thanks so much for reading, Norah. And for your feedback!
My pleasure, Sharon.
“Tumble over tombstones!” I LOVE this festive turn of phrase!
Ohhh thank you!
Great job going on the treat hunt. Glad the little vampire made it back safely. Good job!
Thanks for stopping by to read!
Will little vampire be back next year for a second try? Your story also solved a mystery for me. Apparently the ability to transform into a bat must be an adult vampire thing. Otherwise, I’m sure little vampire would’ve fluttered back to the coffin. Nice job and good luck!
Ha! Thanks for reading and commenting…love it!
Franny Fruit Bat’s Friendly Halloween
By Amy LaMae Brewer
Franny woke up with the moon on Halloween.
Franny did not want to be scary.
“I want to have a friendly Halloween,” she said smiling through the night.
She flew to Oren Owl’s house to read him a book.
She played hide and seek with the Bilby brothers.
She decorated her tree with friendly carved pumpkins.
She waited for Cynthia Snake to slither first for cake.
Franny wrapped special treats for everyone on Halloween.
When the sun came up Franny said, “And to all, a good day.”
Then she wrapped in her wings and went to sleep.
Happy Friendly Halloween!
This is so sweet. I love the title.
Thanks for reading!
I like Franny. Her calm, confident, and friendly manner shines through. She’s in charge of her destiny.
Thanks for the nice thoughts. I will use them some day for a pitch.
I love the heart of Franny. Way to follow through on your friendly Halloween little bat.
Thanks for the kind thoughts!
I love your first sentence! We have all heard “woke up with the sun,” it is SO FUN to have you turn that phrase on its head in a Halloween story! Beautifully done!
Thanks for noticing and giving your kind thoughts.
What a sweet, friend-filled story. Nicely done.
So kind of you to say so.
CHICKEN’S FIRST HALLOWEEN
by Emma Hay
Chicken was a Kitten, who was not very brave.
If he felt a scare, he would always hide away!
Until one dreadful night, he could not flee in fright.
There where monsters banging at his door!
And was that a vet he just saw?
Through Chicken’s house they would soon slither and creep!
Laughing and stomping and calling out trick or treat!
Chicken took a deep breath. The time was now!
He flashed sharp teeth and let out a mighty howl!
It worked! The monsters disappeared, Chicken thought in shock!
Or so it seemed, until he heard another Knock, Knock!
You keep being brave Chicken! I enjoyed the humor in this story Emma. Well done.
Thank you! This story was inspired by my real cat, Chicken.
Ha ha. Very cool.
Cute, I love the last stanza.
I like that the monster Chicken clearly identifies is a VET! Priceless!
Thank you! I had a lot of fun writing that line!
Aww, brave little Chicken. Cute story. Good luck!
Chicken is a great name for a kitten who’s not very brave. He did learn to be brave though. Especially when he thought he saw the vet. 🙂
I like Franny. Her calm, confident, and friendly manner shines through. She’s in charge of her destiny.
Moldy Mayhem (99 words)
By Sue Lancaster
As the sun slithered low, and the day turned to night,
Meg and her maggot mates squealed with delight.
“A hollowed-out pumpkin!”
“So rotten and sweet!”
“This moldy old flesh is our favorite treat!”
They wriggled inside and savoured their feast,
but soon were disturbed by a big, scary…
The maggots shrieked: “Aaaaaaargh!”
The beast blurted: “Eeeeewwww!”
Then inside his wolf mask, a grin slowly grew.
“This maggot-filled lantern, surrounded by flies,
will easily win me the best-pumpkin prize!”
He scooped up the carcass, and squirming inside,
Meg and her mates…
went along for the ride!
I love the rhyme and flow of this story, one of my favourites!
Fun rhymes and gruesome details!
This is so much fun! Love the ending image and the great word choices throughout. I love “as the sun slithered low.”
Not fair playing the maggot card…they’re so hard to beat! Good luck!
This is fun! Love the last lines— Meg and her mates… went along for the ride!
This is great – the meter is so smooth and the language fun and descriptive, it was a joy to read. I love the maggot mates!
Creepy, gross and totally fun! Loved it!
You nailed the eeeewwww factor of a pumpkin past its prime, Sue! Maggots and mold and a wolf, oh my–along with perfect rhyme and meter. This is terrific!
A maggot is a perfect main character for a Halloween story!
Love, He scooped up the carcass and, Thos moldy old flesh us our favorite treat! Just the right amount of gross! Nicely done!
Eeeeewwww! alright. I hope he did win the prize and that it was worth the discomfort. 🙂
Jessie flailed in the churning ocean.
Eel slithered past, hissing, “Sea Monster, you glow in this moonlight.”
“Dahling,” crooned Octopus. “You look horribly monstrous! Join our aquatic, haunted Halloween parade.”
“A devilish treat that you’re here, Monster,” squeaked Squid.
Jessie sobbed. “Don’t call me ‘Monster’! I’m a branch. Or I was until…
Oh, I’ll never escape this watery grave!”
“Go with the flow,” cackled Clownfish. “The two-legs will choose you as the scariest sea creature and pluck you from the waves like driftwood. No joke!“
Feeling less waterlogged, Jessie floated, practiced sea-monster moves, and dreamt of sunny shores.
I’m glad Clownfish made Jessie feel less waterlogged. Happy Halloweensie.
Ha ha. Thank goodness for supportive sea-friends!
I enjoyed this one! Love the unique setting and characters, as well as the magical ending line.
Love this twist on driftwood, Patricia.
Great driftwood story Patricia!
Haha, poor Jessie. What a cool take on driftwood. Well done.
I love the characterization of the Octopus! “Dahling!” And clownfish referencing humans as “the two-legs” is hilarious world-building!
It took me a moment to “catch your drift.” I hope Jessie finds her sunny shore.
ENTRY POSTED FOR BRIGID
A Halloween Lullaby
by Brigid Finucane 100 words
Masks on tight.
Into the night
Whose steps come near?
Are there monsters here?
Goblins prowling, black cats yowling,
Creaky doors groan and sigh.
Werewolves bay to the moon, “awhoo!”
A Halloween lullaby.
Who slithers near?
Are there monsters here?
Witches scary, ghostie, fairy,
“Trick or treat!” children cry.
Knock the door, ring the bell, oh my!
A Halloween lullaby.
Who shivers near?
Are there monsters here?
We’re at your
Eyes closed tight,
Into our dreams
I like the idea of a Halloween lullaby. Nice for the little ones. If monsters were at my door, though, I wouldn’t be able to go to sleep. If they’d just left, well, that’s more relaxing.
Thank you for writing. Very appreciated. My intent is that costumed children are at the door, and indeed that the sounds of trick and treating on Halloween are a fun kind of scary! Blame it on the word, “slither,” lol!
I too like the idea of a Halloween lullaby, but this one is a little spooky…until they get tucked in bed.
Thank you, Colleen. Writing this brought me back to my childhood, going out with neighborhood friends, where every sound made us jump then roar with laughter (between bites of snickers). It was so fun to go out into the dark, (6 o’clock is as dark as midnight!) and wonderful to go home into the light and warmth.
That sounds awesome Brigid.
I love that this is a little scary and very sweet–the perfect Halloween lullaby! Best of luck to you!
That you, Jen! So appreciated. Susanna’s contests are always so fun, and it’s great to read all these themed-stories in one fell (witchy) swoop!
I love your lullaby! But how to sleep after all that sugar! hahahaha
Ha! Spoken like a real grown-up! Lol (and thank you!)
Great idea – A Halloween Lullaby and I like how your first and last lines connect. Good luck.
Thank you, Elinore! We now live in a neighborhood where no one comes trick and treating, and we miss that connection. Mining memories was a sweet treat.
This is fun and a bit spooky. Great rhythm.
As a (retired but missing it) music teacher, I so appreciate your comment about rhythm, Deborah. Thank you!
I love the idea that the sounds of trick or treaters are a kind of Halloween Lullaby! “Sweet delight.” The perfect end to a Halloween Lullaby as “into our dreams we go.” I simply love your opening and closing stanzas!
Thank you! So appreciated!
This is such a kind community.
I really like your lullaby. Very creative and not too scary for little ones. Nicely done!
Even on a scary night, it’s good to have a lullaby to bring sweet dreams. Thanks for sharing your story.
Love the lullaby, but this one may not lull them to sleep but into nightmares, with sugar-infused veins while images of black cats, ghosts, and monsters dance in their heads. Good luck!
A Halloween Lullaby – How clever! I especially loved the image created of werewolves baying as a Halloween lullaby:-)
ENTRY POSTED FOR LISA
By Lisa Lowe Stauffer
Last Halloween, we peppermints were left behind, stored in a cabinet.
This year our tricky plan will make sure we’re treats.
Whee! Into the bowl with candy corn, chocolates, and boxed jellybeans.
Our plan: Scare up costumes . . .
They jump so high it knocks their boxes off.
“Oops, sorry,” we fib, then wiggle-slither inside the empty boxes.
Tiny Batman grabs US!
We party in the bag as he trick-or-treats along the street.
Our flaps open. Shaka-shake . . . Thunk!
We’re shoved into a cabinet.
Drat! Stored again!
Oh No! Poor peppermints. Who wants to be stuck in a cabinet for ONE YEAR.
Ha ha. Poor peppermints. Maybe some adult will find them and consume them.
I love seeing Halloween from the perspective of unwanted candy! Great job.
Sounds like the peppermints got their “just desserts”!
Aw! Maybe the peppermints will get remembered again at Christmas! LOL
Such a fun & funny entry! Love that you told it from the Peppermints’ POV.
Hahaha! I love your clever, resourceful peppermints! They are bound to get eaten eventually!
Could be worse, they could be candy corn! Perhaps they’ll get used to decorate a gingerbread house for Susanna’s holiday story contest! That would cheer them up! Nice job!
ENTRY POSTED FOR DONNA
by Donna Kurtz
“Lisa, this spooky house will have great treats—read that sign.”
HALLOWEEN PARTY – WELCOME
We enter. “Danny, this is a bad idea—”
“What’s that scary noise? Danny, let’s go—”
The floor tilts.
The back wall crumbles—humongous teeth grind.
I grab the door knob. “Locked!”
We slide forward.
“NOOO—” Danny shrieks.
Clutching a broom, I tickle the ceiling.
The door explodes open, hurling Danny and me onto the lawn—
Slithering like a worm, the house disappears.
“See that?” Danny gasps.
I shudder. “Next Halloween, we go to a movie!”
Scary! A movie sounds good.
Yikes!! What kind of a spooky house was that?? So glad they escaped.
That was no house!! A great reveal.
What a fantastical Halloween monster! I wonder how many kids weren’t as lucky as Lisa and Danny….
Holy molars, that was a scary house! Glad they escaped. Fun story!
ENTRY POSTED FOR DONNA
by Donna Kurtz
“Halloween’s here,” sighs Blue Fairy.
“No one ever thinks I’m scary.”
Drinking Witchie’s brew makes changes—
Fairy morphs and rearranges.
Werewolf-Fairy’s scary tricksies
Frighten gremlins, elves, and pixies.
Zombie-Fairy’s fluids spatter—
Trolls and ogres shriek and scatter.
When she slithers like a snakey,
Screaming goblins leap in lakey.
Fanged Bat-Fairy swooping, gliding—
Ghosts and monsters running, hiding!
Franken-Fairy scares the ghoulies—
Mummies jump in ponds and poolies.
At a party, morphed disguises
Wins thrilled Fairy treats and prizes!
Heading home she’s yawning, sleepy—
Shifting shadows dark and creepy.
Charging monsters make her shiver—
Scaredy-Fairy jumps in river!
There’s a lot going on in 96 words. Well done for that. This must be a delight to illustrate. I love the idea of Halloween fairies.
Now that is some transformation!!
Wonderful story! I love the new word forms. If you’re going so snakey, why not lakey!
What fun, imagining a fairy into all of these scary versions! Though it’s nothing like it, really, it reminds me of the book Halloween Mice.
That “Witchie’s brew” was one crazy cocktail! A Halloween Hurricane!
What a lot of changes for one little fairy! Glad she had her Halloween fun. Nice job!
This is fun. I only hope she’s going to be okay in the river. Love all the rhymes. It would be fun to read aloud to children.
ENTRY POSTED FOR CAROLE
By Carole Gerber
Hank, a barnyard rooster, and his girlfriend, Geraldine,
are hosting a dance party at the coop this Halloween.
“Slither slow,” Hank chortles.
“Shake a leg!” clucks Geraldine.
“There’s a treat for the best costume at our hop this Halloween!”
A ballerina chicken struts by in her tutu.
“Great outfit!” Hank announces. “Your shoes are darling, too.”
A scary yellow chicken wears fangs that drip fake blood.
Geraldine shouts: “Gruesome! That outfit is a dud.”
After seeing all the costumes, the two announce their pick:
The winner wears her birthday suit—
she’s a newborn chick!
Ha ha! Hooray for the chick!
This story is so sweet. I love the newborn chick. Good luck.
Ha! Ha! So funny. And I guess “understated” wins every time, right? Go, little chick!
I’ll bet the chick hops well, too!!
I love the detail that Hank and Geraldine are hosting the party “at the coop!”
Very cute! I like the idea of a Halloween Hop! Love the ending. Good luck!
I love the ending. Why shouldn’t a newborn chick wear her birthday suit. 😊
By Krista Legge
Patrick’s mom had a special Halloween surprise.
Patrick’s eyes shot open, the darkness blanketed his room.
“Hellooooo,” his voice quivered.
Click Clack, Click Clack!
“Is someone there?” squeaked out of Patrick’s throat.
Scared was an understatement. Patrick felt terror slither through his body.
He sat straight up, his blanket being pulled from his bed.
Leaning over to turn on his light, he felt warmth growing near his face.
The light clicked on and ….
SLURP!! There, nose to nose with Patrick, was a tiny, furry puppy.
Patrick’s mom giggling in the doorway, “Happy Halloween! Hope you like your treat”
Wow! What a treat – a puppy. That is one lucky Patrick.
Gotta watch those Halloween puppies. They turn to Werepuppies at night and get very hungry…
Those Halloween puppies are pretty scary, huh?? A fun twist on the monster stories!
Haha, wow! A puppy is so adorable. Unless it was in the dark…and you didn’t know it! Hilarious!
Awwww – A puppy treat on Halloween 🙂
Sara’s Hairy Halloween
By Jesse Anna Bornemann
Word Count: 100
Sara watched the sun slither lower behind the Fangworths’ garage. “I’ve made a mistake,” she thought.
“Who vants pizza?” announced Mrs. Fangworth.
“Meee! Thanks, Mom!” squealed Vicki.
“Save room for blood-orange cake! Special treat for a Halloween birthday!”
Sara glanced at her knuckles as she grabbed a slice. Was that fur? Were her teeth pointier? She’d been looking forward to her best friend’s sleepless sleepover for weeks, but Vicki had never seen her after dark. Werewolves scare everybody—even vampires.
The cake glowed. “Happy birthday, dear Vicki,” Sara sang. “Happy birthday to…A-ROOOOO!”
Vicki shrieked. “…can we play hair salon next??”
I like the idea of a sleepless sleepover, especially on Halloween. No need to be self-conscious around good friends, right? Though this is potentially a complicated friendship 😉 Hair salon sounds like fun, until sunrise.
Thank you! I figured sleepless sleepovers are perfect for vampires — hopefully for werewolves too!
These characters have some really terrific names! 🙂 A sleepless sleepover is a fun idea, and the way you worked in the human-to-werewolf transformation was genius. Hair salon – what a great way to put a positive (paws-itive??) spin on the night!
Clearly my closest friendships have worked their way into my subconscious. ❤
This is so much fun! Love that it’s a sleepless Halloween sleepover!
Thank you, Sarah! I don’t know what’s scarier — vampires, werewolves, or a 100-word writing limit!
Such a clever piece! Great work, Jesse. I love the “sleepless sleepover” idea. You could expand this one into a picture book.
Thanks, friend! I’m finally getting around to reading comments and entries. (It has been a hairy few weeks of parenting!) Looking forward to checking out your stories.
I love her transformation at the end of the song – PERFECT timing! A fantastic story showcasing the self-consciousness we all have felt, even among friends!
You are always so kind, Royal! ❤
Very clever! I love the ending. Nice job!
Thank you so much! Prose is out of my comfort zone, but I thought I’d give it a shot this time!
Scary Goat Scam
Billy and Maribelle thought it unfair
that the Halloween treats were not evenly shared.
Bored with their thistle and grass-loaded diet,
“Oh Candy” sighed Billy, “I’m eager to try it.”
They made themselves costumes to scare the town silly,
smeared mud on their beards and tossed hay willy-nilly.
They covered their horns, pinned their beards tightly down
and with eyes glaring brightly they clomped into town.
The villagers fled as their fear slithered out,
scattering treat bags and candy about.
The goats quickly gobbled the treats left behind,
“Not bad” Billie said, “But these bags taste divine!”
haha! So fun, Elenore!!! Your ending made me laugh!
Thanks Michelle – glad it made you smile.
True to the goat. Love it. Of course the bags would taste better than candy to them, but I like their resourcefulness.
Thanks Colleen – we have goats in the field next door (such a cliche for Switzerland but oh so true) and I’m sure they’re hatching a plan.
Ha ha ha!
Funny!! The bags are always the tastiest part!!
Thanks Brigid, yes they eat anything and everything!!
Oh, those goats! They have such creepy eyes that they really would make scary monsters. And they WOULD like the bags best! Great story.
Thanks for stopping and reading. Poor goats their eyes are creepy – day and night!
I KNEW they were going to eat the bags! 🙂 Love the language and the fully developed story arc–in only 97 words. The middle stanza was so visual and would be great fun to illustrate…so expand this into a picture book! Best of luck in the contest, Elenore!
Thanks Jill. These contests are so fun. The writing, the reading and the connecting.
Loved this one! Great rhyme and word choice. You managed a beginning, middle, and end, and with only 100 words to do it in, that’s commendable!
Thanks for reading and commenting Angela. Glad you liked it.
Great images here, fun rhyme, and I loved the surprise ending!
Billy and Maribelle are perfect names for goats! Now that they’ve gotten a taste for bags, I feel that the thistles and grass of the town will soon be overgrown!
so catchy this one! great rhythm and imagery!
So fun! Love the ending! Good luck!
GOULENTINE (WC 100)
By Michelle S. Kennedy
Ghoulentine wanted a mate by his side.
Someone to love— so he looked for a bride.
He searched high and low, and underneath too.
WHO would he find? He hadn’t a clue.
Slithering out, from behind an old shed,
Red steely eyes with a look of the dead…
Ah! She’s THE ONE. Love at first sight!
The wedding took place in fire that night.
Passionate flames burned every ember.
Halloween’s magic. An eve to remember.
Treats were passed out. The bride was a scare!
Goulentine beamed (and looked debonair.)
Masquerade music eerily played,
Together Forever— The ghost and decayed.
Fun, fun, fun! I love this scary love story!
Thanks so much for stopping by to read it. Glad you like it!
Love your rhyme and your love story Michelle! My favorite stanza, “Treats were passed out. The bride was a scare!/ Goulentine beamed (and looked debonair.)”
Aw! Thanks, Colleen! I love these contests since they are so great to get the creative juices flowing.
A love story for the ages! Rhythm and rhyme make this so enjoyable to read too.
Thank you for taking the time to check it out. So glad you liked it!
Debonair is a great word – and a fun, surprising rhyme with scare! Also, I love that he looks underneath. A great Halloween choice. Love it!
Thanks so much! I’m glad the rhymes were unexpected ones!!!
Fantastic title and brilliant word choices, Michelle. That last line is killer!This could be a Halloween/Valentine story! Another great entry!
Thank you, Jill! I never thought about that, but you are right— I could use this for a Valentine’s story too… I might have to do a PT. 2 for the Valentiny contest. LOL
I love this Michelle! Good luck!
what a great love story!!!
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!
You have a gift for rhyme, Michelle! So good!
Thank you, Amanda! Years of practice. LOL
This is delightfully creepy! Nicely done, Michelle. Love your title too!
Excellent job on the rhyme and meter. You created quite the macabre wedding! Best of luck to you!
haha! Thank you, Jen!
Great story Michelle. I love the bitter-sweet love story and the last line – Together Forever – The ghost and decayed (you don’t get to use decayed that often). Good luck.
Right?! Thanks for checking my story out, Elenore!
Goulentine is a GREAT name for a ghostly beau! Well done!
Super story, great rhymes and language! Kept me reading, wondering what would happen next. Great job!
That’s a love match made just for Halloween. Perfect.
Great story and rhyme! Love , “the bride was a scare.” Well done!
An enjoyable and creepy read, Michelle. Some great lines too. Good luck in the contest.
My TEACHER IS A CREATURE
By Mary Ann Cortez 94 words
My teacher is a creature.
A hungry wolverine.
I watched her transformation
take place on Halloween.
She tried a piece candy.
One bite – and madly smiled.
She scarfed down creepy cupcakes.
the sugar turned her wild.
She ransacked all our cubbies
hunting for more treats.
Sniffed through all our lunch bags.
We shivered in our seats.
She slithered down the aisles
her eyes transfixed and wide.
She flipped and went bananas!
We thought we’d better hide.
Her sugar surge expired.
A scary gruesome scene.
Don’t EVER feed a teacher
sweet treats on Halloween.
Ha ha ha! Fun rhyme, rhythm and story, with some great and terrifying details.
This is a fun STORY and it flows so well! I think it would be a hit with the kids.
A funny twist! The lure of candy is powerful!
A snake, a wolverine, a creature – fun! I good twist on sugar being a problem just for kids!
Love, love, love this. I taught for 33 years and yes, love Halloween treats just as much as the kids. Mwaaaaahhhh!
This was so well done. The rhyme was excellent and your word choices were quite fun and spooky!
I love this one! Such good rhyme and meter. Good luck!
Hysterical! Kids will love this!!!
I love this one! Great concept and well written. Good luck.
I really love this, your use of rhyme and descriptions are so imaginative I could see the story so clearly in my mind while I was reading it!
This one made me laugh out loud! Love the image of the teacher as a sugar-mad wolverine!
Love this one! Great job!
I LOVE this one! It transports me to the days of being a child! I can just HEAR a couple of my grade school teachers reading this to get us all in the Halloween spirit! I would LOVE to see this expanded and published! I would definitely want a copy! A perfect title that draws you in as well!
Thank you so much!
Awesome, love the ending! a sugar crash is truly gruesome, haha
I love how this shows that even teachers can get hyped-up on sugar. Such a fun story!
Hilarious and relatable! A well-executed and delicious treat. Chef’s kiss!
Hahaha! Great story! Love that the teacher turns into a wolverine. Rhyme is well done. Good luck!
Love these images! Hey, I think we were critique partners a long time ago. Check out mine at #140. Good luck in the contest, Mary Ann!
Thanks for stopping by and reading it. Were we crit partners? Do you remember the name of our group? How fun! I’ll check your entry out!
The Haunted House
by Karen Morgan
The rickety old place gave me the creeps.
I slunk up to the door, wood stairs creaking under my weight. My mask was doing a decent job of hiding how scared I was. If not for the dare, I wouldn’t be here. Was the treat worth it? Something slithered around the corner of the porch. A drumbeat came from my chest. Bump, thump, bump, thump. Then footsteps. A turn of the knob. A squeak, a crack, then…
gnarled hands holding out a bowl of giant-sized candy bars.
A sweet voice said, “Take two. Not many trick-or treaters tonight.”
The full-sized candy bars: the risk was worth it!!
Ha! So true, you never know which houses give the best candy. This was fun and suspenseful!
Definitely worth it! Thank goodness it turned out well.
“If not for the dare, I wouldn’t be here,” so perfectly captures a propelling element of childhood. Atmostpheric with a nice twist at the end.
Phew! Those gnarled hands had me worried. Great ending.
“Bump, thump!” The perfect sound for a heartbeat! A GREAT job building suspense! And the line “If not for the dare…” opens up a lot of excellent backstory. Very well done!
Full sized candy bars are the gold standard of treats! Great job setting the mood and creep factor. Good luck!
Trick or Treat: A Forest Halloween
by Sarah Marhevsky
Autumn leaves rustled under the rats’ paws.
“Was that a snake?” Peanut whipped around.
Berry held her prize acorn and chittered. “Just our paws. And some wind. Are you afraid of the breeze?” She blew on Peanut. “I’m not afraid of anything!”
“If I scare you, can I have your treat?”
“Not that you’ll get it, but sure.” Berry nibbled her acorn protectively.
Peanut’s hairless tail slithered; the leaves rustled again. She lifted the tip in Berry’s direction.
“Snake!” Berry dropped her acorn and fled.
Peanut snatched her prize and nibbled. “Glad to see you’re not afraid of anything!
Poor Berry and clever Peanut. LOL.
I bet Peanut is thinking, Boy that was easy! LOL
She put her tail to good use, for sure!
“She blew on Peanut.” A perfect taunt for the situation! I also like that Peanut uses her tail to imitate a snake. A very visual piece!
Thanks, Royal! My kids have pet rats, so this was a way to bring them to literary life (just a bit!).
Haha! Naughty Peanut, but very clever. Good job!
Sneaky Peanut! Such a cute fall tale (tail?). Maybe a Ladybug submission?
Oh! What a great idea, Jesse – thanks for the encouragement!
Shadows Come Crawling (100 words)
By Marlee Fuller-Morris
Every Halloween at bedtime,
As I’m about to fall asleep,
That’s when the shadows all come crawling.
Towards my bed the darkness creeps.
There’s a specter slithering by me!
There’s a phantom on my wall!
There’s a ghoul hiding in my closet!
Or am I imagining it all?
Maybe the phantom’s just my bookcase,
The specter’s a lamp upon my desk.
But at night, shadows look scary,
How will I ever get some rest?
Phew! Here comes my fearless kitty,
A defender no ghoul could ever defeat.
I can finally close my eyes now,
Tomorrow, kitty gets an extra treat.
Nothing like the comfort of our favorite pet to make us feel safe!
So atmospheric!! Kitties are definitely the perfect antidote to Halloween scariness!
Sweet kitty makes everything all better. Cute “tail.”
So cute! Great job Marlee!
We are definitely a cat household, so this one is a good match for my family: I definitely like the way this problem resolves itself!
“When the shadows all come crawling…” A perfect description of being afraid of the dark! I like the idea of a “Halloween treat” being a treat for a pet! Well done!
Kitty to the rescue! You set the scary moody very well. I used to hide under my sheets when I saw shadows in the dark too!
Sammy Snake was curled on the giant Frankenstein.
“Trick or Treat!” the kids shouted.
Sammy slithered down Frankenstein’s arm to the candy cauldron.
“Treat!” Bobby yelled. He reached into the bowl.
Sammy popped out. “Happy Halloween.” His tongue flickered.
The kids ran away.
Sammy pouted. “Why are all the kids scared of me?”
“Snakes, get a bad rap,” Charlie Cat meowed.
More kids were coming.
Sammy had an idea. He sat on the giant pumpkin.
“Trick or treat!” the kids shouted.
“Trick.” Sammy balanced some candy on his head.
The kids giggled.
“You’re the coolest snake.” They took some candy.
Well I am glad Sammy figured a way to be cool and to get the kids’ approval.
Sometimes, knowing what’s coming is better than the surprise. Sammy made a winning choice!
Thanks! Snakes can be so misunderstood. LOL
That’s one clever snake. Fun story! Very kid friendly.
Thanks so much!
Fun story, Deb!
I love wise ol’ Charlie Cat, setting the record straight! And I’m glad that Sammy found the right balance between trick and treat!
A cool snake – coached by a cool cat. I love the change in snake.
Thanks so much! Have a great day!
So glad the Sammy came up with a creative solution! Fun story!
By Polly Mendoza
Unique and clever! Good luck.
So many ways to be Jack!! Imaginative and rollicking!
So many 🙂 Thanks for reading!
This would be fun illustrated! There are lots of fun things here, like the use of vowels and the werewolf stanza. Satisfying ending, too!
I agree, illustrations would really help especially with the vowels!
This is fun! Great job!
Thanks so much!
A rollicking journey of transformation and self-worth!
Very fun to read aloud! I think kids will love to read this over and over! Good luck!
ENTRY POSTED FOR STEVE
JACK’S LAMENT by Steve Jankousky (99 words)
I sat on the porch eager for carving time.
What would I become? Sweet? Funny? Scary?
I’ve heard a good knife cuts like pumpkin butter.
But I felt scratching, clawing, and gnawing!
My tender flesh finally gave way and something slithered inside me!
I had looked forward to the gentle scraping of a kitchen spoon, but instead was treated to the painful tearing of my pulp and the greedy gnashing of my seeds.
That night, my brethren glowed with flickering candlelight, but I was unlit.
Inside my hideous gaping maw sat a plump little squirrel. Feasting on my innards.
At least the squirrel was happy!
A good knife cuts like pumpkin butter. Ha!
“My hideous gaping maw…” The perfect description of the ragged hole the pumpkin had hoped to be its mouth! “Plump little squirrel” The perfect description of a greedy squirrel! This sings of autumn! I love it!
Poor Jack! But he gave his all for the squirrel. Nice pov.
ENTRY POSTED FOR SARAH
SENSE THE WAY
Tap. Tap. Clank.
My red-and-white cane finds our garbage can.
Thunder and I turn left.
“Nice costume, Milo!”
We leave. I count steps. …twenty-eight…twenty-nine…
Sounds like Candice.
“Aren’t you scared by yourself?”
I pat Thunder. “No.”
“Happy Halloween!” She leaves.
But…I lost count.
Where are we?
Thunder tugs right.
I breathe in…cut grass…the Sanderson’s just mowed.
I listen. Main Street is behind us.
I reach out…and feel the Mahoney’s wooden fence.
Thunder is right.
Back home, Thunder slithers out of his harness.
I give him extra treats…
…and nobody sees!
I like the autonomy shown in this piece, and I am certain Milo does too. Nice use of details.
The first two lines, with sounds and a garbage can, make a good start! It takes an interesting turn, too – a new way to “see” Halloween!
I like this, Sarah! I appreciate the perspective… you did a nice job. Good luck!
This feels warm, fresh, and original, Sarah. Nicely done.
I love your onomatopoetic opening! It puts us immediately into Milo’s perspective! Very well done!
Nice job to have us sense Halloween in a new way. Yay to Thunder who deserves the extra treat so Milo didn’t get tricked by losing count!
ENTRY POSTED FOR CATHRENE
Slither and Hiss:
Trick or Treat?
by Cathrene Valente Youngquist
Two young snakes were ready for Trick or Treat.
Slither wore a spooky bow tie. Hiss wore a princess crown.
Each snake caught a mouse. They plopped them into their sacks.
A witch came to the door with her cauldron of treats.
“Trick or Treat!” cried the snakes.
She dropped a candy into each sack.
Slither and Hiss each pulled out a mouse. “Thank you,” they said.
“Eeek!” The witch flew away on her broom.
The treats rolled across the ground.
“Imagine that, scared of a mouse,” said Slither and Hiss.
They gathered up all the treats and headed home.
Interesting turn of events, but one that paid off for Hiss and Slither.
Your story is cute. I love that the witch is afraid of mice. Good luck
Nice twist! Slither and Hiss made out with all the treats in the end.
Oh naughty Slither and Hiss…. It sounds like they went Trick-AND-Treating.
Now that’s a clever pair. Well done.
Very clever and sneaky snakes. Cute story.
by Jennifer Weingardt
One dark Halloween night, Pumpkin Jack stood guard on the porch armed with a wicked smile and a flashy light. When creepy creatures approached for treats, he gave them a terrifying look in case they had mischief in mind.
At midnight, a shadow with a pointy hat slithered up the porch dragging a lumpy bag. Scared for his life, Pumpkin Jack put on his spookiest face.
“It’s me!” squealed a little witch as she slipped out of her costume. “I live here.”
Relieved, Pumpkin Jack gave her a goofy, toothy grin as she hugged him tight.
I love the whimsy of this! Good luck!
I love the character, Pumpkin Jack, guarding the house. Good luck.
Way to protect your house Pumpkin Jack!
I love the many faces of Pumpkin Jack! A wicked smile, a spooky face, and a goofy toothy grin!
A guardian pumpkin, I like it! Nice job!
The Peanut Butter Cup Song
by Hannah Roy LaGrone
Dashing down the street
with a pumpkin to fill up;
Hunting for one thing:
a peanut butter cup!
No lollipop will do,
No gum or fruity snacks,
I’ve fixed my eyes upon the prize—
I’m focused to the max!
|| Oh, trick-or-treat, trick-or-treat, trick-or-treat is here!
Oh what fun! It’s Halloween, the sweetest time of year. ||
A bag without this treat
Is such a scary sight.
I’ll search until it’s mine–
I’ll look around all night.
Aha! My gem appears!
I race to lock it up.
OH NO!!!! My brother slithered off
With my peanut butter cup!
(Sing along on my blog at https://wordpress.com/post/theworldasourclassroom.wordpress.com/225)
Darn that brother! What a fun adventure Hannah!
Thanks Colleen! 😂
I didn’t check your blog, but I was definitely singing along to the tune of Jingle Bells. And my daughter would approve: she traded her candy to get mostly peanut butter cups herself!!
Hooray! Wishing her a Halloween filled with them!
Truth. PB Cups rock. Good luck!
Haha thanks! Am I right or am I right?!
Great song for kids. I can hear them singing the refrain. Good luck
Thank you! I hope so!!
Sub sister for brother, and you have captured my childhood Halloweens in a peanut-buttery nutshell. Well done!
😂😂 oh no! Hope you get plenty all to yourself this year 🙂 Thanks!
Fun! Love the twist ending and the song.
I was totally singing along with this one. Well done!
Hooray! Thank you!
I loved the rhythm of this piece! What a fun song!!
Hooray!! Thank you!
Fun and clever entry! Making me hungry. I might have to raid my own candy giveaway bags to look for one.
Thanks!! Hope you had at least one left tonight! 🙂
A fun take on a Christmas classic! I loved your “trick-or-treat” refrain!
Thanks so much!!
What a fun song and who doesn’t want a peanut butter cup! Very fun!
Thank you so much! I’ll take one any day of the year!
What a great image, Sandy the snake wearing wings.
Gregory’s First Halloween
By Morgan Lau
The doorbell drummed.
Gregory sneaked and peaked around every corner.
Up then down the stairs.
Gregory slithered into the sliver of the couch when the…door…creaked…open.
The kids shrieked, “trick or treat!”
Gregory shivered with dread.
When the sound drifted, Gregory was lifted out of the couch’s crevice.
“You scaredy cat!” Gregory was snuggled with hugs until…
“bing bong! ding dong!” made Gregory’s heart race and eyes burst.
This time, it was a friend.
With a toy.
“It’s your first Halloween, Gregory!”
Gregory grimaced with bunny ears.
I wish I could have hugged Gregory to let him know everything would be okay.
This describes my son’s first Halloween perfectly! He had no idea what was happening! Lol!
I love the parting visual of Gregory grimacing in his bunny costume!
Aww, poor Gregory. So much to take in on a first Halloween.
I’m glad Gregory has good friends. Halloween can be scary.
Word Count: 97
By Ken Major
The witches schemed on Halloween.
“Let’s make the night unreal.
We’ll cast a spell on all the treats,
Then watch the kiddos squeal.”
The treats grew large and sprang to life.
They yelled, “We’ll make you pay!”
The kids turned pale at such a sight,
And bolted right away.
The nutty snacks formed angry packs
And candy corn played Taps.
The chocolate bars smashed into cars,
While others set up traps.
The candies joined to march as one.
They SLITHERED here and there,
Then harmonized a spooky chant…
“WE’RE SCARY TREATS-BEWARE!
WE’RE SCARY TREATS-BEWARE!!
WE’RE SCARY TREATS-BEWARE!!!”
I love this! Wicked witches! Unique and fun. I can picture these monster treats terrorizing the neighborhood. Scary! This is one way to stop kids eating treats. Tee-hee.
Thanks, Corine. I’ll check out your entry. Good luck!
Alas, I found it, Ken. Awesome job! I love the spooky, haunting quality this poem evokes. Perfect for Halloween.
Thanks, Sharon! Good luck in the contest! I’ll look at your entries later today.
Oh my goodness. This would be enough to have a child never want to celebrate Halloween again!! Great rhyme and rhythm.
Thanks, Colleen! Good luck in the contest!
Thank you! You too!
Love this! Nice job.
Thanks, Michelle! Good luck in the contest!
Hi Ken! I love this! The story and rhyme are too much fun 🙂 I love the image of giant candies wreaking havoc haha.
Thanks, Hayley! So appreciate you checking out my entry. Did you enter?
I love how the treats “sprang to life” and wreaked havoc everywhere! Such spooky fun! I’ll have to watch out how I treat my treats this year!
Thanks, Royal! Good luck in the contest!
Cursed candy! I like it! Great rhyme and the right amount of Halloween tricking.
Thanks, Nancy! Good luck in the contest!
Nancy, I couldn’t find your entry to return the favor of commenting on your entry. Did I just miss it on the list?
Thanks for the thought, but I didn’t enter this year. Busy with other writing projects.
Ken! This is so good! I love the rhyme…and what a great (and also, kind of terrifying) concept!!!
I love this, it has all the Halloween feels with a sweet twist!
Thank you!Good luck with your entry.
Super Scary Sausages
Super scary sausages come on this fateful night,
Here to haunt your Halloween – be careful or they’ll bite!
Super scary sausages; those horrid Halloweiners,
Dripping in tomato sauce, there’s really nothing meaner.
Super scary sausages they truly are the wurst,
They’ll eat all of your candy ‘til their bulging bodies burst!
Super scary sausages those fearful Frank-ensteins,
Slithering around the floor in slimy, snaking lines.
Super scary sausages howling at the moon,
For all our sakes let’s hope that Halloween is ending soon!
But every year the sausage carnage ends with a defeat.
Super scary sausages, a werewolf’s favourite treat!
Fun sausage word play!
This one really might be the wurst! 🙂 Lots of great puns here!
Very clever sausage phrases, and quite a unique take. I would never have thought about making up a story about scary sausages, so kudos to your imagination.
Wonderful puns & great ending!
I love all the alliteration and the twist at the end!!
A fantastic title that draws you in! INCR’EDIBLE’ wordplay throughout! I never thought I’d say this, but, thank goodness for werewolves – they saved us!
I love this. I’ve never thought of sausages at Halloween and I love all the different varieties you mention.
This is so clever. You had me at “Halloweiners” – just brilliant! And the rhythm and rhyme makes it so fun to read. Love it!
Hahaha! Maybe they need to train dachunds to fend off the sausage attack! Nothing like a weiner dog to take care of scary whiners! Good job!
By Deborah Foster
The moon is bright.
It’s time to sneak.
Down the hallway.
Stop to see.
The coast is clear.
I smirk with glee.
‘Twas a night of
With bags of treats
the night was done.
Now I creep and
A shadow’s there!
I freeze with fright!
Then a whirl!
It’s just the dog…
“You scared me, girl!”
In the kitchen
I reach the snacks
“Success!” I sigh.
Then I heard a
great big SNAP!
“I caught you Dad!
You like my trap?”
A great twist! I thought the narrator was a kid until the very end. Nicely done!!
So cute! I can picture this as a book.
Such a great job, Deborah! This is a lot of fun That ending I’m sure parents can relate to. The voice is so well done, you wouod think it was a child, I had to read it again. I can see this as a book. Good luck!
Ha ha ha! I suspect many dads and their children can relate!!
Great twist at the end!
Deb, what a fun twist! You had me tricked with that narrator. Great job!
Dad’s love Halloween snacks too. Very cute. I love the end where Dad finds out he’s busted. To make matters worse, by his own son. Embarrassing to say the least. Cute and funny.
A fun narrative voice that fools us all! Well done!
Haha! Love the twist at the end. You could have such fun illustrations for this. Nicely done!
HOW TO TRICK-OR-TREAT IF YOU’RE A SNAKE
By Abigail Mumford
My fellow friends with ssscales. Learn from my mistakesss.
(1) Craft costume. Ssstart with a sssock or an empty toilet paper roll.
(2) Make map. Choose houses with low doorbellsss.
(3) Ssscare people. However, if you dress like Gumby or a giraffe, the ssscreams won’t be as loud.
(4) Take treatsss. Note: if mice give you a bellyache, sssteer clear of those lollipopsss with gum in the middle.
(5) Consume candy. There’s no way to hold a bucket, ssso you must eat it immediately.
(6) Ssslither home. Don’t forget to brush your fangsss before bed!
Very useful advice for snakes going trick-or-treating. Fun use of the hiss sounds.
Love the unique perspective & great voicssse
A great title that draws you in! I LOVE number 2 – I like the idea of snakes using maps, but also of them making notes of which houses have low doorbells! Excellent!
You had me at ssscales…sssuch a fun read!
Very fun! Sssure to appeal to all sssnakes. Great imagination.
Hahaha – Sssage words of Halloween advice from a sssnake – Ssso clever:-)
SCACRECROWS OF HALLOWEEN
by Helen Ishmurzin
Celtic scarecrow, celebrate the night
With samhain feasts and bonfires burning bright.
Roman scarecrow, see your customs spread
With Feralia, Goddess of the dead.
Middle Ages scarecrow, time to pray
For saints and martyrs on All Hallows’ Day.
Pilgrim scarecrow, sail across the seas
Bring Hallows’ Eve to New World colonies.
Scarecrows of the southern states, beware,
The scarecrows of the North don’t like a scare.
So slither serpents, ghoulies go away,
Scarecrows, dress as birds and bugs today.
Go house to house and ask for things to eat
And call this awesome custom trick or treat.
Ohh I proofread my entry so well in Word, then pasted it in here, but retyped the title so it would be in capitals, and missed the typo :-(.
I read right past it! 🙂 I love this – a bit of history thrown in. It could be fun illustrated with history side bars!
This is fantastic! I see a book….
I love the history lesson!
I love the facts you embed in your Halloweensie story. It is always fun to learn new customs.
Great inclusion of history in your entry. Fascinating!
I like the idea that scarecrows would dress as birds and bugs for Halloween! So clever!
Love this info fiction Halloween story! Nice rhyme cool facts. Nice!
So original and educational. Love it Helen!
Sneaky Snake w/c 100
By Jan Suhr
“We’ll make a scary pair
On eerie Halloween night,”
hissed Snake to Pumpkin
“I’ll slither among your seeds.
Poke out my head. Flick my tongue.
Children will scream and screech.
Their candy will be flung.”
“I can’t scare children,” Pumpkin said.
I want them to laugh and grin.”
“You smile wide. I’ll twitch and flick.
Make them jump and bump and spin.”
Snake’s plan was almost perfect
except that Pumpkin’s strands,
were tangly and choky.
He became a twisted band.
“Come here children,” Pumpkin smiled.
“This is a welcoming scene.
Take treats to fill your bags.
Hooray for Pumpkin’s intentions winning over Snake’s!
You did some excellent character work! I love Pumpkin’s kindness and Snake’s conniving nature!
Nice job, Jan. Good prevails in this fun story. Good luck!
I’m glad that Pumpkin’s kindness won out over Snake’s sneaky nature. Nicely done!